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[翻译大赛NO.3]East o' the Sun and West o' the Moon/太阳以东 月亮以西

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楼主:水离 2010-09-07

ONCE on a time there was a poor husbandman who had so many children that he hadn't much of either food or clothing to give them. Pretty children they all were, but the prettiest was the youngest daughter, who was so lovely that there was no end to all her loveliness.

So one day—'twas on a Thursday evening, late at the fall of the year, the weather was so wild and rough outside, and it was so cruelly dark, and rain fell and wind blew till the walls of the cottage shook again—there they all sat round the fire, busy with this thing and that. But just then, all at once, something gave three taps on the windowpane. Then the father went out to see what was the matter, and when he got out of doors, what should he see but a great big white bear!

"Good evening to you," said the White Bear.

"The same to you," said the man.

"Will you give me your youngest daughter? If you will, I'll make you as rich as you are now poor," said the Bear.

Well, the man would not be at all sorry to be rich, but still he thought he must have a bit of a talk with his daughter first, so he went in and told them how there was a great white bear waiting outside, who had given his word to make them rich if he could only have the youngest daughter.

The lassie said "No" outright. Nothing could get her to say anything else. So the man went out and settled it with the White Bear that he should come again the next Thursday evening and get an answer.

Meantime, he talked his daughter over, and kept on telling her of all the riches they would get, and how well off she [4] would be herself; and so at last she thought better of it, and washed and mended her rags, made herself as smart as she could, and was ready to start.

Next Thursday evening came the White Bear to fetch her, and she got upon his back with her bundle, and off they went.

So, when they had gone a bit of the way, the White Bear said:

"Are you afraid?"

No, she wasn't.

"Well, mind and hold tight to my shaggy coat, and then there's nothing to fear," said the White Bear.

So she rode a long, long way, until they came to a very steep hill. There, on the face of it, the White Bear gave a knock, and a door opened, and they came into a castle where there were many rooms, all lit up, rooms gleaming with silver and gold, and there, too, was a table ready laid, and it was all as grand as grand could be.

Then the White Bear gave her a silver bell, and when she wanted anything she had only to ring it and she would get it at once.

Well, after she had eaten and drunk, and evening wore on, she got sleepy after her journey, and thought she would like to go to bed. So she rang the bell, and she had scarce taken hold of it before she came into a chamber where there was a bed made, as fair and white as anyone could wish to sleep in, with silken pillows and curtains and gold fringe.

She slept quite soundly until morning; then she found her breakfast waiting in a pretty room. When she had eaten it, the girl made up her mind to take a walk around, in order to find out if there were any other people there besides herself.

But she saw nobody but an old woman, whom she took to be a witch, and as the dame beckoned to her, the girl went at once.

"Little girl," said the Witch, "if you'll promise not to say a word to anybody, I'll tell you the secret about this place."

Of course, the girl promised at once, so the old dame said:

"In this house there lives a White Bear, but you must know [5] that he is only a White Bear in the daytime. Every night he throws off his beast shape and becomes a man, for he is under the spell of a wicked fairy. Now, be sure and not mention this to anybody, or misfortune will come," and with these words she disappeared.

从前有个穷苦的农民,他有很多孩子,但他是太穷了,这些孩子都既吃不饱又穿不暖。他们个个都很漂亮,最小的女儿尤其漂亮,怎么说都不过分。

在一个秋天的星期四的晚上,天气非常糟糕,外面那么黑,风雨又吹得他们的小屋摇摇晃晃——这家人坐在火炉旁边,忙着自己手里的活儿。突然,有什么人在窗外敲了三下。于是农民走出去看是谁。他走出门去,竟然看到了一只大白熊。

“晚上好啊。”白熊说。

“晚上好。”农民说。

“你能把你的小女儿嫁给我么?如果你把她嫁给我,我就能让你变得很富有。”白熊说。

农民自然想成为富人,但是他觉得他应该首先跟自己的小女儿谈谈。所以他走进茅屋,告诉孩子们,门外有头大白熊,如果它娶了小女儿,它就能让他们全家富起来。

小女儿当即反对,并且再也不肯说一句话。所以农民只能出门跟白熊说,让它下周四晚上再来听小女儿的回音。

这一周里他一直在说服小女儿,告诉她他们将来会有多富有,并且她自己也将得到很多好处;最终这个姑娘想通了决定嫁给白熊,她洗刷修补了一番旧衣服,把自己尽可能打扮得漂漂亮亮,就准备出发了。

第二个周四的晚上白熊来接她,她拿上自己的包裹骑在白熊的背上,然后他们就离开了。

当他们走了一段路后,白熊问她:“你害怕么?”

“不,我不怕。”

“那好,紧紧抓住我背上的毛,就没什么危险的了。”白熊说。

她骑在熊背上走了很长很长的路,直到他们来到一座非常陡峭的山下。白熊在山上敲了一下,山上开出一扇门来。他们便走进了一座城堡,城堡里有很多明亮的房间,用金银珠宝装饰着,还有一张桌子已经被安放妥当,能有多华丽就有多华丽。

白熊给了小女儿一只银铃,当她想要什么的时候只要摇响这个铃就能立刻得到她想要的任何东西。

当她吃过晚饭,夜幕降临的时候,经过了这长途跋涉,她开始有睡意,觉得自己最好去睡觉。她摇响了铃,其实她只是碰了它一下,她就发现自己进入了卧室,一张床已经准备好了,床上放着丝绸枕头,床边挂着镶着金边的绸帐,舒服得谁都想睡在上面。

她睡了美美的一觉;然后她发现早餐已经在一个漂亮的房间里等着她了。当她用过早餐后,这个姑娘打算到处逛逛,看看是不是周围还有其他人。

但是除了一个老妇人之外,她谁也没见着。这个老妇人是个女巫,女巫示意她过去,她便走上前去。

“小姑娘,”女巫说道,“如果你保证不把我的话告诉别人,我就把这个地方的秘密告诉你。”

当然啦,这个姑娘立刻作了保证,于是老妇人说:“这个房子里住着一只白熊,但你要知道,其实他只是在白天是一只白熊。每天晚上他都会变成一个男人,因为他被一个邪恶的精灵施了咒语。好了,记着不要把这件事告诉任何人,否则不幸就会来临。”说完这些话巫婆就消失了。

So things went on happily for some time, but at last the girl began to grow sad and sorrowful, for she went about all day alone, and she longed to go home to see her father and mother and brothers and sisters.

"Well, well," said the Bear, "perhaps there's a cure for all this sorrow. But you must promise me one thing. When you go home, you mustn't talk about me, except when they are all present, or, if you do, you will bring bad luck to both of us."

So one Sunday the White Bear came and said now they would set off to see her father and mother.

Well, off they started, she sitting on his back, and they went far and long. At last they came to a grand house, and there her brothers and sisters were running about out of doors at play, and everything was so pretty 'twas a joy to see.

"This is where your father and mother live now," said the White Bear; "but don't forget what I told you, or you'll make us both unlucky."

No—bless her!—she'd not forget, and when they reached the house the White Bear turned right about and left her.

Then, when she went in to see her father and mother, there was such joy there was no end to it. None of them could thank her enough for all the good fortune she had brought them.

They had everything they wished, as fine as could be, and they all wanted to know how she got on and where she lived.

Well, she said it was very good to live where she did, and she had all she wished. What she said besides I don't know, but I don't believe any of them had the right end of the stick, or that they got much out of her.

But after dinner her sister called her outside the room, and asked all manner of questions about the White Bear—whether he was cross, and whether she ever set eyes on him, and such [6] like—and the end of it all was that she told her sister the story of how the White Bear was under a spell.

她的生活一开始还如过去一样快乐,但她终于开始闷闷不乐起来,因为她天天独自一个人逛来逛去,而且她开始想念自己的父母和兄弟姐妹。

“好吧,好吧。”白熊说:“也许我有法子让你不再闷闷不乐。但是你要先向我保证,如果你回到家,你不许跟别人提起我,除非你的家人都在场,否则你就会给我们两个带来厄运。”

一个星期天,白熊告诉她,他们可以去见她的父母了。

她骑在白熊的背上,走了很久很久。终于,他们来到一座华丽的房子面前,她的兄弟姐妹们正在门外跑来跑去地做游戏,一切都是那么的美好,让人看了便觉得欢喜。

“这就是你的父母现在住的地方,”白熊说:“但不要忘了我跟你说过的事情,否则你会让我们两个都遭殃。”

“我当然不会的!”她说,当他们到达房子前面时,白熊立刻转身离开了。

当她进门见到父母时,大家都高兴得合不拢嘴。她的家人们都非常感激她给他们带来了好运。

他们得到了他们想要的任何东西,而且样样尽善尽美。他们也都很想知道她的生活如何,住在哪儿。

她便说自己住的地方非常好,想要什么就有什么。我不知道她还说了什么,但是我觉得无论她说多少,她的家人们都会还想知道更多。

晚饭后,她的姐姐把她叫出了房间,问了她一堆关于白熊的问题——他是不是基督徒,她是不是曾正眼看过他,以及其他诸如此类的问题——终于她把白熊被施了咒语这件事情原原本本地都告诉了她的姐姐。

But the other girl wouldn't listen to the story, for she said it couldn't be true, and this made the youngest daughter very angry.

In the evening the White Bear came and fetched her away, and when they had gone a bit of the way he asked her whether she had done as he had told her and refused to speak about him.

Then she confessed that she had spoken a few words to her sister about him, and the Bear was very angry, for he said she would surely bring bad luck to them both.

When they reached home, she remembered how her sister had refused to believe the story about the White Bear, so in the night, when she knew that the Bear was fast asleep, she stole out of bed, lighted her candle, and crept into his room. Yes, there he lay fast asleep, but instead of being a White Bear, he was the handsomest Prince you ever saw. She gave such a start that she dropped three spots of hot tallow from the candle on to his pillow, so she ran off in a great fright.

Next morning the White Bear said to her: "I fear you have found out my secret, for I saw the drops of tallow on my pillow this morning, and now I know that you spoke to your sister about me. If you had only kept quiet for a whole year, then I should have become a man for always, and I should have made you my wife at once. But now all ties are snapped between us, and I must go away to a big castle which stands East o' the sun and West o' the moon, and there, too, lives a Princess with a nose three ells long, and she's the wife I must have now."

The girl wept, and took it ill, but there was no help for it, go he must.

Then she asked if she mightn't go with him.

No! she mightn't.

"Tell me the way, then," she said, "and I'll search you out; that, surely, I may get leave to do."

Yes; she might do that, but there was no way to the place. [7] It lay East o' the sun and West o' the moon, and thither she'd never find her way.

但是她的姐姐并不相信这个故事,因为她觉得这不可能是真的。这让她非常生气。

到了晚上,白熊来接走了她,当他们走了一段路时,白熊问她是不是按照自己说的话做了。

她只好承认自己跟姐姐说了一些关于他的事情,白熊非常生气,因为他之前已经告诫过她这样做会给他们两个带来厄运了。

当他们回到家后,她想起自己的姐姐拒绝相信关于白熊的故事,所以在晚上,她察觉到白熊已经熟睡之后,她偷偷爬下床,点亮蜡烛,溜进了白熊的房间。是的,他睡在床上,旦那并不是一只白熊,而是一个最最英俊的王子。她吃了一惊,结果不小心把三滴滚烫的蜡烛油落到了他的枕头上。她害怕地立刻逃走了。

第二天早上,白熊对她说:“恐怕你已经知道了我的秘密,因为早上我看到我的枕头上有三滴蜡烛油,而且你又跟你的姐姐说了我的事情。如果你再保守这个秘密一年,我就可以永远自由了,并且我本应立刻娶你为妻的。但是我们现在一切都完了。我现在必须去在太阳以东、月亮以西的一座城堡,那里有个鼻子有三米长的公主,现在我必须去跟她结婚了。”

她痛哭起来,但根本无济于事,他必须立刻离开了。

她问她是不是可以跟他一起去,但答案是否定的。

“那就告诉我怎么走吧。”她说,“我去找你,我一定会找到你的。”

她自然可以去找他,但根本没有去那个地方的路。它在太阳以东、月亮以西,她永远都不可能找到。

So next morning, when she woke, both Prince and castle were gone, and there she lay on a little green patch, in the midst of the thick, gloomy wood, and by her side lay the same bundle of rags that she had brought with her from her old home.

So when she had rubbed the sleep from her eyes, and wept till she was tired, she set out on her way and walked many, many days, till she came to a lofty crag. Under it sat an old hag, who played with a golden apple, which she tossed about. The lassie asked her if she knew the way to the Prince who lived in the castle that lay East o' the sun and West o' the moon, and who was to marry a Princess with a nose three ells long.

"How did you come to know about him?" said the old hag; "but maybe you are the lassie who ought to have had him?"

Yes, she was.

"So, so, it's you, is it?" said the old hag. "Well, all I know about him is that he lives in the castle that lies East o' the sun and West o' the moon, and thither you'll come, late or never; but still you may have the loan of my horse, and on him you can ride to my next neighbor. Maybe she'll be able to tell you what you want to know; and when you get there, just give the horse a switch under the left ear, and beg him to be off home; and stay, you may take this golden apple with you."

So she got upon the horse and rode a long, long time, till she came to another crag, under which sat another old hag, with a golden carding-comb in her hand. The lassie asked her if she knew the way to the castle that lay East o' the sun and West o' the moon, and she answered, like the first old hag, that she knew nothing about it, except that it was East o' the sun and West o' the moon.

"And thither you'll come, late or never; but you shall have the loan of my horse to go to my next neighbor; maybe she'll [8] tell you all about it; and when you get there, just switch the horse under the left ear and beg him to be off home."

当第二天早上她醒过来的时候,王子跟城堡都不见了,她躺在一块小小的草地上,周围是黑暗的密林。在她的旁边是她从家带来的旧衣服的小包裹。

她揉了揉眼睛好赶走睡意,哭了好大一阵子,直到自己哭累了才离开那里。她走了很多很多天,直到自己来到一座陡峭的山下。山脚有一个老巫婆,手里玩弄着一只金苹果。姑娘问她是不是知道王子住的地方在哪里,那个地方是在太阳以东、月亮以西,而且王子即将跟一个鼻子有三米长的公主结婚了。

“你怎么认识他的?”老巫婆问,“也许你就是那个该嫁给他的人。”

“是的,我就是。”

“哦,看来的确是你咯?”老巫婆说,“我唯一知道的就是他住在太阳以东、月亮以西的城堡里,但你得花很久才能到那里,说不定永远都到不了。不过你可以借我的马去找一个人,她是我的邻居,也许她能告诉你你想知道的事儿。当你到了那儿,在马的左耳朵下边拍一下,让它回来;此外你还可以带上我的金苹果。”

于是她骑上了老巫婆的马走了很久的一段路,直到她到了另外一座陡峭的山下,那儿坐着另外一个老巫婆,在用一把金梳子梳头。姑娘问她是不是知道去太阳以东、月亮以西的那座城堡的路,老巫婆的话跟第一个老巫婆的话没什么区别,她也不知道怎么走,只知道那座城堡是在太阳以东、月亮以西的地方。

“而且你得花很久才能到那里,说不定永远都到不了。不过你可以借我的马去找一个人,她是我的邻居,也许她能告诉你你想知道的事儿。当你到了那儿,在马的左耳朵下边拍一下,让它回来。”

And this old hag gave her the golden carding-comb; it might be she'd find some use for it, she said. So the lassie got up on the horse and rode far, far away, and had a weary time; and so at last she came to another great crag, under which sat another old hag, spinning with a golden spinning wheel. The lassie asked her, too, if she knew the way to the Prince and where the castle was that lay East o' the sun and West o' the moon. So it was the same thing over again.

"Maybe it's you who ought to have had the Prince?" said the old hag.

Yes, it was.

But, she, too, didn't know the way a bit better than the other two. East o' the sun and West o' the moon she knew it was; that was all.

"And thither you'll come, late or never; but I'll lend you my horse, and then I think you'd best ride to the East Wind and ask him; maybe he knows those parts and can blow you thither. But when you get to him, you need only give the horse a switch under the left ear, and he'll trot home of himself."

And so, too, she gave the lassie the golden spinning wheel.

"Maybe you'll find a use for it," said the old hag.

Then on she rode a great many weary days before she got to the East Wind's house; but at last she did reach it, and then she asked the East Wind if he could tell her the way to the Prince who dwelt East o' the sun and West o' the moon. Yes, the East Wind had often heard about them, both the Prince and the castle, but he couldn't tell her the way, for he'd never blown so far.

"But, if you will, I'll go with you to my brother, the West Wind; maybe he's been there, for he's much stronger. So, if you will just jump on my back, I'll carry you thither."

Yes, she got on his back, and I should just think they went swiftly along.

So, when they reached there, they went into the West [9] Wind's house, and the East Wind said the lassie he had brought was the one that ought to have married the Prince who lived in the castle East o' the sun and West o' the moon, and that she had set out to seek him. He then said how he had come with her, and would be glad to know if the West Wind knew how to get to the castle.

这个老巫婆还把自己的金梳子给了她,说也许能派上用场。于是她骑上马走了很长很长、长到让人厌倦的长路,最终她到了另外一座陡峭的山下,山下坐着一位老巫婆,正在用金纺车纺纱。姑娘问了她同样的问题,是不是知道怎么去太阳以东、月亮以西的那座城堡。这个老巫婆也不知道。

“也许你就是那个该嫁给他的人咯?”老巫婆问。

“是的,我就是。”

但是老巫婆知道的事情并不比另外两个巫婆更多。她也只是知道那座城堡是在太阳以东、月亮以西而已。

“此外你得花很久才能到那里,说不定永远都到不了。不过你可以借我的马,你最好骑着它去找东风,也许他知道这些地方,还能把你吹到城堡去。你到了那儿就在马的左耳朵下面拍一下,它就能自己回来了。”

此外,她还把自己的金纺车送给了姑娘。“也许它对你有用。”老巫婆说。

于是她又骑着马走了很长很长,长到令人不耐烦的一段路,终于她到了东风的家。她问东风能不能告诉她怎么去找住在太阳以东、月亮以西的城堡里的王子。东方的确听说过王子和城堡的事情,但是他也说不清怎么走,因为他从来没有吹到那么远的地方去过。

“不过如果你愿意的话,我可以带你去找我的兄弟西风,他比我强壮得多,也许他曾吹到那儿去过。你跳到我背上来吧,我带你到他那儿去。”

她便骑在东风的背上,很快就到了那里。

当他们到了西风家里的时候,东风说,他带来的这个姑娘应该嫁给住在太阳以东、月亮以西城堡里的王子,她现在正到处奔波寻找王子。他跟姑娘一起来,看看西风是不是能知道那城堡在哪儿。

"Nay," said the West Wind, "for I've never blown so far; but, if you will, I'll go with you to our brother, the South Wind, for he's much stronger than either of us, and he has flapped his wings both far and wide. Maybe he'll tell you; so you can get on my back and I'll carry you to him."

Yes, she got on his back, and so they traveled to the South Wind, and they weren't so very long on the way, I should think.

When they reached there, the West Wind asked him if he could tell them the way to the castle that lay East o' the sun and West o' the moon, for this was the lassie who ought to have married the Prince who lived there.

"You don't say so! That's she, is it?" said the South Wind. "Well, I've blustered about in most places in my time, but so far I have never blown; but, if you will, I'll take you to my brother, the North Wind; he is the oldest and strongest of all of us. If he doesn't know where to find the place, you will never find anybody to tell you where it is. You can get on my back and I'll carry you thither."

Yes, she got on his back, and away he went from his house at a very high rate, and this time, too, she wasn't long on her way.

When they got to the North Wind's house, he was so wild and cross that the puffs came from quite a long way off.

"WHAT DO YOU WANT?" he roared out to them, in such a voice that it made them both shiver.

"Well," said the South Wind, "you needn't talk like that, for here I am, your brother, the South Wind, and here is the lassie who ought to have had the Prince who dwells at the castle that lies East o' the sun and West o' the moon, [10] and now she wants to know if you were ever there, and can tell her the way, for she would be so glad to find it again."

“我也不知道,”西风说,“因为我从来没有吹到那么远的地方,但是如果你愿意的话,我可以带你去找南风,他比我们都更强,也许他的翅膀能飞到更宽更远的地方去。他有可能知道,你跳到我背上来吧,我带你到他那儿去。”

她便骑在西风的背上,没花太久的时间就到了那儿。

当他们到了南风家里时,西风问南方是否能告诉他们怎么去太阳以东、月亮以西的那座城堡的路,因为这个姑娘应该去那儿跟住在城堡里的王子结婚。

“真的么?这就是那个姑娘?”南风说,“我一生中去过的地方可不少,但这个地方我也没去过。不过如果你愿意的话,我可以带你去我兄弟北风那儿,他是我们当中年纪最大、力气也最大的。如果他都不知道这个地方在那儿,那其他人也就不可能知道了。你跳到我背上来吧,我把你带到他那儿去。”

她便骑在南风的背上,南风飞得很快,他们没花多久就到了北风的家。

“你们来干嘛?”北风咆哮道,这声音让他们都发起抖来。

“唉,”南风说,“是我啊,你的兄弟南风,你没必要叫那么大声。我带来了一个姑娘,她应当嫁给那个住在太阳以东、月亮以西的城堡里的王子,现在她过来是想看看你是不是去过那里,能不能告诉她怎么走。她非常想重新找到那个王子。”

"YES! I KNOW WELL ENOUGH WHERE IT IS," said the North Wind. "Once in my life I blew an aspen leaf there, but I was so tired that I couldn't blow another puff for days after. But if you really wish to go there, and aren't afraid to trust yourself to me, I'll take you on my back and blow you thither."

Yes! with all her heart. She must and would get thither, if it were possible in any way; and as for fear, however madly he went, she wouldn't be at all afraid.

"Very well, then," said the North Wind. "But you must sleep here to-night, for we must have the whole day before us if we are to get thither at all."

Early next morning the North Wind woke her, and puffed himself up, and blew himself out, and made himself so stout and big 'twas fearful to look at him; so off they went, up through the air, as if they would never stop till they came to the world's end.

Down below there was such a storm, it threw down long tracts of wood and many houses, and when it swept over the great sea, ships foundered by hundreds.

So they tore on and on—nobody can believe how far they went—and all the while they still went over the sea, and the North Wind got more and more weary, and so out of breath he could scarce get out a puff. His wings drooped and drooped, till at last he sank so low that the crests of the waves dashed over his heels.

"Are you afraid?" asked the North Wind.

No, she wasn't.

But they weren't very far from land, and the North Wind had still so much strength in him that he managed to throw her upon the shore under the windows of the castle which lay East o' the sun and West o' the moon; but then he was so weak and worn out that he had to stay there and rest for many days before he was fit to return home.

Next morning the lassie sat down under the castle window [11] and began to play with the golden apple; and the first person she saw was Long-nose, who was to marry the Prince.

“啊,我当然知道它在哪儿。”北风说,“曾经我把一片白杨树叶吹到那儿去过,那次我可累坏了,好几天都没缓过劲儿来。但是如果你真的想去那儿的话,就别害怕,我能载着你把你吹到那儿。”

“我当然不害怕!”她真心地说,“我必须要到那里去,只要能到那儿。至于害怕,无论你飞起来有多快,我都不会害怕的。”

“那便很好。”北风说,“但你今晚必须现在这儿睡一觉,如果你想去那儿的话,我们必须天亮前出发。”

第二天一大早,北风叫醒了她,把自己鼓得又高又大,看起来让人害怕。他们出发了,在高空中飞行,就好像他们不到世界的尽头就不会停下来似的。

他们的身下刮起了大风,吹到了大片森林和房屋,当他们飞到大海上空时,千百只船都在大风暴里遭了秧。

他们狂奔了很久——没人能想象他们到底走了多远——但是他们依然还在大海的上空,北风越来越累,他几乎要吹不动了。他的翅膀越垂越低,到了最后他飞得那么低,海浪都溅到了他的脚后跟上。

“你害怕吗?”北风问。

她一点儿也不害怕。

他们离陆地并不远了,北风还有力气把她扔到海岸上去,那就在太阳以东、月亮以西的城堡的窗户下面。之后北风累得筋疲力尽,只能休息几天才能有力气再飞回家去。

第二天早上,这个姑娘在城堡的窗户下面坐着玩起了金苹果。她看见的第一个人就是那个长鼻子的要嫁给王子的公主。

"What do you want for your golden apple, lassie?" said Long-nose; and she threw up the window.

"It's not for sale, for gold or money," said the lassie.

"If it's not for sale for gold or money, what is it that you will sell it for?" said the Princess. "You may name your own price for it."

"Well, if you will let me speak a few words alone with the Prince who lives in the castle, I will give you the apple," she answered.

Yes, she might; that could be done. So the Princess got the golden apple, and the lassie was shown into the Prince's room. But when she got inside she found that the Prince was fast asleep, and although she shook him and called him loudly, it was no use, for she couldn't wake him, so she had to go away again.

Next day she sat down under the castle window again, and began to card with her golden carding-comb; and the same thing happened. The Princess asked what she wanted for it; and she said it wasn't for sale for either gold or money, but that if she might have a few words alone with the Prince, the Princess should have the comb.

So she was taken up to the Prince's room, and again she found him fast asleep; and although she wept and shook him for quite a long time she couldn't get life into him.

So the next morning the lassie sat down under the castle window and began to spin with her golden spinning wheel; and that, too, the Princess with the long nose wanted to have.

So she threw up the window and asked what the lassie wanted for it; and the girl said, as she had said twice before, that if she might have a few words alone with the Prince the Princess might have the wheel, and welcome.

Yes, she might do that; and the lassie was shown again into the Prince's room. This time he was wide awake, and he was very pleased indeed to see her.

"Ah!" said the Prince, "you've just come in the nick of [12] time, for to-morrow is to be our wedding day; but now I won't have Long-nose, and you are the bride for me. I'll just say that I want to find out what my wife is fit for, and then I'll beg her to wash the pillow slip which has on it the three spots of tallow. She will be sure to say 'Yes'; but when she tries to get out the spots she'll soon find that it is not possible, for she is a troll, like all the rest of her family, and it is not possible for a troll to get rid of the marks. Then I'll say that I won't have any other bride than she who can wash out the spots of tallow, and I'll call you in to do it."

“姑娘,你的金苹果卖多少钱?”长鼻子打开窗户问她。

“这个苹果不卖,金不换银不换。”她说。

“如果金不换银不换,那你想要什么来换?”公主问,“你说说看。”

“那好,如果你让我跟城堡里的王子说几句话,我就把苹果给你。”她回答公主。

“好,成交。”于是公主得到了苹果,而姑娘被带进了王子的房间。但是她进了房间发现王子竟然已经睡着了。无论她怎么摇晃王子还是大声叫他都没用。她没有叫醒他,只能离开了。

第二天她又坐在城堡的窗下,开始用金梳子梳头,同样的事情发生了。公主问她想要什么来换梳子,她说这梳子金不换银不换,但是如果她能跟王子说几句话,公主就能得到这把梳子。

于是她又被带进了王子的房间,王子又一次睡得昏昏沉沉,无论她怎么哭泣还是摇晃了他好大一阵子,王子都没有醒来。

第三天早上,她坐在城堡的窗下开始用金纺车纺纱,同样的,长鼻子公主还想要金纺车。

公主打开窗户问她想要什么换金纺车,正如她前两次说的,如果她能跟王子单独说几句话,金纺车就归公主了。

公主便答应了。姑娘被再一次带进了王子的房间。这次王子是醒着的,而且他非常开心能见到她。

“啊!”王子说,“你来得正好,因为明天就将是我结婚的日子。但是我不会跟长鼻子结婚的,因为你才是我真正的新娘。到时候我会说我将看看我的新娘会做什么,然后我就请求她洗掉枕头上的三滴蜡烛油。她自然会去做,但是她根本洗不掉,因为她是个巫女,就跟她的家人一样,而巫女是洗不掉蜡烛油的。到时候我就会说只有能洗掉我枕头上的蜡烛油的姑娘才能成为我的新娘,那样我就可以让你把它洗掉了。”

The wedding was to take place next day, so just before the ceremony the Prince said:

"First of all, I'd just like to see what my bride is fit for."

"Yes," said the mother, "I'm quite willing."

"Well, I have a pillow slip which, somehow or other, has got some spots of grease on it, and I have sworn never to take any bride but the woman who is able to wash them out for me. If she can't do that, she is not worth having."

Well, that was no great thing, they said, so they agreed; and she with the long nose began to wash away as hard as ever she could; but the more she rubbed and scrubbed the bigger the spots grew.

"Ah!" said the old hag, her mother, "you can't wash; let me try."

But she hadn't long taken the job in hand before it got far worse than ever; and with all her rubbing, wringing, and scrubbing, the spots grew bigger and blacker and darker and uglier.

Then all the other trolls began to wash; but the longer it lasted the blacker and uglier it grew, until at last it looked as though it had been up the chimney.

"Ah!" said the Prince, "you are none of you worth a straw; you can't wash. Why, there outside sits a beggar lassie, and I'll be bound she knows how to wash better than the whole lot of you."

So he shouted to the lassie to come in, and in she came.

[13] "Can you wash this clean, lassie?" said he.

"I don't know, but I think I can."

And almost before she had taken it and dipped it in the water, it was white as driven snow, and whiter still.

"Yes, you are the lassie for me," said the Prince.

At that the old hag flew in such a rage that she burst on the spot, and the Princess with the long nose after her; and then the whole pack of trolls did the same.

As for the Prince and Princess, they had a grand wedding, and lived happily at the castle East o' the sun and West o' the moon until the end of their days.
第二天婚礼就要举行了。在婚礼之前,王子说:“首先,我想看看我的新娘会做什么。”

“不错,”新娘的妈妈说,“我很乐意。”

“我有一个枕头,不知怎么上面有些油点,我曾经发誓娶那个能把它洗掉的姑娘为妻。如果她连这污点都洗不掉,那就不配做我的妻子。”

参加婚礼的人都觉得那算不上什么,于是长鼻子公主开始卖力地洗,但无论她怎么洗都无济于事。她越用力,枕头上的污渍就越大。

“啊!”她的妈妈,那个老巫婆说,“你洗不干净,让我来试试。”

但是她洗了一会儿,枕头就变得更糟了,她洗啊、刷啊、搓啊,枕头上的油点却越来越大越来越黑。

于是所有的巫女都过来洗,但是洗得越久枕头就越脏,到后来它几乎像是从烟囱里拿出来的一样。

“啊!”王子说,“你们真是没用,谁也洗不干净。门外有个要饭的姑娘,我相信她一定知道怎么洗得比你们都好。”

于是他喊姑娘进来,于是她走了进来。

“请问你能把它洗干净么,姑娘?”他问。

“我不知道,但我想我能。”

她刚拿过这枕头,刚把它浸到水里,这枕头就一下子变得雪白。

“那么,你就是我的新娘了。”王子说。

那老巫婆愤怒地叫了起来,然后那长鼻子公主也愤怒地尖叫了起来,之后所有的巫女都叫了起来。

至于王子和他的新娘,他们举行了盛大的婚礼,并且在太阳以东、月亮以西的城堡里一直幸福地生活着,直到永远。

#2 远行 2010-09-15

这篇长,辛苦了。
主要看了中文,总的感觉,有些地方表达得不够生动。

比如这句,那老巫婆愤怒地叫了起来,

原文是At that the old hag flew in such a rage that she burst on the spot, 原文里的FLEW和BURST ON THE SPOT, 巫婆气急败坏的样子描写得很生动,而在译文里就没体现出来。

类似的,还有一些。

先留个记号,抽空再来看。

#3 水离 2010-09-19

啊咧,多谢指教^^

这样说来好像讲童话比翻童话要简单 因为前者可以通过自己的语气表达感情什么的

#4 慕容胖胖 2010-12-04

英文方面没什么太大的难度。也是和远行同感,有些生动不足。

哈,远行的挑的那句,我也是一下想到气急败坏那个词。

翻这么长的故事,水离也是蛮辛苦了。

#5 远行 2010-12-05

楼上的好久没来了,歪个楼,问候一下哈:)

#6 秋晓 2010-12-31

水离辛苦!

同意楼上几位的意见,做为童话故事而言,语言有点点生硬

#7 道寻常 2010-12-31

Nothing could get her to say anything else并且再也不肯说一句话。
应该是除了“不”什么都不说,表示她就是不同意,不是不说话

Meantime he talked his daughter over这一周里他一直在说服小女儿
这应该是叙述结果,不是过程

whom she took to be a witch这个老妇人是个女巫
从意思讲有些出入,但童话这么翻倒也没问题

So things went on happily for some time她的生活一开始还如过去一样快乐
这不恰当吧,细想的话和上下文都有冲突

I don't believe any of them got the right end of the stick or got much out of her但是我觉得无论她说多少,她的家人们都会还想知道更多
和原文意思出入太大了点。这儿两个场景应该是源于人喜欢说小话而不愿意公开讨论的心理。
可以参考http://www.phrases.org.uk/bulletin_board/16/messages/508.html

whether he was cross他是不是基督徒
cross有形容词“脾气暴躁”的意思

真太长了,先只看完,不挑刺了。

#8 道寻常 2010-12-31

忍不住,If you had only kept quiet for a whole year, then I should have become a man for always, and I should have made you my wife at once如果你再保守这个秘密一年,我就可以永远自由了,并且我本应立刻娶你为妻的

这句话看到中文就觉得奇怪,又回去看了英文。为什么最后一个分句没有和从句联系起来?这和它的并列从句是一样的呀。
如果你再保守这个秘密一年,我就可以永远自由,娶你为妻。