《床底下》( Under the bed )
原著:保罗·布莱特(Paul Bright) 绘画:本·科特(Ben Cort)翻译:漪然
【藏书页】
This little tiger book belongs to:
这本图画书的收藏者是∶____
(译注:原文 This little tiger book 是小老虎系列丛书之一的意思,这里省略了国外出版社的丛书系列名,简单译为图画书)
【赠言页】
For Helen,Martin and Katie with love ~ PB
送给海伦、马丁和凯迪,我爱你们。——保罗·布莱特
For Isobel,william,Catherine and Lizzie with love ~ BC
送给伊莎贝尔、威廉、凯瑟琳和丽莎,爱你们。——本·科特
【扉页】
Under the bed
Paul Bright
Ben Cort
床底下
原著∶保罗·布莱特 绘画∶本·科特
1~2
Under the bed there's a smelly shoe,
A piece of jigsaw, green and blue,
Some purple pants, an apple core
...but under the bed there's something more!
在床底下,有一只臭哄哄的鞋子;
有一块拼图积木,带着蓝蓝绿绿的颜色;
还有紫色的裤子和一个苹果核;
可这儿还有更多的东西,就在床底下藏着!
3~4
Under the bed there are bugs and beasts,nibbling crumbs for their midnight feasts, gobbling,squabbling,all night through, and much too busy to think about you.
床底下有好多的妖魔鬼怪,正在享用面包屑做的午夜大餐,它们狼吞虎咽、吵吵闹闹,整夜没个完,忙得顾不上去看你一眼。
(译注:bugs and beasts直译为臭虫和野兽,作者以两个同为B打头的异形生物——昆虫和兽类,泛指孩子害怕的东西,而图画里的怪物也不止限于臭虫和野兽,此处意译为“妖魔鬼怪”,使语句读起来更简明易懂)
5~6
Under the bed is a dragon dozing,
One eye closed, the other closing,
Dreaming of mountains and morning dew,
And much too sleepy to think about you.
床底下有一条打着盹儿的龙,
一只眼睛闭上了,一只眼睛还没睁,
它正做着上天入地的美梦,
美得顾不上去想你一分钟。
(译注:此处原文mountains and morning dew 直译为大山和早晨的露水,此处作者是用同为M打头的两种差异悬殊的东西——山:巨大、坚硬;露水∶微小、柔软——来表示龙的梦境无所不包,这里换用中国成语“上天入地”,同样是无所不包的含意,但精炼了其语句长度,也易为理解)
7~8
Under the bed is an alligator,
Who might be feeling hungry later.
He likes a pizza,or maybe two,
So I don't expect he'll be bothering you.
床底下有一条大鳄鱼,
它也许很快就会想吃点东西,
它很想吃一块匹萨饼,或者来两块也可以,
所以我觉得他不会去打扰你。
9~10
Under the bed is a grizzly bear
(Now,don't ask me how he got there),
Rolling and scratching, like grizzlies do,
And far too lazy to think about you.
床底下有一只美洲熊,
(先别问我,他是怎么跑到了这里)
它又抓又挠,还像一只熊似的打滚儿,
它根本懒得去管你待在哪儿。
(译注:此处 grizzly bear直译为灰熊,实际上是指北美洲西部的大型灰棕熊,一种非常凶猛的熊,图画上的熊也不是灰色的,故这里译为美洲熊,也和下一句“别问我,他是怎么跑到这里”有一个呼应)
11~12
But,under the bed
There's something more...
Something bigger than a stable door,
Horrible,hairy,with warts on his nose,
With knots on his tail,and mould on his toes,
With a big,big mouth and huge,
huge paws...
但是,在床底下,
还藏着一些东西……
一些比城门还高大的东西,
又恶心,又难看,鼻子上长满了疙瘩,
尾巴打着结,脚趾带着铁甲,
他有一张很大很大的嘴巴,还有一对很肥很肥的魔爪……
(译注:stable door是一种上下两截都可以打开的门,通常用于大宅或有围栏的建筑,这里为便于理解和突出其巨大之意,译为城门;paws是动物的爪子,这里为表现出可怕的含义,译为魔爪;huge和big译为汉语都是巨大的意思,为避免使用同样的词,这里将huge译为“很肥”)
13~14
...though he's never been
known to show his claws.
He's under the bed
and he's sucking his thumb!
He calls for his daddy
or his mummy to come!
And he says as he shakes
from his toes to his head:
……可他从来不知道怎么张牙舞爪。
他只是呆坐在床底下,
咬着他的手指甲,
叫着他的爹和妈!
他浑身发抖,结结巴巴:
(译注: show his claws直译为展示他的脚爪,这里以增译法译为张牙舞爪,便于读者理解,也和上文的牙爪两处皆形成呼应; He calls for his daddy or his mummy to come直译为他叫爸爸或者叫妈妈过来,这里采用省略法将语句简化,也更突出小怪物的紧张,后一句And he says as he shakes from his toes to his head也同样以此方法简化句子,使其读起来不拖泥带水,符合这里的紧张氛围)
15~16
"I saw something
frightening inside
the bed!"
“我看见了
好可怕的东西,
就在床上!”
17~18
And out of the room flee the bugs and beasts,
Scattering crumbs from their midnight feasts.
Out of the room flies the dragon dozing,
One eye open and the other one closing.
妖魔鬼怪们一哄而散,
丢下了自己的面包屑大餐,
打盹儿的龙飞出房间,
一只眼睛睁开了,另一只眼睛睁了一半。
(译注:从17到22作者用了五个 out of the room来使语句上下呼应和连贯,但如果全部译为“跑出房间、飞出房间,逃出房间……”一则无法兼顾韵律,二则易使行文呆板,因为英文中的语法可以将 out of the room 前置,而汉语只能将之放在后面,英文五个同样的前置语可以引出不同的下文,而汉语只能采用同样的句子来结尾,于是就显得没有英文那么灵动,这里只得放弃了前两个 out of the room的一致,而后三个 out of the room则全部译为“往外……”,这样也可以用不同的词语做结尾,保证了语句在一致和多变之间的平衡。)
19~20
Out of the room crawls the alligator,
Who might be feeling hungry later.
Out of the room bounds the grizzly bear
(And don't ask me how he got there).
大鳄鱼连滚带爬往外挤,
它也许很快还会想吃点东西。
美洲熊连蹦带跳往外逃,
(别问我,他是怎么跑到了这里)。
21~22
And out of the room runs something more,
Who trips on his tail as he gets to the door,
Who rolls down the stairs falling flat on his nose,
Bashing his bottom and banging his toes,
With a big,big mouth and huge,huge paws...though he never showed even a glimpse of his claws.
They all run out in a terrible stew,
For the frightening thing in the bed is...
还有一个家伙也在往外窜,
他在门口被自己的尾巴绊了个跟头,
他滚下楼梯,摔扁了鼻子上的疙瘩,
摔疼了他的屁股,撞歪了他的脚趾头,
虽然他有一张很大很大的嘴巴,还有很肥很肥的魔爪……可他根本来不及露上一小手。
大家全都拼了老命要冲出大门口,
因为床上的那个好可怕的东西就是……
(译注:falling flat on his nose是“摔扁了鼻子”,这里为韵律也为了和 11~12 呼应,译为摔扁了鼻子上的疙瘩; never showed even a glimpse of his claws直译是展示不了一眼他的脚爪,以glimpse突出时间之短,这里意译为来不及,并用“露一小手”的双关语暗示怪物没有能吓倒谁)
23~24
YOU!
Now there's nobody under the bed any more.But you'd better just look, to be perfectly sure!
你!
现在,床底下再也没有谁藏在那里。
如果你还半信半疑,最好这就去看个仔细!
(译注∶But you'd better just look, to be perfectly sure!直译是“你最好还是去看看,彻底确定一下”,这一句实际上是叫孩子不再怀疑,确信床下已没有怪物,并且sure是和more压韵,结束全文。这里采用语句倒装的译法,将结果(确定)前置,换为原因(怀疑),意思不变,也完成了压韵。)
【广告页】
此处为小老虎丛书广告,未译
【封底】
Under the bed are bugs and beasts,
A dragon, an alligator, eating midnight feasts.
And under the bed is something more -
Something bigger than a stable door -
Horrible,hairy,with warts on his nose,
With knots on his tail,and mould on his toes.
You really won't believe your eyes -
For under the bed is a BIG surprise!
床底下有好多妖魔鬼怪,
有一条龙,还有一条大鳄鱼,吃着自己的午夜大餐。
但是,在床底下,还藏着一些东西……
一些比城门还高大的东西,
又恶心,又难看,鼻子上长满了疙瘩,
尾巴打着结,脚趾带着铁甲。
你肯定会觉得难以置信——
床底下的谜底会让你大吃一惊!
《我就不出去!》(I'm not going out there!)
原著:保罗·布莱特(Paul Bright) 绘画:本·科特(Ben Cort)翻译:漪然
(译注:I'm not going out there直译为我不要从这里出去,there在此其实起到的是一个强化语调的作用,因此最后将这个标题译为“我就不出去”,读起来更干脆有力)
【藏书页】
This little tiger book belongs to:
这本图画书的收藏者是∶____
【赠言页】
For my sister Pam, with love ~ PB
送给我的帕姆姐姐,爱你。——保罗·布莱特
For Ravi,Patrycja and Mehrdad, with love ~ BC
送给雷维、帕特里霞和米哈达,爱你们。——本·科特
【扉页】
I'm not going out there!
Paul Bright
Ben Cort
我就不出去!
原著∶保罗·布莱特 绘画∶本·科特
1~2
I'm underneath the bed,
Hardly poking out my head.
It's a squeeze and hurts my knees,
but I don't care.
Can you guess,do you know,
Why I whisper soft and low?
I'm not going out there!
我在床下发着呆,
偶尔探一探小脑袋,
这儿又挤又窄,还压疼了我的膝盖,
可我根本没当回事儿。
你猜猜,为什么,
我要压低嗓门轻声嘘——
我就不出去!
(译注∶ Hardly意为“几乎不”,但几乎不探脑袋读起来很拗口,而且根据全文看,主角还是会探一探脑袋去看看外面的怪物的,因此这里译为“偶尔”;Can you guess,do you know,这是一句同义反复,在于强调疑问,这里将后句里的“为什么”提前放入,同样加强疑问的语气,同时减短了后句的长度,便于朗读)
3~4
There's a dragon breathing smoke,
Who looks far too fierce to stroke,
And his eyes have got a scary sort of stare.
I hope he doesn't stay,
But he's not what makes me say,
I'm not going out there!
这儿有一头鼻孔喷火的恶龙,
看上去是那么气势汹汹,
它恶狠狠地瞪着两眼,
我真希望它别来添乱,
可我不是为了它才说出这句:
我就不出去!
(译注∶breathing smoke直译是呼吸中冒烟,但画面中龙实际上是在喷火,这里用鼻孔喷火加强了龙的凶猛程度;fierce to stroke直译是要打架的凶相,这里译为气势汹汹,也是带进攻性的凶狠模样的意思,而且读起来很顺口;stay是长住、逗留的意思,小男孩希望恶龙不要留在这里,这里意译为别来添乱,更清楚表达出主角的潜台词,也得以和上一句子押韵)
5~6
There's a ghost who's got no head,
With some toast and chocolate spread,
Which I'm sure he would be very pleased to share.
And though I'd like a bite,
Still I'm keeping out of sight.
I'm not going out there!
这儿有一个无头鬼,
正在做烤面包抹巧克力酱的美味,
它肯定很愿意找个人陪它吃饭,
虽然我也想去吃上一点,
可我的躲藏还要继续∶
我就不出去!
(译注∶美味是为了和上一句的无头鬼押韵而加上的词,在翻译中增加个别词汇称为增译法,增译的原则是不影响原意;keeping out of sight直译是继续留在看不见的地方,这里将out of sight这个状语译为躲藏这个动名词,也是翻译中经常运用的转换法)
7~8
There are witches, old and stubbly,
Round a bath all hot and bubbly,
Busy washing all their dirty underwear,
Hanging knickers out to dry,
But they're not the reason why
I'm not going out there!
这儿有一对又老又丑的巫婆,
为洗完她们的脏衣服使劲地忙活,
围着一个冒热泡泡的大浴盆,
拉起了挂满湿裤头的晾衣绳,
可我也不是为她们才这样决定:
我就不出去!
(译注∶stubbly有残旧、矮小、粗胖的意思,这里只概括地译为丑;原文的二、三句为行文读着通顺在译文里调换了一下次序,Hanging knickers out to dry直译是把灯笼裤挂出去晾干,这里根据画面增加了晾衣绳一词,以和上一句的大浴盆对仗和押韵)
9~10
There are monsters of all sizes,
Doing ballet exercises,
Wearing tutus, with pink ribbons in their hair.
And though they look quite charming,
There is something else alarming.
I'm not going out there!
这儿有大大小小的怪物,
正在一起练习跳芭蕾舞,
它们穿着短裙,系着粉红蝴蝶结,
可虽然它们是那么有趣,
这儿还有一些别的东西叫人恐惧。
我就不出去!
11~12
Then there's suddenly a shrieking
And a squealing and a squeaking,
Loud enough to give the boldest beast a scare.
Now I'm shaking and I'm quaking,
There's a noise of something breaking.
I'm not going out there!
这时,忽然传来一声尖叫,
紧接着,是一阵大吼,一阵大闹,
声音大得足够让最凶猛的野兽抱头鼠窜。
我牙齿打架,我全身打颤,
发出叫声的家伙肯定已经两眼发绿。
我就不出去!
(译注∶shaking和quaking都是晃动震动的意思,只是程度上有差异,故这里增加了牙齿和全身的定语来表现程度的不同;breaking在这里修饰的 something 不是一个无生命的东西,因此breaking在此不是碎裂而是崩溃的意思,a noise of something breaking意为一个来自崩溃了的某某的声音,这里译为“两眼发绿”来表述崩溃、歇斯底里的意思,也和下文押韵)
13~14
The dragon turns quite pale,
From his nostrils to his tail,
Feels a trembling in his tum:
'On,I really want my mum!'
'Mustn't panic!'gasps the ghost.
'Keep your head! Don't lose your toast!
I can haunt some other day,
Now I need to get away!'
恶龙吓得全身发软,
从鼻头一直软到尾巴尖,
它的吼声带着哭腔:
“噢,我想要我的娘!”
“别紧张!”无头鬼喘着气说,
“头脑要冷静!别把烤面包丢了!
我还是改天再下厨房,
现在我要去别处逛逛!”
(译注∶pale是苍白而无力的意思,画面中龙的身体是绿的,没有变白,故这里译为发软;trembling是抖动的意思,这里译为哭腔,和下文押韵,也便于理解; haunt是幽灵出没的意思,这里按照无头鬼之前出没的地方译为下厨房,也和前句里的烤面包呼应)
15~16
The witches spill their washing
And go splishing, splashing, sploshing,
Soaked and soapy, slipping, sliding,
Searching for a place to hide in.
Hide from what? They'll soon find out!
They can hear it scream and shout,
And it doesn't sound like fun.
Better hurry! Better run!
巫婆们把洗衣盆打翻了,
淅哩哩、哗啦啦、噗通通……
她们湿嗒嗒,滑溜溜,贼兮兮,急匆匆,
眼巴巴地想找个地方躲一躲,
躲什么?马上你就知道了!
听听那一通鬼哭和狼嚎,
也听得出情况不太妙。
赶紧跑!赶紧逃!
(译注∶ 这里作者连用了八个S打头的词,splishing, splashing, sploshing, Soaked, soapy, slipping, sliding, Searching,其中六个以ing结尾,在语气上有种说快板的感觉,一气呵成,突出了这一段的紧张气氛,如果直译基本上不可能达到这个效果,因此这里试以淅哩哩、哗啦啦、噗通通、湿嗒嗒、滑溜溜、贼兮兮、急匆匆、眼巴巴这八个叠语,来表现那种连珠炮似的语气,同时也不背离原文的含义)
17~18
The monsters don't feel brave,
But they know how to behave,
So they dance off in a row,
Each one on his tippy-toe.
Then all that I can hear,
Very loud and very near,
Is the thing that made them flee.
Do you know what it could be?
怪物们全都心惊胆战,
不过它们知道该怎么办,
它们排成一串往外溜,
个个踮着歪歪扭扭的脚趾头。
现在我只能听到一个声音,
震耳欲聋,越来越近,
就是它把妖魔鬼怪全都吓退,
你能猜到那个家伙是谁?
19~20
It's got teeth that can gnash,
It's got eyes that can flash,
I can hear it grumping, jumping,
Hear it stamping, stomping,thumping.
It's got hands that can snatch,
It's got nails that can scratch.
And it's ready for a fight,
So we're squeezed and squashed up tight!
那家伙有格格作响的牙齿,
那家伙有会喷火的眼珠子,
我听见那家伙在大吼大叫,在上窜下跳,
我听见那家伙在挥舞拳头,在使劲跺脚;
那家伙有会掐人的双手,
那家伙有会抓人的指甲,
那家伙随时准备和你打一架,
我们都被吓得紧紧缩成了一个球!
(译注∶这里作者又连用了五个带ing的词grumping, jumping, stamping, stomping, thumping,其中 stamping, stomping,都是跺脚的意思,这里都以四字语句译出,以体现原文的对仗和呼应; squeezed 和 squashed都是紧缩在一起的意思,这里是用两个近义词来做反复强调,增加“球”的状语,既是为了押韵,也是增加语句的强调之意)
21~22
There it is - my sister Kate!
And she's in a frightful state,
Making shrieking sounds and leaping in the air.
By now she must know who
Put the spider in her shoe...
那就是——我的姐姐凯蒂!
她正在大发脾气,
她尖声大叫,一蹦三尺高,
她要立刻知道,
是谁把蜘蛛放进了她的鞋子里……
23~24
...I'm not going out there!
……我就不出去!
【广告页】
此处为小老虎丛书广告,未译
【封底】
I'm underneath the bed,
Hardly poking out my head.
It's a squeeze and hurts my knees,
but I don't care.
Can you guess,do you know,
Why I whisper soft and low?
I'm not going out there!
Watch out! Something out there is very scary.
And it's coming this way...
"With bright,colourful illustrarions and lively, humorous rhyming text, perfect for reading aloud. "Publishing News
我在床下发着呆,
偶尔探一探小脑袋,
这儿又挤又窄,还压疼了我的膝盖,
可我根本没当回事儿。
你猜猜,为什么,
我要压低嗓门轻声嘘——
我就不出去!
你往外瞧,外面有些东西真吓人,
它正在向这边靠近……
“明亮多彩的图画配合生动幽默的韵文,非常适合大声朗读。”——英国《出版新闻》杂志