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楼主:秋晓 2009-07-29

小枞树
 
[我很小的时候,有一个人,可能是我妈妈,给我读过安徒生的童话《小枞树》。我自己在童年时期并没读过这个故事,也没再听过。长大后的某一年,我和一些小孩子一起过圣诞,他们吵吵着要我“再讲一个”故事。我只好在记忆中翻寻被埋藏的珍宝,拾起了关于小枞树经历的碎片。我把这些碎片编织成一个故事,以为它是原故事的翻版。故事的最后一部分完全从我的记忆中消失,所以我“编”了一个结尾去满足我的小听众们的口味。后来,我给很多孩子讲过这个故事,故事渐渐形成现在这个样子。过了好几年,在一次重读安徒生活动中,我偶然看到真正的《小枞树》故事,自己读了一遍。我发现自己偏离原文好远,觉得好笑,又有些沮丧。

我这样解释一番,是想让读者知道,我并不是故意讲述“改编”自安徒生著名童话的故事。我只是讲述一个孩子们喜欢的故事,这个故事源自我幼年时期对于安徒生的《小枞树》的记忆。]

从前,森林里有一棵小枞树。它纤细苗条、叶子嫩绿,长在许多高大结实、叶子墨绿的大枞树中间。小枞树很不高兴,因为它不像别的枞树那样高大。鸟儿飞到树丛中,停在大树的树枝上休息,还在那儿做窝。每当这时,小枞树就会朝鸟儿喊──

“下来吧,下来吧,在我的树枝上休息!”

可他们总是说──

“噢,不行,不行。你太小了!”

壮观的大风唱着歌儿吹过森林,它弯下腰、扭着身体,晃动大树的树顶,还跟它们说悄悄话。每当这时,小枞树都要抬起头,大声说──

“噢,求求你,亲爱的风,下来跟我玩儿吧!”

可风总是说──

“噢,不行啊。你太小了,你太小了!”

冬天到了,白色的雪花轻轻地、轻轻地飘落,给大树们戴上漂亮的白帽子、穿上美丽的白大衣。每当这时,小枞树就在别人的大衣下,抬起头叫──

“噢,求求你,亲爱的雪花,也给我一顶帽子吧!我也想玩!”

可雪花总是说──

“噢,不行,不行,不行。你太小了,你太小了!”

最难过的是当人们来到树林中的时候。人们驾着雪橇,带着马队来了。他们来砍倒大树,把它们带走。每当一棵树被砍倒带走,其他的树都会谈论这件事情,时不时地点点头。小枞树仔细倾听。它们说,如果你被带走,就可能成为大轮船的桅杆,在大海上远航,见到许很奇妙的事情;你也可能成为大城市里某栋漂亮房子的一部分,见到大世面。小枞树非常想见大世面,可他总是太小,人们会略过它不砍。

时间一天天过去。在一个寒冷的冬日清晨,人们驾着雪橇骑着马来了。他们在这儿在那儿砍了一些树之后,来到小枞树周围的一圈树旁,打量着它们。

“没有够小的树。”他们说。

噢!小枞树使尽全身力气竖起自己的小叶子!

“这儿有一棵,这棵够小。”一个人说。他摸了摸小枞树。

小枞树快乐得像只小鸟,因为它知道人们要砍下自己。它被人放在雪橇上带走了。小枞树心满意足地躺在雪橇上,盘算着自己会成为轮船的桅杆还是城里漂亮房子的一部分。可是,当他们来到城里后,它被取下来、竖在桶里,放在一个人行道边上,跟其他的枞树摆成一排。这些枞树都很小,但谁也没它小。这时,小枞树开始见世面。

人们来来去去,看看这些枞树,把它们带走。可是,每当看见小枞树,他们都会摇摇头,说──

“这棵太小了,太小了。”

最后,有两个小孩走过来。他们手牵着手,仔细打量所有的小树。他们一看见小枞树就大叫起来──

“我们就要这棵,它刚好够小!”

他们把它从桶里取出来,抬着它离开。快乐的小枞树一心在猜测:我这么小,能做什么呢。它知道自己不可能成为桅杆或房子,因为带它走的人是小孩子。

他们带着它走进几道大门,把它放在另一个桶里,搁在桌子上,摆在一间空荡荡的小房间里。这一路上,他一直在猜测。小孩子很快就离开,回来时抬着一个大篮子。然后,有一些漂亮的女士拿着小盒子走进来。她们头上戴着白色帽子,蓝裙外面系着白色的围裙。小孩子从篮子里取出一些东西,开始跟小枞树玩游戏,就是小枞树一直想和风儿、雪花、小鸟玩的那种游戏。它能感觉到他们在轻轻地触摸自己的脑袋、小叶子和小树枝。它低下头看看自己,尽量看得远一点。它看见自己浑身挂满了金色和银色的项链!它身上垂着白色的、毛绒绒的绳子。它的叶子顶着金色的小果子、粉色和玫瑰色的小球,还有银色的小星星。它的胳膊举着漂亮的粉色和白色的小蜡烛。还有,最棒的事情是:孩子们在它的头上挂了一个美丽的白色天使娃娃!小枞树简直无法呼吸,它太高兴、太惊讶了。现在,它是什么?它为什么有如此的荣耀?

过了一会儿,所有的人都走了,只剩它自己。天色渐渐暗下来,小枞树听见门缝里传来各种奇怪的声音。有时候他能听到小孩子的哭声。他开始感觉到孤单。天越来越黑。

突然,门被打开,那两个小孩走了进来。有两位漂亮的女士跟他们在一起。他们走到小枞然面前,迅速点燃所有粉色和白色的小蜡烛。然后,那两位漂亮女士抓住小枞树待着的桌子往前推,轻轻地、迅速地推,推出房间,穿过一个大厅,又走进另一扇门。

小枞树的突然看见一个长长的房间,房间里摆了许多白色的小床。有些小朋友靠在枕头上;有些小朋友坐在很大的轮椅里;有些小朋友一跛一跛地在房间里乱跑;还有些小朋友坐在小椅子上。它心里想,为什么所有的小朋友都看起来苍白、疲惫呢。它还不知道自己是在医院里。它还没来得及再多想,就被这些小朋友的尖叫声震得喘不过气来。

“噢!噢!天那,天那!”他们大声喊道。

“太漂亮了!太美丽了!噢,它太可爱了!”

它知道他们肯定在说自己,因为他们亮晶晶的眼睛全都看着自己。它挺起小身板,直得像根桅杆,每一根叶子都快乐得发抖。这时,有一个细细的、弱弱的、小孩子的声音说──

“这是我见过的最漂亮的圣诞树!”

这时候,小枞树终于知道自己是什么了。它是一棵圣诞树!它从头到脚浑身透着一股高兴劲儿,因为它刚好够小,成了世界上最好的圣诞树!

#2 秋晓 2009-07-29

红色字是我自己觉得别扭的地方。根据然的意见进行了修改

下面帖上原文,方便大家指正

THE LITTLE FIR TREE   [When I was a very little girl some one, probably my mother, read to me Hans Christian Andersen's story of the Little Fir Tree. It happened that I did not read it for myself or hear it again during my childhood. One Christmas day, when I was grown up, I found myself at a loss for the ``one more'' story called for by some little children with whom I was spending the holiday. In the mental search for buried treasure which ensued, I came upon one or two word-impressions of the experiences of the Little Fir Tree, and forthwith wove
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them into what I supposed to be something of a reproduction of the original. The latter part of the story had wholly faded from my memory, so that I ``made up'' to suit the tastes of my audience. Afterward I told the story to a good many children, at one time or another, and it gradually took the shape it has here. It was not until several years later that, in re-reading Andersen for other purposes, I came upon the real story of the Little Fir Tree, and read it for myself. Then indeed I was amused, and somewhat distressed, to find how far I had wandered from the text.
   I give this explanation that the reader may know I do not presume to offer the little tale which follows as an ``adaptation'' of Andersen's famous story. I offer it plainly as a story which children have liked, and which grew out of my early memories of Andersen's ``The Little Fir Tree''].
   Once there was a Little Fir Tree, slim and pointed, and shiny, which stood in the great forest in the midst of some big fir trees, broad, and tall, and shadowy green. The Little Fir Tree was very unhappy be-cause he was not big like the others. When the birds came flying into the woods and lit on the branches of the big trees and built their nests there, he used to call up to them, --
   ``Come down, come down, rest in my branches!'' But they always said, -- ``Oh, no, no; you are too little!''
   And when the splendid wind came blowing and singing through the forest, it bent and rocked and swung the tops of the big trees, and murmured to them. Then the Little Fir Tree looked up, and called, --
   ``Oh, please, dear wind, come down and play with me!'' But he always said, --
   ``Oh, no; you are too little, you are too little!''
   And in the winter the white snow fell softly, softly, and covered the great trees all over with wonderful caps and coats of white. The Little Fir Tree, close down in the cover of the others, would call up, --
   ``Oh, please, dear snow, give me a cap, too! I want to play, too!'' But the snow always said, --
   ``Oh no, no, no; you are too little, you are too little!''
   The worst of all was when men came into the wood, with sledges and teams of horses. They came to cut the big trees down and carry them away. And when one had been cut down and carried away the others talked about it, and nodded their heads. And the Little Fir Tree listened, and heard them say that when you were carried away so, you might become the mast of a mighty ship, and go far away over the ocean, and see many wonderful things; or you might be part of a fine house in a great city, and see much of life. The Little Fir Tree wanted greatly to see life, but he was always too little; the men passed him by.
   But by and by, one cold winter's morning, men came with a sledge and horses, and after they had cut here and there they came to the circle of trees round the Little Fir Tree, and looked all about.
   ``There are none little enough,'' they said.
   Oh! how the Little Fir Tree pricked up his needles!
   ``Here is one,'' said one of the men, ``it is just little enough.'' And he touched the Little Fir Tree.
   The Little Fir Tree was happy as a bird, because he knew they were about to cut him down. And when he was being carried away on the sledge he lay wondering, so contentedly, whether he should be the mast of a ship or part of a fine city house. But when they came to the town he was taken out and set upright in a tub and placed on the edge of a sidewalk in a row of other fir trees, all small, but none so little as he. And then the Little Fir Tree began to see life.
   People kept coming to look at the trees and to take them away. But always when they saw the Little Fir Tree they shook their heads and said, --
   ``It is too little, too little.''
   Until, finally, two children came along, hand in hand, looking carefully at all the small trees. When they saw the Little Fir Tree they cried out, --
   ``We'll take this one; it is just little enough!''
   They took him out of his tub and carried him away, between them. And the happy Little Fir Tree spent all his time wondering what it could be that he was just little enough for; he knew it could hardly be a mast or a house, since he was going away with children.
   He kept wondering, while they took him in through some big doors, and set him up in another tub, on the table, in a bare little room. Pretty soon they went away, and came back again with a big basket, carried between them. Then some pretty ladies, with white caps on their heads and white aprons over their blue dresses, came bringing little parcels. The children took things out of the basket and began to play with the Little Fir Tree, just as he had often begged the wind and the snow and the birds to do. He felt their soft little touches on his head and his twigs and his branches. And when he looked down at himself, as far as he could look, he saw that he was all hung with gold and silver chains! There were strings of white fluffy stuff drooping around him; his twigs held little gold nuts and pink, rosy balls and silver stars; he had pretty little pink and white candles in his arms; but last, and most wonderful of all, the children hung a beautiful white, floating doll-angel over his head! The Little Fir Tree could not breathe, for joy and wonder. What was it that he was, now? Why was this glory for him?
   After a time every one went away and left him. It grew dusk, and the Little Fir Tree began to hear strange sounds through the closed doors. Sometimes he heard a child crying. He was beginning to be lonely. It grew more and more shadowy.
   All at once, the doors opened and the two children came in. Two of the pretty ladies were with them. They came up to the Little Fir Tree and quickly lighted all the little pink and white candles. Then the two pretty ladies took hold of the table with the Little Fir Tree on it and pushed it, very smoothly and quickly, out of the doors, across a hall, and in at another door.
   The Little Fir Tree had a sudden sight of a long room with many little white beds in it, of children propped up on pillows in the beds, and of other children in great wheeled chairs, and others hobbling about or sitting in little chairs. He wondered why all the little children looked so white and tired; he did not know that he was in a hospital. But before he could wonder any more his breath was quite taken away by the shout those little white children gave.
   ``Oh! oh! m-m! m-m!'' they cried.
   ``How pretty! How beautiful! Oh, is 't it lovely!''
 He knew they must mean him, for all their shining eyes were looking straight at him. He stood as straight as a mast, and quivered in every needle, for joy. Presently one little weak child-voice called out, --
   ``It's the nicest Christmas tree I ever saw!''
   And then, at last, the Little Fir Tree knew what he was; he was a Christmas tree! And from his shiny head to his feet he was glad, through and through, because he was just little enough to be the nicest kind of tree in the world!

#3 漪然 2009-07-29

shiny 翻译成“绿油油的”可能好一些,“就像小枞树经常求风和雪花和小鸟做的那样”——“就像小枞树一直想和风儿、雪花、小鸟玩的游戏”

#4 盈果 2009-07-29

很好听的一个故事。

#5 慕容胖胖 2009-07-29

啊~看到没人跟他玩的时候,也觉得好孤单。

#6 茗风 2009-07-29

It's the nicest story I ever read! 呵呵

#7 囡囡妈 2009-07-29

秋晓这篇要不要也参加大赛呢?

#8 coffeecat 2009-07-29

先调查下作者飞天的够不够早

#9 大手拉小手 2009-07-30

好像是义工翻译里的一篇