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楼主:康素爱萝 2009-07-14

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A Ukrainian Folkale 乌克兰民间故事adapted and illustrated by JAN BRETT改编/绘画 简.布瑞特http://1814.img.pp.sohu.com.cn/images/blog/2008/11/14/11/18/11e41238386g215.jpg
With cpecial thanks to my Ukrainian friend, Oksana Piasecky; For sylvia Kyle ,Ruth Ann Johnsin,Rebecca Lim and Tad Beagley.http://1844.img.pp.sohu.com.cn/images/blog/2008/11/14/11/18/11e41237226g215.jpg

Once there was a boy named Nicki. He wanted mittens as white as snow.从前,有一个名字叫"尼基"的小男孩.他非常渴望拥有一双像雪一样白的手套.
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"If you drop a white nitten in the snow,it will be hard to find ,his grandmather told him.如果你在雪地里丢了一只手套,你就很难找到它了,他的外婆忠告尼基说.
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But Nicki wanted snow-white mittens so much that Baba made them for him.When she finished knitting ,Nicki put on the mittens and wen out to play.但是尼基如此渴望拥有这样一双雪白的手套,于是外婆答应马上织一双给他.外婆一织好,尼基就带上雪白的手套跑出去玩了.It wasn't long before one mitten fell off. 不一会儿,一只手套就被尼基落在雪地上了.
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 A little mole found it and crawled inside.It was just the right size,So he decided to stay.一只小鼹鼠发现了这只小手套,小心翼翼地爬了进去,并决心呆在里面了.
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A rabbit came hopping by. He wiggled in next to the mole.
一只兔子也跳跃着奔过来.它迅速摆动着身体钻了进去,挨在小鼹鼠身边.图片占位:http://1814.img.pp.sohu.com.cn/images/2008/11/14/11/6/11e41319a9cg214.jpg
A hedgehog wanted to get warm.The mole and the rabbit made room for him.一只小刺猬也想钻进来取暖.于是小鼹鼠和小兔子就马上挪出一点空间出来给它.
图片占位:http://1874.img.pp.sohu.com.cn/images/2008/11/14/11/8/11e41365881g213.jpgA owl didn't want to be left out.So the mole ,the rabbit ,and the hedgehog had to move over.The little mitten was getting crowded.一只猫头鹰不停地想从左边挤进去,因此小鼹鼠,小兔子,小刺猬不得不尽可能地向上面转移.图片占位:http://1844.img.pp.sohu.com.cn/images/2008/11/14/11/8/11e41362927g215.jpg
A badger locked out of his house and saw the mitten.He climbed right in.
一只獾在自己的窝里向外看,也发现了这只手套. 它也凑热闹似的从右侧爬了进来.
图片占位:http://1834.img.pp.sohu.com.cn/images/2008/11/14/11/8/11e4136195bg213.jpgIt started to snow ,so a fox pushed his way in and made himself right at home.
下雪了,一只狐狸用力挤进了入口,争取了自己的一块小地方.图片占位:http://1864.img.pp.sohu.com.cn/images/2008/11/14/11/8/11e4135e616g215.jpg

Then  a big bear sniffed  at the mitten. The animals were packed in tight, but the bear didn't care.
然后,一只大熊大声吸着气,发觉了这只手套.小动物们都已经把手套挤得满满的了,但熊却一点也不介意.He crawled in anyway. The mitten was  getting bigger and bigger and bigger.它不管怎么样也要爬进来,于是手套变得越来越大,越来越大.
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The tiny mouse squeezed in and perched herself on the big bear's nose.
一只小老鼠挤了进来,它自作主张地蹲在大狗熊的鼻子上了.
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The mouse's whiskers tickled the bear's nose.''Aaaaaa-aaaa-ca-chew!''the bear sneezed.All the animals flew out of the mitten.而小老鼠的几根胡须搔痒着大狗熊的鼻子,"啊啊-----啊---嚏--!"大狗熊忍不住打了个大喷嚏.
所有的动物们都飞出了手套.
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Nicki saw his mitten sail up into the air.尼基看到他的小手套像扬起的小白帆一样乘着空气迎面飞行过来.
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From the window ,Baba watched Nicki catch his mitten."See Baba! "he called to her. "I have both my nittens. "And Baba smiled.透过窗子,外婆看见尼基抓住了他的那只手套."看呀,姥姥!他大声地向她呼喊着."我的两只手套都在!"
他的外婆会心地笑了.
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#2 囡囡妈 2009-07-14

有些图片看不到。。JAN BRETT的绘本确实好看。

翻译上,“于是外婆答应马上织一双给他.外婆一织好,尼基就马上带上雪白的手套跑出去玩了.”两个“马上”离得近,在读的时候会感觉不舒服。

It was just the right size,丢了没翻。

wiggled 翻成“迅速摆动着身体”,不太对。

A owl didn't want to be left out.So the mole ,the rabbit ,and the hedgehog had to move over。The little mitten was getting crowded.
一只猫头鹰不停地想从左边挤进去,因此小鼹鼠,小兔子,小刺猬不得不尽可能地向上面转移.
“LEFT OUT“和“MOVE OVER”都翻得不对。
“The little mitten was getting crowded.” 丢了。

He climbed right in. “RIGHT IN”翻得不对。

a big bear sniffed  at the mitten.一只大熊大声吸着气,发觉了这只手套
翻得不准确。

有个问题啊,你这本书的版本是什么?怎么和我手上的文字内容不一样啊,,太奇怪了! 表情占位:s:138

#3 囡囡妈 2009-07-14

忘了说一句,绘本翻译,是要读给孩子听的,所以翻完了一定要自己大声地读一下。舒服不舒服,马上就体会出来了。你再琢磨琢磨。

#4 囡囡妈 2009-07-14

我查了一下,你这个是1992年SCHOLASTIC出的,文字精简了一些,适合学校使用。

还要罗唆一句,BABA,是小男孩的GRANDMOTHER的名字。。你要注意一下前后文,前面你用了外婆,后面变成姥姥了。。

#5 康素爱萝 2009-07-14

表情占位:s:138 囡囡妈说的极是,我现在的水平还仅限于用快译通才能知道某个单词的意思...

嗯,我也是非常喜欢这个绘本的绘画风格. 表情占位:s:135

版本倒是只有这一个,想看看囡囡妈的版本...

#6 康素爱萝 2009-07-14

表情占位:s:153 引用:
引用第1楼囡囡妈于2009-07-14 10:00发表的 :
有些图片看不到。。JAN BRETT的绘本确实好看。

翻译上,“于是外婆答应马上织一双给他.外婆一织好,尼基就马上带上雪白的手套跑出去玩了.”两个“马上”离得近,在读的时候会感觉不舒服。

It was just the right size,丢了没翻。
.......

有好多个动词呀,很难准确表达.....表情占位:s:130

#7 囡囡妈 2009-07-14

我手上的版本是1989年出版的,画面和你的是一样的,文字上和你的版本不同,不是删节版,文字要丰富一些。

JAN BRETT的绘本风格很有个人特点,旁边的小画面里也都是丰富的细节,值得慢慢品味,品之不厌。。

#8 囡囡妈 2009-07-14

我打两段文字,你可以看一下,就知道版本不同在哪里了。

比如第一跨页。
你的:Once there was a boy named Nicki. He wanted mittens as white as snow.
我的:Once there was a boy named Nicki who wanted his new mittens made from wool as white as snow.

第二跨页。
你的:"If you drop a white mitten in the snow,it will be hard to find ,his grandmother told him.
But Nicki wanted snow-white mittens so much that Baba made them for him.
我的:At first, his grandmother, Baba, did not want to knit white mittens.
"If you drop one in the snow," she warned," you'll never find it."
But Nicki wanted snow-white mittens, and finally Baba made them.

很明显,你的那个版本是为了适合学校内阅读,把长的复合句改写成了两个简单句。你的书的封底写了书是只能在学校市场内发行的。所以它是个改写版。

再比如那些动物进手套,都有很丰富的描写内容,比如兔子那页:
A snowshoe rabbit came hopping by. He stopped for a moment to admire his winter coat. It was then that he saw the mitten, and he wiggled in, feet first. The mole didn't think there was room for both of them, but when he saw the rabbit's big kickers he moved over.

图画都是一样的,多欣赏图画吧,JAN BRETT的作品,很棒!

#9 康素爱萝 2009-07-14

受教受教。谢谢囡囡妈 表情占位:s:135

BABA,是小男孩的GRANDMOTHER的名字。。这个有意思,还以为是缩写,看来是昵称。

#10 慕容胖胖 2009-07-14

姥姥叫巴巴,真奇怪啊,哈哈哈

#11 囡囡妈 2009-07-14

引用:
引用第9楼慕容胖胖于2009-07-14 20:18发表的  :
姥姥叫巴巴,真奇怪啊,哈哈哈 这有啥奇怪的啊,这本是是取材于一个乌克兰的民间故事,所以名字也是直接套用的,BABA,俄语名字吧。图片占位:http://rs.phpwind.net/E___4237ZHYXPWFG.gif

#12 两小千金妈 2009-07-14

囡囡妈,这个BABA,就是老奶奶,老年妇女,表情占位:s:120,比如元气婆婆Grandma Baba,还有BABA YAGA......

这种故事配图画书真好,小孩子读书要是跳过读这样的书的阶段太可惜了。

Alvin Tresselt 改编 Yaroslova 画的小手套,也是好看......

#13 囡囡妈 2009-07-14

千金妈,来啦。。 表情占位:s:135

对呀,元气婆婆,赫赫,忘掉了。。

JAN BRETT的“THE HAT”,“THE UMBRELLA”其实也是套用这个故事套路的,只是放在了不同的地区,绘画的内容就充分反应当地的风情。确实好看啊。。国内她的书一本都没引进吗?我总以为她很有名了。。赫赫 :)

#14 两小千金妈 2009-07-14

正好看到小手套,嘿嘿。我看小C妈妈这本,恐怕是纸板书的版本?看着图像是。