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楼主:正在看牡丹 2009-12-21

不知道能不能赶上圣诞节了,只好先把英文打上来,已经翻译了一部分中文,慢慢贴吧,嘿嘿。红色部分是意义上需要重新考虑的,但总体也要考虑,主要是押韵,好难……
http://www.dreamkidland.cn/leadbbs/read.php?tid-48501.html
P4 (封面)
The Old-Fashioned Santa Claus                                                           老派圣诞公公
            PICTURE BOOK                                                                              绘本
Compiled and Written by PJ. Shaw                          (编者、作者)P.J.萧
P5
The Magic of Santa Claus                                                                           圣诞老人的魔法
Here’s a nice little story for good girls and boys,                        一个小故事,讲给乖孩子:
All about Santa Claus, Christmas and toys…                            圣诞老人、圣诞节和玩具……

THE top of the Earth, which is called the North Pole,                高高的北极点,地球最尽头,
Is where Santa Claus lives, a right jolly old soul!               那是圣诞老人的家,快活的好老头!
About him the snow lies so thick on the ground                             小屋旁边,雪地千层厚;
That the sun cannot melt it the whole summer round.                    夏日将尽,积雪依然如旧。

His twinkling eyes are so merry and bright,                                    明亮的眼神满是快活,
That they sparkle like two little stars in the night.                        像两颗小星星在夜空闪烁,
He has rosy cheeks and the snowiest hair,                                  两颊红通通,白发如雪灿然,
Though the top of his head is quite shiny and bare.                         头顶却光秃秃、亮闪闪。

And each Christmas Eve, from his toes to his chin,                圣诞前夜,圣诞老人裹得严严实实,
Santa’s bundled up tight so the cold can’t creep in.                从下巴颏到脚趾尖,寒冷无法侵袭,
His deer from the mountains are harnessed with care,              驯鹿从高山飞下,挽具齐齐整整,
As they anxiously prance in the clear, frosty air.                      急切奔驰于空中,一片晴朗清冷。

Santa cracks his long whip and whistles a tune,                                   挥动长鞭,吹起口哨,
Then he winks at the stars and he nods to the moon.                        向星星眨眼,和月亮点头。
And up, up away they soar, picking up speed,                          风驰电掣,越来越高,越来越远,
For their magical journey each Christmas Eve.                     年复一年,这是圣诞前夜的魔幻之旅。

P6
On a starry night in December, Santa’s trip begins.          在一个十二月的星夜,圣诞老人开始旅程。

P7
The Reindeer’s Flight                                                                              飞翔的驯鹿
The reindeer take flight with lightning-fast speed.                          以光速,驯鹿在空中奔驰,
In fact, they’re so fast, you’d swear they had wings!                     看哪,一闪即过,如生双翼!
And these glorious reindeer can easily fly                                        再高的屋顶,也不能奈何
To the top of a roof, no matter how high.                                             俊美的驯鹿一跃即至。
Then, down, down the chimney Santa descends,                               啊,顺着烟囱下降,只在
With a snap of his fingers, a wink and a grin.                               一弹指,一眨眼,一咧嘴之间。
He has to be quick, to be through in a night.                                       快快的呀,只有这一夜,
His gifts must arrive before first-morning light!                          第一缕晨光之前,礼物就要送到。
 
So he fills up the stockings with trinkets and toys,                                      一点儿声响也无,
All without making the teeniest noise.                                                   长袜塞满小饰品和玩具。
And with tinkling bells, on each snowy rooftop,                               骄傲的驯鹿,佩戴清脆鸣铃,
The proud reindeer wait – and keep the night watch.                          守候于一个个雪白的屋顶。

P8
Down, down the chimney, Santa descends.                                  顺着烟囱,圣诞老人向下,再向下。

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A Wondrous Christmas Eve                                                 美妙的圣诞前夜
Santa is cheerful but pleasantly shy.                                                 该多快活,偷看一眼好老头,
(He likes to do all his good deeds on the sly.)                                  放弃小睡,在这长长的冬季。
So there’s no use in spoiling a long winter’s nap                         只是,乐呵呵的老人,不习惯张扬,
Attempting a peek at this jolly old chap.                                            总在暗夜,做着好事一桩桩。
          
No, when Christmas Eve comes you must slip into bed,                  所以,要乖乖的,在圣诞前夜,
Pull up the covers and lay down your head.                                   爬上床,盖好被,早早进入梦乡。
Then Santa arrives with his magical pack –                                   圣诞老人会准时到来,背着魔袋,
A bag full of playthings slung over his back!                                   各种各样的小玩艺,满满一袋。
   
He gives to young children who lives everywhere,                                     所有孩子,不论贫富。
And the rich and the poor are alike in his care,                                           在他眼里,全无差别,
So great is his love for all girls and boys,                                                     他的爱是如此深沉,
That making them happy is what he enjoys.                                                  孩子快乐,他就快乐。

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Watching and waiting for Santa’s sleigh.                                              眼巴巴等候圣诞老人的雪橇。

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The Spirits of Christmas                                                            圣诞精灵
The most wondrous presents and toys are designed                            孩子,乖乖的、温柔的小孩子,
For good little children, the gentle and kind.                                   最精妙的礼物和玩具为你们而准备。
And when Christmas comes round, as it does once a year,                    年复一年,圣诞如期而至,
It’s certain that Santa will somehow appear!                                           圣诞老人也会如约到来!

How funny he looks as he sits on the floor,                                            多么好玩,他坐在地板上,
Pulling out toys and then searching for more.                                           掏出玩具,又继续摸索,
His cheeks are flushed pink and his eyes starry bright –                       脸颊红润,眼睛如星般璀璨,
He certainly makes quite a comical sight.                                               看到他,怎能让人不开怀。

His elves help him make such incredible things –                                精灵帮他造玩具,如此奇妙:
Monkeys and acrobats jumping on strings,                                          小猴和杂技小人在绳上跳,
Footballs and baseballs and mystery games,                                      足球、棒球还有神秘的游戏,
Chocolates and lockets and sweet candy canes.                                巧克力、吊坠盒和甜甜的糖棒。

And, oh! the dear dollies with long, curly hair,啊,还有那可爱的玩具娃娃,
That open their eyes or sit up in a chair;长长卷发,眼睛扑闪,坐在椅上,
With jackets and socks and the tiniest shoes,小外套,小短袜,小而又小的鞋子,
And ribbons and hair clips that doll-babies use.缎带,发卡,装扮着娃娃。

All the long year, with his paint and his glue,                                          整整一年,用涂料和胶水,
Santa is making these presents for you!                                                    圣诞老人为你们准备礼物!
 
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Dollies with petticoats, buttons and bows.                           穿着小衬裙、着小钮扣、戴着蝴蝶结的玩具娃娃

P13
Santa’s List                                                               圣诞老人的美德列表Just in case you’re longing to know,                                                  想知道怎样做一个好孩子?
These are the virtues good children must show:                               下面是圣诞老人的美德列表:

Be hard-working at school and gentle at play,                                       努力学习,玩耍却不打闹,
Respectful to others, and kind through the day.                                       尊敬他人,一直对人和善。
Not angry or sullen, snobbish or curt.                                    不发脾气,不耍性子,不自命不凡,也不粗暴,
Not one to call names or say things to hurt.                                     不骂粗话,也从不讲让人受伤的话。

Obedient, cheerful, and eager to please.                               听爸爸妈妈的话,开开心心,也愿意让别人快乐,
Not one to whine, or tell lies, or tease.                                             不大哭大闹,既不撒谎,也不取笑他人。

A child who has opened his heart to believe                                                   真诚地相信,比接受
That it’s truly more blessed to give than receive.                                               更为高尚的是付出。

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Santa makes his list.                                                                                    圣诞老人正在写美德列表。

P15
SANTA CLAUS’S PALACE AND TOY FACTORY.                            圣诞老人的宫殿和玩具工厂
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The Crystal Toy Factory                                                            水晶玩具工厂
To have enough playthings to fill up his sleigh,                                                  希望雪橇满载好玩的小玩意儿,
Santa must work with his elves every day.                                                          圣诞老人和精灵天天辛勤工作。
His workshop’s a factory, so grand and so fair –                                        大大的工厂是他的作坊,美轮美奂——
A real crystal palace set high in the air!                                                                真正的水晶作成,在云际天边!
The walls are constructed of crystalline ice                                                                    冰围四壁,晶莹剔透,
That outshines the rays of the big Northern Lights.                                                 辉煌的北极光,也黯然失色。
And inside these bustling rooms all day long,                                                        个个房间,从早到晚,精灵们
The elves do their work while they sing merry songs.                                         忙忙碌碌,以欢快的歌声为伴。

These good-hearted helpers know                                                                           这些好心的帮手 
   just how to make…                                                                                                                            手艺精巧:
Trumpets and swords and the best roller skates.                                          喇叭、剑和最好的溜冰鞋,Trains that can run on the tiniest tracks.                                                            带缩微轨道的火车,
Soccer balls, marbles and fun jumping jacks.                                                足球、弹子和木偶小人,Paint boxes, crayons and birds that take flight.                                         颜料盒、铅笔和飞动的小鸟,Puzzles and books to be seized with delight.                                       拼图、小人书(孩子一见扑过来)Soldiers and horses and pull-toys galore…                                 小兵、马儿和小拉车,令人眼花缭乱……

Are hammered and sanded                                                                                                     锤呀锤,磨呀磨,  
 and sent out  the door!                                                                                                               大家出门喽!
 
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The workshop is such a wondrous place.                                                                         迷人的小工坊! 
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Toys and Treasures                                                                    玩具与财宝

NOW the workshop is such a miraculous place,                                              马儿快步跑,娃娃小腿迈,
With stockpiles of satin and ribbon and lace,                                                    泰迪熊,一摇一摇抱满怀。
Horses that gallop and dollies that walk,                                                            蕾丝、丝带和绸缎,
And teddy-bears ready to cuddle and rock.                                                        魔幻工坊真魔幻!

Games for all reasons, scooters and kites,                                                          滑板和风筝,各色小游戏,
And books that talk back or pop up – what a sight!                                      会说话的书,“啪啪”站起来,
Too many baseballs and footballs to count,                                                         红色小单车,骑上四处行,
And two-wheeled, red bicycles ready to mount.                                                棒球和足球,数也数不清。

There are farmyards complete with their fences and trees.                        农场里,篱笆环绕,树木遍地,
Cows, sheep and oxen, all standing at ease.                                                    猪圈里,小小猪仔,哼哼昂昂,
Turkeys and ducks and fine chickens and hens,                                              奶牛、公牛与绵羊,恬然站立,
And dear little piggies to put in their pens.                                                      小鸡、肥鸭和火鸡,圆圆壮壮,

Each Noah’s Ark is sent on its way                                                                                       诺亚方舟已启航,
With nice little animals, ready to play.                                                                         满载小动物,你欢我闹,
Lions and tigers and camels and bears –                                                                    狮子和老虎,骆驼与黑熊,
Two of each kind, since they travel in pairs!                                                         雌雄成双,一对一对向前行! 
(这一段的翻译在押韵上我比较满意,但音节依然不够铿锵,最后一段尤其处理不好。)
P19
Christmas Lullaby                                                                                                                           圣诞催眠曲
IN a cradle so dainty, a warm cozy nest,                                                              可爱的小摇篮,温暖又舒适,
Baby, sweet baby, is taking his rest.                                                                 宝贝,迷人的小宝贝,甜蜜入睡。   
 
Upon the white pillow his pretty head lies;                                                            脸蛋枕上雪白的小枕头,
Closed for the night are his bonnie blue eyes.                                                       夜了,合上蓝色的眼眸。
 
The little hand’s dimpled and pink as a rose.                                          玫瑰粉的小手啊,胖胖乎乎。
And just what he’s dreaming of, nobody knows.                                           他的梦如此多彩,我们怎能梦见。
 
Santa peeks at the baby, then leaves him a toy,                                            圣诞老人偷偷瞅,放下一个小玩具,A cuddly soft doll for a small baby boy.                                               软绵绵的娃娃,宝宝正好抱满怀。

Then he tiptoes away, as the wee baby seems                                                   小小的宝宝,沉醉在梦之大海;
To be floating away on an ocean of dreams.                                                      圣诞老人,踮着脚尖,微笑离开。 
 (越翻越觉得诗歌太挑战人了,翻得这么烂,修改会是个大工程呀。)
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Santa peeks at the wee baby.                                                                                               圣诞老人偷偷瞅着小宝宝。

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Christmas Chorus                                                                                                                       圣诞颂歌

WE bless His birth                                                                                                                      您从天堂降临人间,
Who came to Earth,                                                                                                                     为此我们永远感念。
and in his cradle lowly,                                                                                   您的摇篮在低贱的处所,
Received the earliest Christmas gifts –                                                                                 但在那儿,是您,
the Christ Child, pure and holy.                                                                                     收到第一份圣诞礼物——
                                                                 圣洁的耶稣。

To Him we offer thanks and praise                                                                                         您的爱如此深广,
   for all the love He bore us.                                                                                                       我们感怀赞颂:
For His dear sake, our hymns we make                                                                   高唱圣诞颂歌,
   In this, our Christmas chorus.                                                                                                   只为表达万一。

And while we deck these heavy boughs                                                                              树干沉沉,枝头满坠,
   with all our glittering treasures,                                                                                                 闪烁无数珍宝。
He from above will look with love                                                                                        在天堂,您心怀慈爱,
   upon our simple pleasures.                                                                                                    注视我们纯朴的欢乐。

He gave us friends,                                                                                                                          您赐予我们朋友,
   our joy He sends,                                                                                                                            给予我们快乐,
He ever watches o’er us;                                                                                                                 永远守护我们;
He bends His ear,                                                                                                                                 请侧耳倾听
   our song to hear,                                                                                                                              我们齐声歌唱,
And loves our                                                                                                                                       这首圣诞颂歌,
   Christmas chorus.                                                                                                                            只为让您开怀。

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Seeing and Believing                                                                                                     我们看到了

WHEN Jenny and Jessie woke in the night,                                                  星月灿烂,倾泻天堂的光辉,
The moon and the stars cast  a heavenly light.                                           沐浴其中,女孩从睡梦中醒来。
 And all of a sudden there came  such a sound –                                                      声响忽然而至——
As if there were somebody moving around!                                                             可是有人四处走动?
 
"It’s Santa Claus – come down the chimney, I guess,”                     “啊,是圣诞老人,正从烟囱往下爬。”
In a wondering whisper, said Jenny to Jess.                                                 悄悄猜测,珍妮在杰茜耳边低语。
“Oh, Jenny,’ said Jessie, “let’s carefully sneak                                         “啊,珍妮,让我们沿着走廊,
Down the hall to the living-room doorway and peek!”                             走到客厅门口,偷偷瞧上一瞧。”
 
So they tiptoed like mice to the living-room door,                                          坚硬的木地板,一声也不出,
Making no sound on the hard wooden floor.                                                       女孩走啊走,活像小老鼠。
Then they drew back the curtain and looked in to see –                                          拉开窗帘,看哪!
Sure enough! Santa! As plain as could be!                                                              一点没错,圣诞老人!
 
He stood near the fireplace, facing away,                                            面朝壁炉,圣诞老人忙忙碌碌
And dozens of toys on the floor near him lay.                                               玩具摆在地板上,数也数不清。
And since Jenny and Jessie made not one sound,                                              珍妮和杰茜,大气也不出,
He kept at his work without looking around.                                                 圣诞老人好安心,一点没抬头。
 
Did they speak to him? Dear, no! They trembled with fear                   跟他说句话吧!啊,不!圣诞老人
At the image of Santa Claus being so near.                                                           近在眼前,她们心生恐惧。
One glimpse was enough, then they felt such a fright –                                     胆怯的小女孩,飞奔回房间,
That back to their beds they flew for the night!                                                   浑身直颤抖,只说一眼已足够。 
 (这一段尤其不满意)
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Christmas Festivities                                                                                                                欢庆圣诞

GOOD Santa Claus sometimes,  in making his rounds,                        挨家挨户送礼物,是那好心的圣诞老人。
From a house brightly lighted will hear merry sounds.                                 明亮的大房子,欢声笑语一阵阵,
And if he suspects that the laughter and noise                                                跳呀,笑啊,唱啊,闹啊,那可是
Proceeds from a group of young ladies and boys…                                                  无忧无虑的姑娘和小伙?
 
Curiosity, likely, will tempt him to creep                                                                       带着好奇,轻手轻脚,
To some little window through which he can peek.                                                     从小小的窗口向里瞅。
And there, for a while, he will longingly gaze                                                          孩子们,尽情舞蹈做游戏,
At the children who frolic in dances and plays.                                                    窗外,凝视中是满满的渴望。
 
And if some of the revelers happen to spy                                                       笑闹不休,突然有更大的惊喜——
Santa Claus watching so closely outside –                                                               圣诞老人与他们,近在咫尺!
They’d tumble out laughing and squealing with joy,                                           该是如何的大笑,怎样的尖叫,
And try to invite in the jolly old boy!                                                                       邀请快活的好老头,共同欢闹!
 
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(背包上的字) SANTA CLAUS                                                              (背包上的字)圣诞老人

NORTH POLE                                                                                                              北极点
Santa Claus watches closely outside.                                                                      圣诞老人正往里瞅哪。
 
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Sweet dreams on Christmas Eve.                                                                     圣诞前夜,做个好梦。

#2 莫音 2009-12-21

好长的英文部分,诗歌的翻译很不容易,加油^_^

#3 慕容胖胖 2009-12-24

哎呀妈呀,大工程啊,加油!

圣诞快乐! 表情占位:s:135

#4 正在看牡丹 2009-12-29

帖子还有字数限制,泪,得重新排版,还得多占据一个帖子的位置。
风格译得太不统一了,这才是最大的问题!

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Dear Santa,                                                                       亲爱的圣诞老人:
Please bring me my own Christmas tree,                                请给我一棵圣诞树,我自己的圣诞树,
A sweet-smelling cedar,  as big as can be!                              要最最大的雪松,散发甜滋滋的香味,
With a dusting of snow  and a tiny surprise –                            披上一层白雪,藏有小小的惊喜——
A bird’s nest that’s tucked away  on the inside!                         层层枝丫扒开,是鸟儿啾啾的小窝!

Miniature pinecones and candles so bright                                松果小小,满缀枝头树梢,
That they shimmer like ribbons of winter moonlight.                 烛光闪亮,恰似冬月缕缕,
Crystalline snowflakes and silvery bells,                                   雪花剔透,如水晶般透明,
Tinkling just like the giggles of elves.                                         银铃清澈,是精灵的笑语。
  
Bundles of cinnamon tied here and there,                                一捆捆的桂皮挂满树,
And peppermint candy canes – plenty to share!                      一支支的甜棒齐分享,
Garlands of marzipan, fashioned like fruit,                               一堆堆的软糖穿成串,
Sacks of rock candy, and sugar lumps, too.                            一包包的冰糖硬邦邦

Gingerbread sentinels all in a row,                                            姜饼小卫兵,笔直站一排,
Silvery tinsel and walnuts brushed gold,                                   银箔光闪闪,桃木金灿灿,
Ruby red ornaments, shiny and bright,                                     还有宝石红的小饰品,
And a star that will twinkle with heavenly light.                          一颗小星星,闪耀天堂之光。
  
– A star for the Christ Child,                                          (图)——给小耶稣的星星
   Heaven’s true light.                                                                           真正天堂的光辉

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Christmas wishes sent special delivery.                              许下圣诞心愿,带来特别的礼物。
  
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Letters to Santa Claus                                                                                 圣诞心愿

THE letters to Santa  composed Christmas Eve,                   圣诞前夜,写下小小的心愿,封入信笺,
Can be sent to him magically up the chimney!                       顺着烟囱,借助魔法,抵达圣诞老人身边。
  
Write a short, simple note (very nice and polite)                           只需简单几句,但要彬彬有礼,
Saying how you believe that the reindeer take flight,                     告诉他,你真心相信驯鹿会飞,
That the elves do make toys in a palace of light,                          精灵在光辉的宫殿里制作玩具,
and that Santa delivers his toys in a night.                                  圣诞老人会在晚上给你送来礼物。
  
And list what you’d like to find under the tree                                    列出你的愿望,第二天,来到
The very next morning. (Oh! what you’ll see!)                                 圣诞树下,啊,梦想全部成真!
It’s not like dear Santa to ever object                                                         好心的圣诞老人,怎会
To hearing of presents that children expect!                                            不乐意收到孩子的愿望!

Out the chimney your letter                                                                               从烟囱出发, 
   will float on the air,                                                                                     信件飘浮于半空,
And Santa Claus’ helpers                                                                              圣诞老人的帮手
   will capture it there.                                                                                    在那儿将它带走。

Then they’ll bustle                                                                                    匆匆忙忙,飞速赶往北极,
right up to the                                                                                            将信件送于圣诞老人之手。
Pole with great speed,
Delivering letter to
Santa to read.  
  
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Home at the North Pole.                                                                            圣诞老人在北极的家里。
  
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A New Year Begins                                                                                        圣诞之后
When Christmas is over, old Santa Claus goes                                     圣诞已落幕,圣诞老人
To the frosty North Pole, for a well-earned repose.                                 回到寒冷的北极,每晚
He sleeps on a mattress of down every night,                                        安歇于温暖的羽绒床褥,
As the polar star shines with celestial light.                                             北极星照耀天堂的光辉。
  
And when he is rested and feeling quite well,                                          好好休息一场,他开始
He goes to his shop for a talk with the elves –                                         去工坊跟精灵讨论——
About soldiers and dollies and soft, wooly lambs,                            小兵、娃娃和毛绒绒的小羊羔,
Telescopes, sailboats, and miniature prams…                                  望远镜、帆船和迷你小游艇。
  
And all year, he watches the children, no doubt,                          新的一年,他一直关注——肯定如此
To see if they tease, or say, “thank you,” or pout.                       ——孩子是否调皮,讲礼貌,和乱发脾气。
He writes down their names on a page by themselves,                           记事本上,一个孩子一页纸,
In a book that he keeps on his library shelves.                                         放在书房书架上,名字好清楚。

There’s Emma, who tended the baby with care,                                              艾玛照料宝宝好细心,
And Rachel, who braided her young sister’s hair.                                          蕾切尔帮着妹妹扎头发,
Steven, who likes to go smiling to school,                                                      史蒂文带上微笑去学校,
And Katie who tries to obey all the rules.                                                           凯蒂乖乖听话真懂事。
  
James, who behaves well – he minds what is said!                                      詹姆斯言出必行受赞扬,
Joseph, his brother, who goes right to bed.                                                 弟弟约瑟夫也准点上床睡,
David and Isabel, now best of friends,                                                              一对好朋友,戴维和
Who hug one another before the day ends.                                                         莉莎,临别总拥抱。
  
Is Santa Claus happy? There’s no need to ask,                                                看着记事本,圣诞老人
For he finds such enjoyment, indeed, in this task,                                                    工作起来好开心,
That he bubbles with laughter and whistles and sings,                                笑开怀,口哨响,歌声亮,
While imagining all of these wonderful things.                                                     只为想到可爱小孩子。
  
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Giving is the secret of Christmas cheer.                                                           付出是圣诞快乐的秘诀。
  
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Christmas Blessings                                                                                              圣诞祝福

Who Santa Claus is, there’s no need to tell.                                              谁是圣诞老人,这个问题无需问,
Children around the world  know him so well.                                            世界每个角落,孩子都熟悉。
  
He comes like an angel of light from above,                                            天堂的光之使者,悄悄降临人间,
To do on the Earth his sweet errands of love.                                             四处奔走,只为送上爱的祝福
  
He fills all our hearts and our homes with such cheer,                            圣诞将近,我们用心感知,只为,
That we cannot help knowing when Christmas is near.                                他给我们带来如此的欢乐。

Then let us be glad so that Christmas may be                                         因此,莫要辜负这快活的好老头,
A time of great blessings for you and for me.                                      让美丽的圣诞节,成为最快乐的时光。
  
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Merry Christmas!                                                                                                    圣诞快乐!

(翻完了,实在是惨不忍睹,而且连圣诞都没赶上,但马上就是元旦了,依然是新年新气象!)

#5 圆月饼 2009-12-30

慢慢来吧,我搬凳子来学习 表情占位:s:135

#6 正在看牡丹 2010-01-19

这次修改,决定第一步是先确定每首小诗的风格,而且决定更加放开手脚,不然真正是翻译不能。
(1)书名改为:《永远的圣诞老人》
(2)           魔幻圣诞老人
             孩子们多爱听,铃声一路,
            是圣诞老人送来玩具。

北极峰顶,冰封千年,
          与金色夏日争辉,积雪银光闪闪。       
          这里住着圣诞老人,
          我们乐呵呵的好老头!

他眼神明亮,满是快活,
          像夜间的星辰闪烁。
          头顶光秃,两鬓也已如霜,
          脸颊却依然红润健康。

圣诞前夜,从脚趾头到下巴尖,
          圣诞老人层层包裹,踏上雪橇。
          驯鹿从高山飞下,挽具齐齐整整,
          急切奔驰,夜空晴朗清冷。

挥动长鞭,吹响口哨,
         向星星眨眼,对月亮招手,
         风驰电掣,越高越远,
         年复一年,奔行在魔幻的圣诞前夜。

(3)      飞翔的驯鹿
    
    以光速,驯鹿在空中奔驰,
    看哪,一闪即过,如生双翼!
    再高的屋顶,又怎能阻止
    矫捷的驯鹿一跃即至。

啊,顺着烟囱下降,只是
    一眨眼,一咧嘴,再加一弹指。
    快快的呀,只有这一夜,
    第一缕晨光之前,礼物就要送到。

骄傲的驯鹿,佩戴清脆鸣铃,
    守候于一个个雪白的屋顶。
    一点儿声响也无,
    长袜便塞满饰品和玩具。

(4) 美妙的圣诞前夜
冬季如此漫长,只想能够
偷偷看上一眼这个好老头
然而,他是如此容易害羞
只在深夜,匆匆来去

所有的孩子,不论贫富
都收到圣诞老人的礼物
圣诞前夜,他把他的爱心
传递,只为听到你们欢笑

所以,要乖乖的,在圣诞前夜
爬上床,盖上被,早早进入梦乡
圣诞老人会准时到来,背着魔袋
各种小玩艺,都是你们的最爱!

(最后一节无论如何修改总觉单薄,所以干脆提前到前面了)

(5) 圣诞精灵
孩子,你们善良而温柔,
因此,应该得到最好的所有。
年复一年,圣诞如期降临,
圣诞老人,也会如约到来!

多么好玩,他坐在圣诞树下,
掏出一件、又一件玩具。
脸颊红润,眼睛如星般璀璨,
看到他,心情立即灿烂!

看哪,这些玩具出自精灵之手,
绳上跳的是杂技小人和小猴,
还有足球和棒球,棋盘和拼图,
巧克力、吊坠盒和甜甜的棒糖。

啊,还有那可爱的洋娃娃,
眼睛扑闪,长长卷发,
小外套,小短袜、小鞋子和
亮晶晶的发卡与缎带。

与小精灵一起,整整一年,
圣诞老人为你们准备礼物!

做个好孩子
怎样做个好孩子?
圣诞老人最清楚。

好好学习不打闹,
关怀他人懂礼貌。
惹人伤心要认错,
乱发脾气要不得。

爱护朋友不说谎,
助人为乐最听话。
付出总比接受好,
小小道理记得牢!

(修来修去还是成了打油诗,倒数第三、四行读着不好,其他也就顺口而已,泪。不过这一首诗本身也不太符合现在的教育理念了,至少不符合我的,弄得古板一点算不算符合风格呢???挠头,爬下。)

#7 远行 2010-01-19

这么长篇的诗歌,译文优美,翻得辛苦,改得尽心,赞!