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楼主:牛牛的天空 2010-02-15

Kisses for Daddy
by Frances Watts & David Legge

Baby Bear was grumbly. He didn't want to go to bed.
He didn't want his bath, and he didn't want to kiss his mom and dad goodnight.

"Come on, grumbly bear." said his dad.  "A big bear kiss for  Mom, a big bear kiss for Dad, then bath and bed."

"No," said Baby Bear. But he padded slowly over to Mom and gave her a big kiss anyway.

"Mow what about a big bear kiss for me?" said Dad.

"No!" said Baby Bear. "No kiss for Daddy."

"Oh, " said Daddy, picking up Baby Bear and lifting him high.
"Well, how about a giraffe kiss instead?"

"Baby giraffes give their daddies long, tall kisses, like this---"
"No!" said Baby Bear.
"No giraffe kiss for Daddy."

"Oh dear," said Daddy, carrying Baby Bear up the stairs.
"How about a koala kiss instdad?"

"Baby koalas give their daddies cuddy, clingy kisses, like this---"
"No!" said Baby Bear. "No koala kiss for Daddy!"

"Too bad," said Daddy, as he ran the bath.
"How about a crocodile kiss instead?"

"Baby crocodiles give their daddies snappy, watery kisses, like this----"
"No!" said Baby Bear. "No crocodile kiss for Daddy!"

Maybe that's just as well," said Daddy, as he rubbed them both dry.
"How about a bat kiss instead? Baby bats give their daddies upside down kisses, like this---"
"No!" said Bby Bear. "No bat kiss for Daddy!"

"That's a shame," said Dddy, as he gave Baby Bear his toothbrush.
"How about a tiger kiss instead? Baby tigers give their daddies stripy, growly kisses, like this---"
"No!" growled Baby Bear. "No tiger kiss for Daddy!"

"Never mind," said Daddy, as he helped Baby Bear with his pyjamas.
"How about a monkey kiss instead?"

"Baby monkeys give their daddies jumpy, wriggly kisses, like this---"
"No!" giggled Baby Bear. "No monkey kiss for Daddy!"

"What a pity," said Daddy, as he pulled the blanket up to Baby Bear's chin.
 "How about a mouse kiss instead?"

"Baby mice give their daddies tiny, whiskers kisses."
"No!" squeaked Baby Bear. "No mouse kiss for Daddy!"

Daddy Bear shook his head sadly. "No kisses for Daddy at all, then?" He signed and started to walk away.
"Daddy!" cried Baby Bear.
"Yes?" said Daddy Bear.

"I do have something for you."
"What is it, Baby Bear?" asked his dad.

"A big bear kiss----and a big bear hua, too!"

翻译见下文。

#2 牛牛的天空 2010-02-15

给爸爸的吻
       作者:Frances Watts & David Legge

贝贝熊嘴里嘟哝着,他不想去睡觉。
他不想去洗澡,他也不想吻妈妈、爸爸并说晚安。

“快来,爱发牢骚的熊,”他爸爸说。
“亲亲妈妈,亲亲爸爸,然后去洗澡、睡觉。”

“不,”贝贝熊说。
但他还是慢慢爬到妈妈身边,勉强亲了亲妈妈。

“现在该亲爸爸了吧?”爸爸说。

“不!”贝贝熊说。
“不亲爸爸。”

“呦,”爸爸边说边把贝贝举过头顶。
“好,那给爸爸一个长颈鹿吻怎么样?”

“长颈鹿贝贝给他们的爸爸长长的、高高的吻,就象这样----”
“不!” 贝贝熊说。“我不给爸爸长颈鹿吻。”

“呦,亲爱的,”爸爸说着,把贝贝熊抱上了楼。
“那给爸爸一个数袋熊吻吧?”

“树袋熊贝贝会搂着他们的爸爸,贴的紧紧地亲,就象这样----”
“不!”贝贝熊反抗着,“不给爸爸树袋熊吻!”

“这样很不好,”爸爸说着进了浴室。
“那来个鳄鱼吻好吧?”

“鳄鱼贝贝会给他们的爸爸快速的,湿湿的吻,就象这样----”
“不!”贝贝熊说。“不给爸爸鳄鱼吻!”

“这样吧,”爸爸一边把他们两个的身体擦干。
“那蝙蝠吻怎么样?蝙蝠贝贝总是倒挂着亲爸爸,就象这样----”
“不!”“我不给爸爸蝙蝠吻!”

“太不好意思了。”爸爸说着把牙刷递给了贝贝熊,披上虎纹毛巾。
“那象老虎那样亲一下好吗?老虎崽总是咆哮着吻爸爸,就象这样----”

“不!”贝贝熊咆哮着。“不给爸爸老虎吻。”

“没关系,”爸爸说着,帮贝贝熊穿上睡衣。递给贝贝一只猴娃娃。
“那我们来个猴吻好吗?”

“小猴会跳着亲爸爸,就象这样-----”
“不!”贝贝熊咯咯地笑着。“不给爸爸猴吻!”

“太遗憾了,”爸爸说着,把毯子拉到贝贝的下巴。
“那我们来个老鼠吻好吗?”

鼠宝宝会给他们的爸爸小小的、长胡子的吻。”
“不!”贝贝熊尖叫着。“不给爸爸老鼠吻!”

熊爸爸伤心地摇摇头。“根本不想亲爸爸?”他叹着气转身向外走。
“爸爸!”贝贝熊喊到。
“怎么啦?”爸爸说。

“我有个东西要给你。”
“什么呀?亲爱的。”爸爸问。

“一个大大的熊吻,还有一个大大的熊抱!”

#3 囡囡妈 2010-02-15

1,题目有误,是给爸爸的吻,而不是爸爸的吻,意思不对了。

2,为啥要翻成“贝贝熊”?国内是把BERENSTAIN BEAR翻成“贝贝熊”的,为啥不直译“熊宝宝”?

3,grumbly,"That's a shame," 翻得不够准确,再琢磨琢磨。还有类似“不要在意,”这样的词,翻成“没关系”,感觉更贴切点。

这是绘本翻译,注意语言的上口和流畅。大声读出来,就知道哪里不顺了。

#4 牛牛的天空 2010-02-15

THANK YOU VERY MUCH!