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[翻译大赛NO.3]THE OLD WOMAN AND HER PIG / 老奶奶和她的小猪

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楼主:琪琪爸爸 2010-10-08

THE OLD WOMAN AND HER PIG
老奶奶和她的小猪

AN old woman was sweeping her house, and she found a little crooked sixpence. "What," said she, "shall I do with this little sixpence? I will go to market, and buy a little pig." So she bought a little pig; but as she was coming home, she came to a stile, and the piggy would not go over the stile.
一个老奶奶在打扫她的房子,她发现了一枚弯曲的六便士硬币。她自言自语:“我要拿这六便士做什么呢?我要去集市上,买头小猪回来。”于是她买了一头小猪,但是在她回家的路上,她要翻过一个栅栏,可是小猪不肯过栅栏。

She went a little further, and she met a dog. So she said to him, "Dog! dog! bite pig; piggy won't go over the stile; and I shan't get home till midnight." But the dog wouldn't. She went a little further, and she met a stick. So she said, "Stick! stick! beat dog; dog won't bite pig; piggy won't get over the stile; and I shan't get home till midnight." But the stick wouldn't.
于是她走得远一点,遇到了一只狗。于是她对小狗说:“狗狗!狗狗!咬这头猪猪;猪猪不肯过台阶,我今天半夜都到不了家。”但是这条狗不听她的话。她走得更远了一点儿,遇到了一根棍子。于是她说:“棍子!棍子!打狗狗,狗狗不肯咬猪猪,猪猪不肯过栅栏,我今天半夜都到不了家。”但是棍子不听她的话。

She went a little further, and she met a fire. So she said, "Fire! fire! burn stick; stick won't beat dog; dog won't bite pig; pig won't get over the stile; and I shan't get home till midnight." But the fire wouldn't.
她走得更远了一点儿,遇到了一堆火苗。于是她说:“火苗!火苗!烧棍子;棍子不肯打狗狗,狗狗不肯咬猪猪,猪猪不肯过栅栏,我今天半夜都到不了家。”但是火苗不听她的话。

She went a little further, and she met some water. So she said, "Water! water! quench fire; fire won't burn stick; stick won't beat dog; dog won't bite pig; pig won't get over the stile; and I shan't get home till midnight." But the water wouldn't.
她走得更远了一点儿,遇到了一些水。于是她说:“水啊!水啊!把火熄掉;火不肯烧棍子,棍子不肯打狗狗,狗狗不肯咬猪猪,猪猪不肯过栅栏,我今天半夜都到不了家。”但是水不听她的话。

She went a little further, and she met an ox. So she said, "Ox! ox! drink water; water won't quench fire; fire won't burn stick; stick won't beat dog; dog won't bite pig; pig won't get over the stile; and I shan't get home till midnight." But the ox wouldn't.
她走得更远了一点儿,遇到了一头公牛。于是她说:“公牛!公牛!把水喝掉;水不肯把火熄掉,火不肯烧棍子,棍子不肯打狗狗,狗狗不肯咬猪猪,猪猪不肯过栅栏,我今天半夜都到不了家。”但是公牛不听她的话。

She went a little further, and she met a butcher. So she said, "Butcher! butcher! kill ox; ox won't drink water; water won't quench fire; fire won't burn stick; stick won't beat dog; dog won't bite pig; pig won't get over the stile; and I shan't get home till midnight." But the butcher wouldn't.
她走得更远了一点儿,遇到了一个屠夫。于是她说:“屠夫!屠夫!把牛杀掉;牛不肯喝水,水不肯把火熄掉,火不肯烧棍子,棍子不肯打狗狗,狗狗不肯咬猪猪,猪猪不肯过栅栏,我今天半夜都到不了家。”但是屠夫不听她的话。

She went a little further, and she met a rope. So she said, "Rope! rope! hang butcher; butcher won't kill ox; ox won't drink water; water won't quench fire; fire won't burn stick; stick won't beat dog; dog won't bite pig; pig won't get over the stile; and I shan't get home till midnight." But the rope wouldn't.
她走得更远了一点儿,遇到了一根绳子。于是她说:“绳子!绳子!把屠夫绞死;屠夫不肯杀牛,牛不肯喝水,水不肯把火熄掉,火不肯烧棍子,棍子不肯打狗狗,狗狗不肯咬猪猪,猪猪不肯过栅栏,我今天半夜都到不了家。”但是绳子不听她的话。

She went a little further, and she met a rat. So she said, "Rat! rat! gnaw rope; rope won't hang butcher; butcher won't kill ox; ox won't drink water; water won't quench fire; fire won't burn stick; stick won't beat dog; dog won't bite pig; pig won't get over the stile; and I shan't get home till midnight." But the rat wouldn't.
她走得更远了一点儿,遇到了一只老鼠。于是她说:“老鼠!老鼠!咬绳子;绳子不肯把屠夫绞死,屠夫不肯杀牛,牛不肯喝水,水不肯把火熄掉,火不肯烧棍子,棍子不肯打狗狗,狗狗不肯咬猪猪,猪猪不肯过栅栏,我今天半夜都到不了家。”但是老鼠不听她的话。

She went a little further, and she met a cat. So she said, "Cat! Cat! kill rat; rat won't gnaw rope; rope won't hang butcher; butcher won't kill ox; ox won't drink water; water won't quench fire; fire won't burn stick; stick won't beat dog; dog won't bite pig; pig won't get over the stile; and I shan't get home till midnight." But the cat said to her, "if you will go to yonder cow, and fetch me a saucer of milk, I will kill the rat." So away went the old woman to the cow.
她走得更远了一点儿,遇到了一只猫。于是她说:“猫猫!猫猫!杀掉老鼠;老鼠不肯咬绳子,绳子不肯把屠夫绞死,屠夫不肯杀牛,牛不肯喝水,水不肯把火熄掉,火不肯烧棍子,棍子不肯打狗狗,狗狗不肯咬猪猪,猪猪不肯过栅栏,我今天半夜都到不了家。”但是猫对她说,“如果你能去那边的奶牛那里给我取碟牛奶过来,我就帮你杀掉老鼠。”于是老奶奶走到了奶牛边上。

But the cow said to her, "If you will go to yonder haystack: and fetch me a handful of hay, I'll give you the milk." So away went the old woman to the hay-stack; and she brought the hay to the cow.
但是奶牛对她说,“如果你去那边的干草堆那里,帮我拿一把干草过来,我就给你牛奶。”于是老奶奶走到了干草堆,把干草拿给了奶牛。

As soon as the cow had eaten the hay, she gave the old woman the milk; and away she went with it in a saucer to the cat.
奶牛一吃到干草,立刻就把牛奶给了老奶奶;老奶奶于是把牛奶装到碟子里,拿给了猫。

As soon as the cat had lapped up the milk, the cat began to kill the rat; the rat began to gnaw the rope; the rope began to hang the butcher; the butcher began to kill the ox; the ox began to drink the water; the water began to quench the fire; the fire began to burn the stick; the stick began to beat the dog; the dog began to bite the pig; the little pig squealed and jumped over the stile; and so the old woman got home before midnight.
猫一舔光牛奶,立刻开始要杀老鼠;老鼠开始咬绳子;绳子开始绞屠夫;屠夫开始杀公牛;公牛开始喝水;水开始熄掉火苗;火苗开始烧棍子;棍子开始打狗狗,狗狗开始咬猪猪,小猪尖叫着跳过了栅栏,于是老奶奶在半夜之前回到了家。

#2 囡囡妈 2010-10-08

stile,翻成台阶,恩,,应该是类似栅栏的那种东西。

#3 琪琪爸爸 2010-10-09

收到。去改一下。
谢谢。

#4 慕容胖胖 2010-12-04

有一处台阶忘记改成栅栏了,呵呵。

总觉得猫杀老鼠,这个“杀”字很别扭,不是咱们平时说话的味儿。我觉得就翻成抓老鼠呢?

另外老太太之前说的,我觉得意思是,小猪不翻栅栏,我到家得半夜。所以,故事的结尾是老太太在半夜之前到了家。

#5 远行 2010-12-05

这篇文字看着简单,语言也经常重复。
但不知为什么,我反而觉得很不好翻译。

比如最后一段里那十几个BEGAN TO的句子,英语读着觉得很好玩,我想象着可以越读越快。
中文翻出来,开始两个字加进去,好象就没了这种感觉。

就是个直觉哈,我也没想到更好的。

#6 武汉思思 2010-12-23

狗狗、猪猪读起来好别扭。