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楼主:落花微雨 2010-03-04

Fairy Shoes

by Annette Wynne

The little shoes that fairies wear

Are very small indeed;

No larger that a violet bud,

As tiny as a seed.

The little shoes that fairies wear

Are very trim and neat;

They leave no tracks behind for those

Who search along the street.

The little shoes that fairies wear

So light and soft and small

That though a million passed you by

You would not hear at all.

精灵穿的小鞋儿

真是非常小;

大不过紫罗兰花苞,

小如种子一粒.

精灵穿的小鞋儿

整洁又灵巧;

不留一点儿踪迹

让人们沿街寻找.

精灵穿的小鞋儿

轻盈、柔软又小巧

纵有千万擦身过

你也未曾知晓。

#2 囡囡妈 2010-03-05

仙子之履

仙子足上履,
小小一点点;
大不过花苞,
微恰如粒米。

仙子足上履,
楚楚尘不染;
往来无踪迹
众人皆空寻。

仙子足上履,
轻轻又巧巧;
身畔千百度,
谁人曾知晓。

(先凑个热闹,有空了再琢磨琢磨。英文的确实很好读,落花有空接着上。)

#3 蚌田 2010-03-05

来玩玩,
囡妈那个seed,可不可以说:微恰如粒籽

仙女穿的小鞋子
非常非常小
大不过花骨朵儿
小得就像花籽

仙女穿的小鞋子
光洁又灵巧
不留一点儿踪迹
让你遍寻不着.

仙女穿的小鞋子
又轻又软又妙
千万次身边走过
谁也察觉不了

#4 圆月饼 2010-03-06

觉得诗歌翻译好像比图画书翻译要难很多表情占位:s:123

#5 译海泛舟 2010-03-10

落花和囡囡妈都译得很好,你们的起点太高了,吓得我都不敢跟贴了。我正在积极开动脑筋,希望在未来几天能够献上自己的拙作。

坚决支持这种诗歌体裁的同题翻译,诗歌真的好难翻译哟!

#6 译海泛舟 2010-03-14

骑上快马送上我迟到的拙作:

仙子脚上玲珑履,
小小巧巧多有趣;
大如花苞叶上举,
微若米粒土中去。

仙子脚上玲珑履,
清清爽爽多有趣;
无影无踪翩翩去,
何处可寻人唏嘘。

仙子脚上玲珑履,
松松软软多有趣;
纵使万千擦肩过,
更有谁人能知许?

#7 译海泛舟 2010-03-15

落花,我交作业了。

#8 小梅仙子 2010-03-16

The little shoes that fairies wear

Are very small indeed;

No larger that a violet bud,

As tiny as a seed.

仙子足上履,
玲珑寸几许;
堪比罗兰蕾,
幼微赛花籽。

The little shoes that fairies wear

Are very trim and neat;

They leave no tracks behind for those

Who search along the street.

仙子足上履,
纤纤尘不染;
往来无痕踪
空寻道途中。

The little shoes that fairies wear

So light and soft and small

That though a million passed you by

You would not hear at all.

仙子足上履,
盈盈世无双;
身畔千百度,
来去空余香。

#9 清水汀 2010-03-17

接小梅的,润色一下:
仙子足上履,
盈盈寸几许;
堪比罗兰芽,
幼微赛花籽。

仙子足上履,
纤纤尘不戏;
足后妙无痕,
遍寻影难觅。

仙子足上履,
缈缈如柔丝;
萦绕千百度,
未曾闻耳语。

#10 海姐姐 2010-03-18

很喜欢蚌田的翻译。第一很有诗味,第二与儿童语言很靠近。童诗翻译在尊重原意的基础上,能做到这两点,很难得。