仙子之履
仙子足上履,
小小一点点;
大不过花苞,
微恰如粒米。
仙子足上履,
楚楚尘不染;
往来无踪迹
众人皆空寻。
仙子足上履,
轻轻又巧巧;
身畔千百度,
谁人曾知晓。
(先凑个热闹,有空了再琢磨琢磨。英文的确实很好读,落花有空接着上。)
Fairy Shoes
by Annette Wynne
The little shoes that fairies wear
Are very small indeed;
No larger that a violet bud,
As tiny as a seed.
The little shoes that fairies wear
Are very trim and neat;
They leave no tracks behind for those
Who search along the street.
The little shoes that fairies wear
So light and soft and small
That though a million passed you by
You would not hear at all.
精灵穿的小鞋儿
真是非常小;
大不过紫罗兰花苞,
小如种子一粒.
精灵穿的小鞋儿
整洁又灵巧;
不留一点儿踪迹
让人们沿街寻找.
精灵穿的小鞋儿
轻盈、柔软又小巧
纵有千万擦身过
你也未曾知晓。
仙子之履
仙子足上履,
小小一点点;
大不过花苞,
微恰如粒米。
仙子足上履,
楚楚尘不染;
往来无踪迹
众人皆空寻。
仙子足上履,
轻轻又巧巧;
身畔千百度,
谁人曾知晓。
(先凑个热闹,有空了再琢磨琢磨。英文的确实很好读,落花有空接着上。)
来玩玩,
囡妈那个seed,可不可以说:微恰如粒籽
仙女穿的小鞋子
非常非常小
大不过花骨朵儿
小得就像花籽
仙女穿的小鞋子
光洁又灵巧
不留一点儿踪迹
让你遍寻不着.
仙女穿的小鞋子
又轻又软又妙
千万次身边走过
谁也察觉不了
觉得诗歌翻译好像比图画书翻译要难很多表情占位:s:123
落花和囡囡妈都译得很好,你们的起点太高了,吓得我都不敢跟贴了。我正在积极开动脑筋,希望在未来几天能够献上自己的拙作。
坚决支持这种诗歌体裁的同题翻译,诗歌真的好难翻译哟!
骑上快马送上我迟到的拙作:
仙子脚上玲珑履,
小小巧巧多有趣;
大如花苞叶上举,
微若米粒土中去。
仙子脚上玲珑履,
清清爽爽多有趣;
无影无踪翩翩去,
何处可寻人唏嘘。
仙子脚上玲珑履,
松松软软多有趣;
纵使万千擦肩过,
更有谁人能知许?
落花,我交作业了。
The little shoes that fairies wear
Are very small indeed;
No larger that a violet bud,
As tiny as a seed.
仙子足上履,
玲珑寸几许;
堪比罗兰蕾,
幼微赛花籽。
The little shoes that fairies wear
Are very trim and neat;
They leave no tracks behind for those
Who search along the street.
仙子足上履,
纤纤尘不染;
往来无痕踪
空寻道途中。
The little shoes that fairies wear
So light and soft and small
That though a million passed you by
You would not hear at all.
仙子足上履,
盈盈世无双;
身畔千百度,
来去空余香。
接小梅的,润色一下:
仙子足上履,
盈盈寸几许;
堪比罗兰芽,
幼微赛花籽。
仙子足上履,
纤纤尘不戏;
足后妙无痕,
遍寻影难觅。
仙子足上履,
缈缈如柔丝;
萦绕千百度,
未曾闻耳语。
很喜欢蚌田的翻译。第一很有诗味,第二与儿童语言很靠近。童诗翻译在尊重原意的基础上,能做到这两点,很难得。