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【翻译大赛NO.2】吉普林《为什么故事集》——好奇的象宝宝 (6.11修订)

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楼主:晃晃悠悠 2009-06-09

好奇的象宝宝
小朋友们,我跟你们说哦,很久很久以前,在远古的时代,大象并没有长鼻子。那时候,他们只有一砣黑黑的、比一双鞋大不了多少的鼻子。别看这砣鼻子也会左晃晃右晃晃,可甭想用它来捡掉在地上的东西 !

就在那很久很久以前的时候,有一头大象,哦,不对,是一头小象,一头无敌好奇的小象宝宝,他总是有好多好多的问题要问大人。小象住在非洲,他的好奇心快把非洲都装满啦!。

小象的阿姨是鸵鸟,它问鸵鸟阿姨:
“鸵鸟鸵鸟,你的尾巴上为什么会长羽毛呢?”
鸵鸟阿姨被问得很不高兴,打了小象的屁股,她的爪子硬硬的,打得小象好疼!

小象的叔叔是高个子长脖鹿,它问长脖鹿叔叔:
“长脖鹿,你的身上为什么会长斑呢?”
长脖鹿叔叔被问得很不高兴,踢了小象的屁股,他的蹄子硬硬的,踢得小象好疼!

但是小象的好奇心永无止尽。他还有一个胖胖的阿姨,叫做河马。小象问河马:
“河马河马,你的眼睛为什么是红色的呢?”
河马阿姨被问得很不高兴,她也拍了小象的屁股,她的前掌又肥又大,拍得小象好疼!

他还有一个毛茸茸的叔叔叫做狒狒。小象问狒狒:
“狒狒狒狒,你为什么这么爱吃蜜瓜呢?”
狒狒叔叔被问得很不高兴,一巴掌拍在小象的屁股上。他的爪子尖利利,挠得小象好疼!

但是小象的好奇心无法停止,他还是有无数的问题要问大人。凡是他看见的、听见的、闻到的、摸到的,他都要问个“为什么”。整个非洲大陆都回响着他的“为什么”,所有的叔叔阿姨都被他问得很不高兴,他们都打了他的屁股。小象的屁股又红又肿,可是他还是没有办法停止自己的好奇心,也不能停止他的那些“为什么”。

在一个春光明媚的早晨,好奇的象宝宝想到了一个他之前从来没有问过的好问题。他问道:
“鳄鱼的晚餐吃什么呢?”
“嘘——————————————————”
所有人都觉得这个问题好可怕,立刻惊慌地阻止他说下去。他们二话不说,又打起了他的屁股,连续打了好久好久。

好久好久过后,大人们不再打象宝宝的屁股了。象宝宝跑进了“等等一会儿”荆棘林,遇见了“咕噜咕噜”鸟。他对“咕噜咕噜”鸟说:
“我爸爸打我屁股,我妈妈打我屁股,所有的叔叔阿姨也打我屁股。他们都说我太好奇了,要打屁股。可是我就是想知道,鳄鱼的晚餐到底是什么呢?”

不会撒谎的“咕噜咕噜”鸟悲伤的说:
“去吧,去吧!在‘发烧’树林旁,有一条灰绿色的、泥泞的大河,叫做‘黏巴巴’河,你能在那儿找到你的答案。”

第二天,春天走了,夏天来了。这只好奇的象宝宝带上了一百斤软软的香蕉、一百斤甜甜的甘蔗和十七个绿油油的西瓜,跟家人告别 :
“再见了!在‘发烧’树林旁,有一条灰绿色的、泥泞的大河,叫做‘黏巴巴’河,我要去那儿问问鳄鱼的晚餐吃什么。”

这一次,他的家人们又打了打他的屁股:
“祝你好运,小象!”
他说:
“谢谢!”
然后他很有礼貌的请大家不要再打他的屁股了。

然后他就出发了。天气有点热,但是还好。他吃了很多西瓜,但是把西瓜皮扔得满地都是。没有办法, 因为他根本就不能把那些掉到地上的东西捡起来。

他从格拉汉邦走到了金伯利城,又从金伯利城走到了卡玛邦。他从卡玛邦的北部,一直往东走,边走边吃着他的西瓜,直到最后他来到了灰绿色的、泥泞的‘黏巴巴’河旁。那条河就在一片‘发烧’树林边,跟“咕噜咕噜”鸟说的一模一样。

小朋友们,现在你们应该知道了,直到这个星期的这一天的这一刻为止,好奇的象宝宝其实从来都没见过鳄鱼长什么样,他其实连鳄鱼是什么东西都不知道。他只是很好奇,好奇心把他带到了鳄鱼池边。

他先看见岩石上趴着的一只双色石莽蛇,于是便有礼貌的问道:
“对不起,打扰了!请问一下,您在这个乱糟糟的地方有没有见过一位叫做‘鳄鱼’的先生啊?”

“你问我有没有见过鳄鱼?” 那只双色石莽蛇喉咙沙哑,声音好可怕,他说:

“那么,让我听听你接下来要问什么?”

“哦,真是不好意思。”小象很有礼貌地说:“能麻烦您告诉我一下那位鳄鱼先生晚餐都吃什么吗?”

双色石莽飞快地从岩石上爬了下来,他用他那巨大的尾巴用力地打小象的屁股。

小象想:

“真奇怪。妈妈爸爸叔叔阿姨还有我的胖阿姨河马和毛茸茸叔叔狒狒都打我屁股,骂我太好奇。可能他也是一样。”

所以他很有礼貌地对双色石莽蛇说了声“谢谢”,帮助他重新爬上了岩石,又继续向前走去。天气有点热,但是还好。小象还是一路吃着他带来的西瓜,把西瓜皮丢得满地都是。因为,你们也知道,没有办法, 他根本就不能把那些掉到地上的东西捡起来。他就这样 不停地走啊走啊,直到了灰绿色的、泥泞的‘黏巴巴’河的尽头,他踩到了一根看起来跟一截木头一样的东西。

哎呀!那可是真的鳄鱼呀!小朋友们,你们看,鳄鱼会睁一只眼闭一只眼那样眨眼睛!

“抱歉打扰了!”小象很有礼貌地问道,“请问您知道在这个乱糟糟的地方有没有一位叫做‘鳄鱼’的先生?”

这时,鳄鱼又眨了眨眼。他的半边尾巴都从泥巴河里抬了起来。小象有礼貌地往后退了退,他可不想再被这位先生打屁股。

“到这边来,小朋友……”鳄鱼说,“你干嘛这么问呢?”

“哦,真是不好意思。”小象有礼貌地说,“我爸爸打了我屁股,我妈妈打了我屁股,还有我那高大的阿姨鸵鸟、高大的叔叔长脖鹿,他们用力地踢了我的屁股。还有我的胖阿姨河马、我的毛茸茸叔叔狒狒,就连刚才在河边遇见的那条双色石蟒蛇也要打我屁股。他的尾巴又宽又大,打得比谁都重,我的屁股到现在还疼呢!所以,如果您也和他们一样的话,我可不不会过去再被打一次屁股了!”

“快过来吧!因为我就是鳄鱼呀!”说着,鳄鱼流下了著名的鳄鱼的眼泪来证明他的身份。

顿时,小象觉得呼吸急促,他喘息着跪在了岸边,他欢呼着:
“原来你就是我一直寻找的那只鳄鱼呀!我找了你好久呀!你能告诉我,你的晚餐吃什么吗?”

“到这边来,小朋友……”鳄鱼说,“让我悄悄地告诉你。”

小象于是把头凑近了鳄鱼那张臭哄哄的大嘴,贴近了鳄鱼尖尖的牙齿。鳄鱼飞快的咬住了他的鼻子——直到那个星期的那一天的那一小时的那一分钟的那一秒为止,小象的鼻子还是小小的,比一双鞋大不了多少。

“让我想想,让我想想……”鳄鱼说,就像这样,从牙缝里挤着说话,“我觉得今天的晚餐我想先吃一头小象。”

我们的小象从来没有被咬过,他很生气地从鼻子里挤着说话,“放开我,放开我,把我弄‘婷’啦!”
这时,那条双色石蟒蛇赶过来了。他对小象大喊道:

“我说朋友,我建议你赶快用你最大的力气把自己拉出来。不然你的这位穿着硬皮夹克的老熟人很快就会把你生吞了!到时候你连‘救命’都来不及喊!”

于是小象赶快一屁股坐在地上,把自己的鼻子往岸上拉呀,拉呀,拉呀,拉呀,拉呀,拉着拉着鼻子都被拉长了。鳄鱼沉到水里,尾巴像发动机一样快速拍打着,他把小象的鼻子往水里拉呀,拉呀,拉呀,拉呀,拉呀。

于是象宝宝的鼻子被一点一点一点地拉长了。这个可怜的小朋友,四肢着地,使出了吃奶的力气把自己的鼻子往岸上拉。他的鼻子被越拉越长了。那鳄鱼使劲儿摆动着他的尾巴,用尽全力把小象的鼻子往水里拉呀拉呀拉呀拉呀,每拉一下,小象的鼻子就更长一点,快把小象给痛死了!

这时小象突然感觉脚下打滑,他挤着他那已经快五尺长的鼻子说:“你太残‘隐’啦……”

这时那条双色石蟒蛇用自己的身体在小象的后腿上系了个死结,他对小象大喊道:
“我说这位冲动而幼稚的旅行者啊,从现在开始,我们要积极地战斗了。不然你这位穿着钢盔铁甲的大哥可会毁了你的人生呀!”

于是双色石蟒蛇使劲地拉呀拉呀,小象也使劲地拉呀拉呀,鳄鱼也使劲地拉呀拉呀。但是双色石蟒蛇和小象用尽了最大的力气,所以最后他们“扑腾”一下从鳄鱼嘴里把象鼻子拉了出来。鳄鱼重重地掉到了水里,那“轰隆”的巨响传遍了‘黏巴巴’河的上上下下。

小象也重重地摔到了地上。但是他没有忘记有礼貌的感谢他的朋友:

“谢谢你的帮助,双色石莽蛇!”

然后他把他那被拉得长长的、肿得高高的鼻子用芭蕉叶包了起来,举在伟大的、灰绿色的、泥泞的‘黏巴巴’河上,晾一晾。

“你在干什么?”双色石蟒蛇问他。

小象回答他说:
“不好意思,我的鼻子现在严重变形了,我要把它晾一晾,等它变回原来又小又短的样子。”

“那你就等吧!可能要等很久很久!”双色石蟒蛇说,“看来有人还不知道自己刚捡了个宝呢!”

小象在河岸边等了三天,他的鼻子却一点都没有变小。但是每天盯着自己的鼻子看,却让他差点变成了对眼儿。小朋友们,你们应该看出来了吧,那鳄鱼把小象的鼻子拉成了今天所有大象都有的那种长鼻子了。
第三天快结束的时候,一只小蚊子飞到了小象的肩膀上,给他咬了一个大包。不自觉地,小象举起鼻子一甩,鼻尖正落在小蚊子站着的地方,把他给打死了。

“长鼻子优点之一!”双色石蟒蛇在一旁大叫 “你看,短鼻子就干不了这个吧!接下来你可以试着吃点东西了。”

不自觉地,小象把长鼻子往前面一伸,伸到地上扯起了一把青草,又把青草上的泥在前腿上擦了擦,然后就直接送到自己嘴里去啦!

“长鼻子优点之二!”双色石蟒蛇又在一旁大叫“你看,短鼻子就干不了这个吧!你觉不觉得这太阳很晒天气很热呀?”

“对啊,是有点儿。”小象说。
不自觉地,他把长鼻子伸进了伟大的、灰绿色的、泥泞的‘黏巴巴’河里,捞起一堆新鲜的河泥,‘啪啪’敷在了头顶上和耳朵后面,顿时形成了天然的遮阳泥伞,凉快极了。

“长鼻子优点之三!”双色石蟒蛇在一旁大叫“你看,短鼻子就干不了这个吧!接下来呢,你想不想再感受一下被打屁股的滋味呀?”

“不好意思,你说什么?!”小象说“那个我可不喜欢!”

“那么你想打别人的屁股么?”双色石蟒蛇问道。

小象说:“这个我当然喜欢喽!”

“其实,”双色石蟒蛇说“你的新长鼻子就能帮你打别人的屁股。”

“谢谢你告诉我!”小象说,“我想现在是时候回家见我的家人,然后试试这个办法了。”

于是小象晃着他的长鼻子穿越非洲,回到了他的家。当他想吃水果的时候,他再也不用像以前那样等着它们从树上掉下来了。只用把鼻子伸一伸到树上,就可以摘到新鲜的水果。当他想吃青草的时候,他再也不用像以前那样弯下腰、屈下前膝趴在地上了。只用把鼻子伸一伸到地上,就可以吃到芬芳的小草。当身边有蚊子的时候,他从树上折下一根树枝当他的苍蝇拍。怕太阳晒的时候,他就为自己做一顶软软的、凉凉的泥帽子戴上。当他在那片神秘的非洲大陆感到孤单的时候,他就用那长鼻子为自己唱歌。那声音,比好几支管乐队合起来还洪亮呢!

为了证实双色石蟒蛇说的话,他还特意绕了一圈找到了一只不是他亲戚的河马,狠狠地用长鼻子打了打她的屁股。除此之外,他还捡起了那些在去‘黏巴巴’河的路上落下的瓜皮——他可是一只讲卫生的大动物。

在一个月黑风高的夜晚,他总算回到了他温暖的家,见到了亲爱的家人。他故意把长鼻子收了起来,并问候了大家。他的家人很高兴他能回来,马上说道:
“你这个好奇的小孩,赶快翘起屁股准备挨揍吧!”

“嘿嘿”,小象坏笑道,“你们懂什么叫做‘打屁股’嘛?我才是真正的‘打屁股专家’。让我来秀给你们看看吧!”

于是他放下了他的长鼻子,把他的两个兄弟打得稀里哗啦的。

“嗷,香蕉banana!”他们都惊讶得不行了,“你从哪儿学来的这一套?!你的鼻子怎么变成这样了?”

“我换了一副新鼻子。”小象说,“是伟大的、灰绿色的、泥泞的‘黏巴巴’河里的鳄鱼给我的。我问他他的晚餐吃什么,他就给了我这个。”

“看上去很丑么!”小象那毛茸茸的叔叔狒狒说道。

“是有点丑。”小象说,“不过很有用哦!”说着,他就用鼻子卷起了毛茸茸的狒狒叔叔的一条腿,把他在空中甩了几圈之后,扔进了黄蜂窝里。

后来这只淘气的小象把他的所有的家人的屁股都打了个遍,直到他们都开始崇拜他,并且温柔地对待他。他用长鼻子把鸵鸟阿姨尾巴上的毛拔掉了;还拉着长脖鹿叔叔的后腿,拖着他走过了满布荆棘的树林。后来他还对他的胖阿姨河马大喊大叫,并在她午睡的时候对准她的耳朵吹泡泡。但是他决不让任何人去侵犯那只曾经帮助过他的“咕噜咕噜”鸟。

再后来呢,事情越闹越大了,所有的大象都跑去“发烧”树林边的伟大的、灰绿色的、泥泞的‘黏巴巴’河边,找鳄鱼换鼻子。当这些大象都换回了新的长鼻子的时候,谁都不敢打谁的屁股了。所以从那个时候开始,亲爱的小朋友们,所有你们见过或没见过的大象们,都有了像‘好奇象宝宝’那样的长鼻子了。一模一样的哦!

#2 晃晃悠悠 2009-06-09

翻完后才发现这边已经有人翻过了 表情占位:s:138

不管怎么样,很喜欢这套Just So Stories,也来凑个热闹吧

首次翻童话,望大家多多指点   表情占位:s:135

#3 蛋黄派 2009-06-10

这真是个有趣的故事!! 表情占位:s:135  表情占位:s:135

#4 鹏鹏 2009-06-10

语言风趣幽默,通俗易懂,很有特色。

#5 鹏鹏 2009-06-10

好像几个版本有些不同,能把原文传上来看看吗?

#6 晃晃悠悠 2009-06-10

好的呀, 原文如下:

The Elephant's Child

IN the High and Far-Off Times the Elephant, O Best Beloved, had no trunk. He had only a blackish, bulgy nose, as big as a boot, that he could wriggle about from side to side; but he couldn't pick up things with it. But there was one Elephant--a new Elephant--an Elephant's Child--who was full of 'satiable curtiosity, and that means he asked ever so many questions. And he lived in Africa, and he filled all Africa with his 'satiable curtiosities. He asked his tall aunt, the Ostrich, why her tail-feathers grew just so, and his tall aunt the Ostrich spanked him with her hard, hard claw. He asked his tall uncle, the Giraffe, what made his skin spotty, and his tall uncle, the Giraffe, spanked him with his hard, hard hoof. And still he was full of 'satiable curtiosity! He asked his broad aunt, the Hippopotamus, why her eyes were red, and his broad aunt, the Hippopotamus, spanked him with her broad, broad hoof; and he asked his hairy uncle, the Baboon, why melons tasted just so, and his hairy uncle, the Baboon, spanked him with his hairy, hairy paw. And still he was full of 'satiable curtiosity! He asked questions about everything that he saw, or heard, or felt, or smelt, or touched, and all his uncles and his aunts spanked him. And still he was full of 'satiable curtiosity!

One fine morning in the middle of the Precession of the Equinoxes this 'satiable Elephant's Child asked a new fine question that he had never asked before. He asked, 'What does the Crocodile have for dinner?' Then everybody said, 'Hush!' in a loud and dretful tone, and they spanked him immediately and directly, without stopping, for a long time.

By and by, when that was finished, he came upon Kolokolo Bird sitting in the middle of a wait-a-bit thorn-bush, and he said, 'My father has spanked me, and my mother has spanked me; all my aunts and uncles have spanked me for my 'satiable curtiosity; and still I want to know what the Crocodile has for dinner!'

Then Kolokolo Bird said, with a mournful cry, 'Go to the banks of the great grey-green, greasy Limpopo River, all set about with fever-trees, and find out.'

That very next morning, when there was nothing left of the Equinoxes, because the Precession had preceded according to precedent, this 'satiable Elephant's Child took a hundred pounds of bananas (the little short red kind), and a hundred pounds of sugar-cane (the long purple kind), and seventeen melons (the greeny-crackly kind), and said to all his dear families, 'Goodbye. I am going to the great grey-green, greasy Limpopo River, all set about with fever-trees, to find out what the Crocodile has for dinner.' And they all spanked him once more for luck, though he asked them most politely to stop.

Then he went away, a little warm, but not at all astonished, eating melons, and throwing the rind about, because he could not pick it up.

He went from Graham's Town to Kimberley, and from Kimberley to Khama's Country, and from Khama's Country he went east by north, eating melons all the time, till at last he came to the banks of the great grey-green, greasy Limpopo River, all set about with fever-trees, precisely as Kolokolo Bird had said.

Now you must know and understand, O Best Beloved, that till that very week, and day, and hour, and minute, this 'satiable Elephant's Child had never seen a Crocodile, and did not know what one was like. It was all his 'satiable curtiosity.

The first thing that he found was a Bi-Coloured-Python-Rock-Snake curled round a rock.

''Scuse me,' said the Elephant's Child most politely, 'but have you seen such a thing as a Crocodile in these promiscuous parts?'

'Have I seen a Crocodile?' said the Bi-Coloured-Python-Rock-Snake, in a voice of dretful scorn. 'What will you ask me next?'

''Scuse me,' said the Elephant's Child, 'but could you kindly tell me what he has for dinner?'

Then the Bi-Coloured-Python-Rock-Snake uncoiled himself very quickly from the rock, and spanked the Elephant's Child with his scalesome, flailsome tail.

'That is odd,' said the Elephant's Child, 'because my father and my mother, and my uncle and my aunt, not to mention my other aunt, the Hippopotamus, and my other uncle, the Baboon, have all spanked me for my 'satiable curtiosity--and I suppose this is the same thing.

So he said good-bye very politely to the Bi-Coloured-Python-Rock-Snake, and helped to coil him up on the rock again, and went on, a little warm, but not at all astonished, eating melons, and throwing the rind about, because he could not pick it up, till he trod on what he thought was a log of wood at the very edge of the great grey-green, greasy Limpopo River, all set about with fever-trees.

But it was really the Crocodile, O Best Beloved, and the Crocodile winked one eye--like this!

''Scuse me,' said the Elephant's Child most politely, 'but do you happen to have seen a Crocodile in these promiscuous parts?'

Then the Crocodile winked the other eye, and lifted half his tail out of the mud; and the Elephant's Child stepped back most politely, because he did not wish to be spanked again.

'Come hither, Little One,' said the Crocodile. 'Why do you ask such things?'

''Scuse me,' said the Elephant's Child most politely, 'but my father has spanked me, my mother has spanked me, not to mention my tall aunt, the Ostrich, and my tall uncle, the Giraffe, who can kick ever so hard, as well as my broad aunt, the Hippopotamus, and my hairy uncle, the Baboon, and including the Bi-Coloured-Python-Rock-Snake, with the scalesome, flailsome tail, just up the bank, who spanks harder than any of them; and so, if it's quite all the same to you, I don't want to be spanked any more.'

'Come hither, Little One,' said the Crocodile, 'for I am the Crocodile,' and he wept crocodile-tears to show it was quite true.

Then the Elephant's Child grew all breathless, and panted, and kneeled down on the bank and said, 'You are the very person I have been looking for all these long days. Will you please tell me what you have for dinner?'

'Come hither, Little One,' said the Crocodile, 'and I'll whisper.'

Then the Elephant's Child put his head down close to the Crocodile's musky, tusky mouth, and the Crocodile caught him by his little nose, which up to that very week, day, hour, and minute, had been no bigger than a boot, though much more useful.

'I think, said the Crocodile--and he said it between his teeth, like this--'I think to-day I will begin with Elephant's Child!'

At this, O Best Beloved, the Elephant's Child was much annoyed, and he said, speaking through his nose, like this, 'Led go! You are hurtig be!'

Then the Bi-Coloured-Python-Rock-Snake scuffled down from the bank and said, 'My young friend, if you do not now, immediately and instantly, pull as hard as ever you can, it is my opinion that your acquaintance in the large-pattern leather ulster' (and by this he meant the Crocodile) 'will jerk you into yonder limpid stream before you can say Jack Robinson.'

This is the way Bi-Coloured-Python-Rock-Snakes always talk.

Then the Elephant's Child sat back on his little haunches, and pulled, and pulled, and pulled, and his nose began to stretch. And the Crocodile floundered into the water, making it all creamy with great sweeps of his tail, and he pulled, and pulled, and pulled.

And the Elephant's Child's nose kept on stretching; and the Elephant's Child spread all his little four legs and pulled, and pulled, and pulled, and his nose kept on stretching; and the Crocodile threshed his tail like an oar, and he pulled, and pulled, and pulled, and at each pull the Elephant's Child's nose grew longer and longer--and it hurt him hijjus!

Then the Elephant's Child felt his legs slipping, and he said through his nose, which was now nearly five feet long, 'This is too butch for be!'

Then the Bi-Coloured-Python-Rock-Snake came down from the bank, and knotted himself in a double-clove-hitch round the Elephant's Child's hind legs, and said, 'Rash and inexperienced traveller, we will now seriously devote ourselves to a little high tension, because if we do not, it is my impression that yonder self-propelling man-of-war with the armour-plated upper deck' (and by this, O Best Beloved, he meant the Crocodile), 'will permanently vitiate your future career.

That is the way all Bi-Coloured-Python-Rock-Snakes always talk.

So he pulled, and the Elephant's Child pulled, and the Crocodile pulled; but the Elephant's Child and the Bi-Coloured-Python-Rock-Snake pulled hardest; and at last the Crocodile let go of the Elephant's Child's nose with a plop that you could hear all up and down the Limpopo.

Then the Elephant's Child sat down most hard and sudden; but first he was careful to say 'Thank you' to the Bi-Coloured-Python-Rock-Snake; and next he was kind to his poor pulled nose, and wrapped it all up in cool banana leaves, and hung it in the great grey-green, greasy Limpopo to cool.

'What are you doing that for?' said the Bi-Coloured-Python-Rock-Snake.

''Scuse me,' said the Elephant's Child, 'but my nose is badly out of shape, and I am waiting for it to shrink.

'Then you will have to wait a long time, said the Bi-Coloured-Python-Rock-Snake. 'Some people do not know what is good for them.'

The Elephant's Child sat there for three days waiting for his nose to shrink. But it never grew any shorter, and, besides, it made him squint. For, O Best Beloved, you will see and understand that the Crocodile had pulled it out into a really truly trunk same as all Elephants have to-day.

At the end of the third day a fly came and stung him on the shoulder, and before he knew what he was doing he lifted up his trunk and hit that fly dead with the end of it.

''Vantage number one!' said the Bi-Coloured-Python-Rock-Snake. 'You couldn't have done that with a mere-smear nose. Try and eat a little now.'

Before he thought what he was doing the Elephant's Child put out his trunk and plucked a large bundle of grass, dusted it clean against his fore-legs, and stuffed it into his own mouth.

'Vantage number two!' said the Bi-Coloured-Python-Rock-Snake. 'You couldn't have done that with a mear-smear nose. Don't you think the sun is very hot here?'

'It is,' said the Elephant's Child, and before he thought what he was doing he schlooped up a schloop of mud from the banks of the great grey-green, greasy Limpopo, and slapped it on his head, where it made a cool schloopy-sloshy mud-cap all trickly behind his ears.

'Vantage number three!' said the Bi-Coloured-Python-Rock-Snake. 'You couldn't have done that with a mere-smear nose. Now how do you feel about being spanked again?'

''Scuse me,' said the Elephant's Child, 'but I should not like it at all.'

'How would you like to spank somebody?' said the Bi- Coloured-Python-Rock-Snake.

'I should like it very much indeed,' said the Elephant's Child.

'Well,' said the Bi-Coloured-Python-Rock-Snake, 'you will find that new nose of yours very useful to spank people with.'

'Thank you,' said the Elephant's Child, 'I'll remember that; and now I think I'll go home to all my dear families and try.'

So the Elephant's Child went home across Africa frisking and whisking his trunk. When he wanted fruit to eat he pulled fruit down from a tree, instead of waiting for it to fall as he used to do. When he wanted grass he plucked grass up from the ground, instead of going on his knees as he used to do. When the flies bit him he broke off the branch of a tree and used it as fly-whisk; and he made himself a new, cool, slushy-squshy mud-cap whenever the sun was hot. When he felt lonely walking through Africa he sang to himself down his trunk, and the noise was louder than several brass bands.

He went especially out of his way to find a broad Hippopotamus (she was no relation of his), and he spanked her very hard, to make sure that the Bi-Coloured-Python-Rock-Snake had spoken the truth about his new trunk. The rest of the time he picked up the melon rinds that he had dropped on his way to the Limpopo--for he was a Tidy Pachyderm.

One dark evening he came back to all his dear families, and he coiled up his trunk and said, 'How do you do?' They were very glad to see him, and immediately said, 'Come here and be spanked for your 'satiable curtiosity.'

'Pooh,' said the Elephant's Child. 'I don't think you peoples know anything about spanking; but I do, and I'll show you.' Then he uncurled his trunk and knocked two of his dear brothers head over heels.

'O Bananas!' said they, 'where did you learn that trick, and what have you done to your nose?'

'I got a new one from the Crocodile on the banks of the great grey-green, greasy Limpopo River,' said the Elephant's Child. 'I asked him what he had for dinner, and he gave me this to keep.'

'It looks very ugly,' said his hairy uncle, the Baboon.

'It does,' said the Elephant's Child. 'But it's very useful,' and he picked up his hairy uncle, the Baboon, by one hairy leg, and hove him into a hornet's nest.

Then that bad Elephant's Child spanked all his dear families for a long time, till they were very warm and greatly astonished. He pulled out his tall Ostrich aunt's tail-feathers; and he caught his tall uncle, the Giraffe, by the hind-leg, and dragged him through a thorn-bush; and he shouted at his broad aunt, the Hippopotamus, and blew bubbles into her ear when she was sleeping in the water after meals; but he never let any one touch Kolokolo Bird.

At last things grew so exciting that his dear families went off one by one in a hurry to the banks of the great grey-green, greasy Limpopo River, all set about with fever-trees, to borrow new noses from the Crocodile. When they came back nobody spanked anybody any more; and ever since that day, O Best Beloved, all the Elephants you will ever see, besides all those that you won't, have trunks precisely like the trunk of the 'satiable Elephant's Child.  表情占位:s:135  表情占位:s:135

#7 大手拉小手 2009-06-10

引用:
引用第1楼晃晃悠悠于2009-06-10 04:40发表的 :
翻完后才发现这边已经有人翻过了 表情占位:s:138

不管怎么样,很喜欢这套Just So Stories,也来凑个热闹吧

首次翻童话,望大家多多指点   表情占位:s:135
翻得挺好的,原来翻的那个是数卷残遍吧,像个老学究,都繁体字

#8 鹏鹏 2009-06-10

小象住在非洲,整个非洲都是它的好奇心。
And he lived in Africa, and he filled all Africa with his 'satiable curtiosities.
我觉得这一句有点不通。

#9 鹏鹏 2009-06-10

长脖鹿叔叔被问得很不高兴,打了小象的屁股,他的蹄子硬硬的,打得小象好疼!
这句打改成踢好一些。

#10 鹏鹏 2009-06-10

他的巴掌毛茸茸,小象的屁股被扎的好疼!
这句有点不合逻辑,改成尖尖的爪子怎么样?

#11 鹏鹏 2009-06-10

所有人都立刻阻止他说下去,并直接打起了他的屁股,连续打了好多好多个小时。
Then everybody said, 'Hush!' in a loud and dretful tone, and they spanked him immediately and directly, without stopping, for a long time.
这句in a loud and dretful tone没译出来,我觉得这两个词挺重要的。连续打了好多好多个小时。改成好久好久好一点,个人感觉连续打了好多好多个小时有点残忍。

#12 晃晃悠悠 2009-06-10

先谢谢楼上的
这就来改!

#13 晃晃悠悠 2009-06-10

改好了:

1. 小象住在非洲,整个非洲都是它的好奇心。
And he lived in Africa, and he filled all Africa with his 'satiable curtiosities.
我觉得这一句有点不通。

改成了:他的好奇心能把整个非洲都装满。

2. 长脖鹿叔叔被问得很不高兴,打了小象的屁股,他的蹄子硬硬的,打得小象好疼!
这句打改成踢好一些。

改成了: 长脖鹿叔叔被问得很不高兴,踢了小象的屁股,他的蹄子硬硬的,踢得小象好疼

3. 他的巴掌毛茸茸,小象的屁股被扎的好疼!

改成了:他的巴掌尖利利,小象的屁股被扎的好疼

4. 所有人都立刻阻止他说下去,并直接打起了他的屁股,连续打了好多好多个小时。
Then everybody said, 'Hush!' in a loud and dretful tone, and they spanked him immediately and directly, without stopping, for a long time.
这句in a loud and dretful tone没译出来,我觉得这两个词挺重要的。连续打了好多好多个小时。改成好久好久好一点,个人感觉连续打了好多好多个小时有点残忍。

改成了:“嘘——————————————————”
所有人都觉得这个问题好可怕,立刻惊慌地阻止他说下去。他们二话不说,又打起了他的屁股,连续打了好久好久。

#14 coffeecat 2009-06-10

欢迎晃晃悠悠,我明天得空仔细看哈。

#15 晃晃悠悠 2009-06-10

表情占位:s:135  表情占位:s:135
请多指教哦!

#16 coffeecat 2009-06-10

在远古的时代
一头无敌好奇的小象宝宝
他的好奇心能把整个非洲装满(仍旧别扭。)

他的爪子尖利利,小象的屁股被扎的好疼(两句衔接的语感不够好)

但是小象的好奇心无法停止

在一个明媚的春天的早晨
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在一个春光明媚的早晨

因为,没有办法,他根本就不能把那些掉到地上的东西捡起来。
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没有办法,因为他根本就不能把那些掉到地上的东西捡起来。

卡玛邦的北部,他一直往东走
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他从卡玛邦的北部,一直往东走

他很生气地从鼻子里挤着说话,

于是象宝宝的鼻子一点一点一点地被拉长了
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于是象宝宝的鼻子被一点一点一点地拉长了

但是双色石蟒蛇和小象用尽了最大的力气,所以最后他们“扑腾”一下从鳄鱼嘴里把象鼻子拉了出来。

“那你可等得久咯!”双色石蟒蛇说,“有的人就是不知道什么对他好!”

嗷,香蕉banana!

#17 coffeecat 2009-06-10

以上是我挑的刺。你看看吧。

翻译得很流畅很可爱。加油,多翻译一些哦。

#18 晃晃悠悠 2009-06-11

改好咯!
基本上按照你的建议改的

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1. 一头无敌好奇的小象宝宝
他的好奇心能把整个非洲装满

改为:小象住在非洲,他的好奇心快把非洲都装满啦!

2. 他的爪子尖利利,小象的屁股被扎的好疼

改为:他的爪子尖利利,挠得小象好疼

3. “那你可等得久咯!”双色石蟒蛇说,“有的人就是不知道什么对他好!”
改为:“那你就等吧!可能要等很久很久!”双色石蟒蛇说,“看来有人还不知道自己刚捡了个宝呢!

另:香蕉Banana的那个,我想保留。因为我觉得现在的小孩,都多少会点英文单词。我们家宝宝们才3岁,也知道香蕉就是banana。而且他们特别喜欢banana的发音,所以如果这样讲故事给小朋友听,他们大概会觉得很有趣吧。嘿嘿

#19 晃晃悠悠 2009-06-12

引用:
引用第16楼coffeecat于2009-06-10 23:55发表的  :
以上是我挑的刺。你看看吧。

翻译得很流畅很可爱。加油,多翻译一些哦。

可惜最近时间不多,以后再来多翻译一些吧!

#20 鹏鹏 2009-06-12

这一次,他的家人们又打了打他的屁股: xIBeSmHTk  
“祝你好运,小象!” |*)]rho  
他说: B|qg_,5T$m  
“谢谢!” 8feXmy  
然后他很有礼貌的请大家不要再打他的屁股了。 X6 p)t}R

And they all spanked him once more for luck, though he asked them most politely to stop. 0I3yeyy  
这一句好像和原文有些出入哦.

#21 鹏鹏 2009-06-12

下面几句,我觉得不太好。
1、他挤着他那已经快五尺长的鼻子说:“你太残‘隐’啦……” 6'W\4m  
Z j J{[ 原文: and he said through his nose, which was now nearly five feet long, 'This is too butch for be!' .<8)cs  
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2、然后他把他那被拉得长长的、肿得高高的鼻子用芭蕉叶包了起来,举在伟大的、灰绿色的、泥泞的’河上,晾一晾。
3、‘黏巴巴双色石蟒蛇说,“看来有人还不知道自己刚捡了个宝呢!” D__9&Q  
原文:'Some people do not know what is good for them.' 3 /{[/Wm

#22 盈果 2009-07-30

哈哈,好可爱的故事啊

#23 道寻常 2009-07-30

为什么前后不一致?为什么“小象问”河马阿姨和狒狒叔叔的时候不要叔叔阿姨的称呼了?

#24 成长中的妈妈 2009-09-21

好棒哦。小书房能人真多呀!