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楼主:银杏树 2010-10-20

试着在这里发表自己的译稿,其实还有非常美的图,但是还不知怎么弄上来。第一次发帖,有点晕头转向……

Because I love you so much
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p.6
Oh yes, Snowy was very smart.
He knew where the yummy fishes hid,
and how to catch them.
雪团儿是一只顶聪明的小北极熊。
他知道香喷喷的鱼儿藏在什么地方,
也知道怎么把它们捉住。

p.8
He knew how a snowflake tasted,
before melting on his tongue.
他会用舌头接住雪花,
尝尝它是什么味道。

p.10
He knew how the wind could bite and stroke
(or was it mommy’s fondling smell?).
他知道呼呼的大风会咬得脸蛋儿疼,
轻轻的微风会吹得毛毛动——
还会吹来妈妈身上的味道,好香好香!

p.12
He knew how to climb an iceberg.
And he knew how to slide it down safely.
他知道怎么爬上冰山,
也知道怎么安全地滑下来。

p.14
He knew that ice could crack
till it split and cut him off from mommy.
他知道如果冰面咔嚓响,就会裂开一道缝,
害得他离开妈妈身旁。

p.16
He knew the sun shone during daytime
and the moon took over all night long.
他知道白天有太阳公公放光芒,
夜晚有月亮婆婆来照亮。

p.19
All these things (and  a lot more, of course),
Snowy knew…
雪团儿知道的事,
还有好多好多……

but there were some teeny-weeny mere trifles
he couldn’t understand that well…
不过,也有一些很小很小的事情,
雪团儿不太知道……

p.20
‘Where does snow come from, mommy?’
’See, Snowy,’ mommy started,’ very far from here the sun warms up the sea.
Quite a lot of droplets float by that warmth and gather in a cloud.
The wind blows that cloud all the way over here.
And here the cloud shivers with cold.
If the cloud shakes, it is snowing!’
“妈妈,雪是从哪儿来的?”
“哦,是这样:在很远很远的地方,太阳把大海里的水晒得热热的,
好多小水珠变成水蒸气,跑到天上去,抱在一起变成了云。
风吹着云跑啊跑,跑到了咱们北极。
北极这里很冷,云冻得直打哆嗦,
云一哆嗦,就下起雪来啦!”

(That’s why Snowy understood why a snowflake tasted that lovely: he smelled the sea in it.)
(原来是这样,怪不得,雪团儿觉得雪花里有大海的味道。)

p.22

‘But why is the snow white and
not blue like the sea?’
“那——为什么雪不是蓝色的,
就像大海那样?”

That was a difficult one.
‘Hmm…’ mommy answered,
(Mommy doesn’t always know all the answers),
’snow is always white,
like polar bears are always white.’
哦,这个问题好难,
就连妈妈也不知道答案。
她只好说:
“雪就是白色的,一直就这样,
像我们北极熊一样。”

p.24
And why are polar bears always white?’
Snowy wanted to know.
“那为什么,北极熊就是白色的呢?”

‘Because white is the most beautiful and sweetest, bearest colour for a polar bear,’
mommy said.
“因为,对一只北极熊来说,白色是最好看、最可爱的颜色。”

p.26
‘And if I were yellow,’ Snowy asked,
‘would you still think me sweet and dear?’
“妈妈,如果我是黄色的,
那你还会喜欢我吗?”

‘Of course,’ mommy said.
妈妈说:“我当然会。”

‘And if I were red or green,
or blue all over?
Would you still…?’
“那如果我是红的、绿的,
或者全身蓝乎乎呢?
你还会喜欢我吗?”

‘Sure I would,’ mommy smiled.
“我当然会,宝贝。”妈妈笑着回答。
‘Why?’ Snowy asked.
“为什么?”雪团儿还要知道。

p.28-29

‘Because I love you so much,’ mommy said.
But that, Snowy already knew.
“因为妈妈爱你!无论怎样,都会爱你!”
这个嘛,不用妈妈说,雪团儿也知道。

#2 囡囡妈 2010-10-20

欢迎新人试水。。呵呵

是这本书吧?
图片占位:http://ecx.images-amazon.com/images/I/51HSJ6YG0RL._SL500_AA300_.jpg

这句翻的不太对:(or was it mommy’s fondling smell?)

‘Because I love you so much,’ ——“因为妈妈爱你!无论怎样,都会爱你!”
个人感觉意译太多了,反显啰嗦。。“因为我如此爱你!”很多时候,尽在不言中啊。

呵呵,有空再琢磨琢磨,修改修改。。读给孩子听听。。:)

#3 银杏树 2010-10-21

谢谢囡妈:)
是这本书没错,全书的小熊都是毛茸茸的(植绒工艺),孩子想来一定爱不释手。
从翻译的角度,我同意囡妈的意见,确实啰嗦,而且不如“我是如此爱你”那样意味深长。
但考虑到要在国内出版,我想让国内的妈妈们读得顺口,小朋友听得明白。妈妈可以借着这个故事让孩子知道,无论他(她)是怎样的,妈妈都会毫无保留地爱他,接受他。

#4 囡囡妈 2010-10-21

呵呵,翻译,不能代替作者说话,不要去扩展过多的个人的见解。要让读者自己去体会。。

个人意见哈。

#5 琪琪爸爸 2010-10-21

很棒的故事。
我想所有家长都应该去告诉自己的孩子:
不管你变成什么样子,我都会一直爱你。

不管你是很听话,还是特别调皮;
不管你考试得满分,还是吃零蛋;
不管你是否是乖宝宝,还是调皮大王;
不管... ...
因为我爱你。

#6 正在看牡丹 2010-10-21

一开头就让人读得心也柔软,像要化了一样

#7 圆月饼 2010-10-31

雪团儿这个名字译的真好