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楼主:冷绯兰 2009-07-19

风华公主的项链原作者:[英] 玛丽·德·摩根
Mary De Morgan(1850-1907)
原文题目: The Necklace of Princess Fiorimonde
 
从前有一位鳏居的国王,他有一个容华绝代的女儿——她长得那么美,人人都觉得她是世上最可爱的女孩。然而,这位公主的内心其实十分邪恶,她秘密地拜一个老巫婆为师,学了很多妖法。那个老巫婆又丑又坏,住在一座荒无人烟的大山里。每到夜深了,风华公主(她的名字就叫“风华”)就偷偷地前去拜访她。公主的美貌完全是靠着魔力来维持的,一旦魔力消失,她就再也不漂亮了——当然,这样重大的机密,她对谁也不会透露,没有一个人知道她和老巫婆之间的瓜葛。

随着她一天天长大,国王开始操心女儿的婚事了。有一天,他召集群臣 ,郑重地宣布:“我的年纪越来越老,又没有儿子来继承王位,所以,我想抓紧时间为公主挑选一位驸马,将来好让他接替我掌管这个国家。”群臣听了,连呼圣明。于是使者被派往四面八方,传达国王选婿的命令。风华公主一听到这个消息,气得都哭了,她想:“如果,父王真的塞给我一个倒霉的丈夫,那我的秘密岂不要被这个丈夫发现!不行,我才不要这样!”

这天晚上,到了夜深人静的时候,公主下了床,走到卧室的窗边,轻轻推开窗扇。她从衣袋里掏出一小把豌豆,把手伸出窗户,低声呼唤着。屋顶上飞下来一只棕色的小鸟,停在她的手腕上。它啄了几口豌豆,个头开始长大,呀,越长越大,在公主的手腕上都站不下了。她把它放到窗台上,它还是不停地长,最后长到了鸵鸟那么大!公主跨出窗户,坐到鸟背上,“呼呼”,它展翅飞向夜空,掠过高高的树梢,把公主带到了那座人迹罕至的荒山上,正好落在巫婆的茅屋前。

风华公主从鸟背上跳下来,凑近门上的锁眼,嘟囔了些什么,只听屋里传来沙哑的回答:“你现在跑来干什么,丫头?我不是都跟你说了吗,我要闭关十三天,这期间你别来打扰我!”

“可是我有急事呀,祖师奶奶,”公主恳求说,“帮帮我,让我进去吧!”

“那好吧,”巫婆同意了。门一下子打开,公主走了进去。屋子正中间坐着的,就是老巫婆。她裹着一件大大的灰斗篷,人长什么样都快看不出来了。公主在她旁边坐下,讲了父王要她嫁人的事。

“这可真有点儿糟,”巫婆阴森森地说,“不过不要紧,管他谁来求婚,咱们都能干掉他!丫头,你想怎么着?是把这帮求婚的统统变成狗,让他们对你惟命是从,还是变成巧嘴的鸟儿,到处飞着给你唱赞歌?要不然干脆把他们变成珠子,串成一圈项链,戴在你的脖子上——保证全世界再也找不出一条项链比这个更漂亮!”

“这个好!我要项链,要项链!”公主得意得直拍手,“我要把他们都戴在脖子上,这样我走到哪儿,他们就跟到哪儿,而且谁也猜不出我从哪儿弄来这些稀罕的宝贝。”

“别忙,别忙,丫头,这件事也是有风险的,”巫婆警告她,“稍不小心,你自己也会变成一颗珠子,串在项链上,到时候,除非有人把项链砍断,把你拽下来,否则你就永远变不回人的样子了!”

“哎呀,没事儿的,好奶奶,您就放心吧,”公主说,“只要您告诉我应该怎么做,我是不会有闪失的。”

于是巫婆打开身旁的一个黑布口袋,从里面拽出一条长长的金线来。这根线的两端彼此一碰,就合到了一块儿,连条接缝都看不出来。巫婆把金线圈套到风华公主的脖子上,说:“看好了,这条金线你用一个指头怎么碰都没事,就是不能用两个指头把它拈起来,只要一拈,你就完了,就要变成珠子串在上面!等你见着了求婚的王子,想法子骗他用两个指头把线拈起来,他立刻就会变成你的珠宝!”

“好好玩啊!”公主忍不住喊,“那帮王子啊国王啊什么的快点来吧,好当我的试验品,我都快等不及了!”

“这件事就这么定了,”巫婆说,“反正离天亮还早,咱们再叫些人来,痛痛快快地闹它一场!”说完,她去墙角拿来一面鼓、一副鼓槌,到门口狂敲起来。那鼓声好可怕呦,应着这召唤,各种奇形怪状的妖精从夜色中飞来了:黑乎乎的小鬼长着长长的尾巴;矮墩墩的怪兽又是坏笑,又是嘁嘁喳喳;远远近近的女巫都骑着扫帚到了;有一只妖精长成大猫的样子,眨动着绿幽幽的大眼睛;还有一个像一条响尾蛇,浑身闪着磷光,慢慢地游过来。

看看该来的都来了,巫婆放下鼓,回到屋里跺跺脚,地板上打开了一扇暗门。巫婆率先走下去,领着众精怪走过一条黑洞洞的地道,来到一间宽敞的地下大厅里。她们在这里又唱又跳,鬼哭狼嚎之声不绝于耳。可是当雄鸡报晓的第一声啼鸣刺破黑暗时,她们立刻蔫了,一眨眼的功夫全都逃得无影无踪。公主也急急忙忙地跑上地面,出门跨上她的巨鸟,不一会儿就飞回了王宫。她从窗口跳进自己的房间,取了一只小杯子、一个乌油油的小瓶子,倒出几滴魔汤给巨鸟喝。它马上又变回了那只小棕鸟,飞回到屋顶上。公主赶紧关好窗,钻回被窝里,仿佛什么也没发生过一样,重又进入梦乡。

很快到了上午,风华公主去觐见她的父亲。“爸爸,”她故作孝顺地说,“和外国的君主联姻,是我作为一名公主的责任,您为我选定了谁,我就嫁给谁。”国王听了很满意,告诉她不久就要从海外来一位国王和她成亲,他又年轻又英俊,名字叫炎岩,统治着一片辽阔而富饶的国土。

整个王宫上下都忙碌起来了,到处张灯结彩,等候贵客的到来。炎岩国王到来的那一天,公主穿上最华美的衣服迎接他,所有的人都在窃窃私语:“他们两个真是太般配了!”此话不假,这位国王着实是一位俊朗的人儿,他有一头微带波浪的乌黑短发,眼里闪动着青春的光彩。他一见到风华公主,就被她深深地吸引住了,想到她是自己未来的新娘,他觉得自己真是世界上最幸福的人。

一切都进展得很顺利,婚礼前一天的傍晚,王宫里举办了一场盛大的宴会。公主在席间显得格外漂亮,她身穿一袭水红色长裙,雪白的脖子上没有太多装饰,只戴了一个闪闪发光的金线圈。宴会将近尾声,公主从金丝椅上起身,款款走出大厅,到了花园里。她在一棵大榆树下停住脚步,抬眼望着皎洁的明月。不出她所料,炎岩国王很快跟了过来,和她并肩而立。他呆呆地望着她,过了好半天,他说:

“可爱的公主,明天你就要嫁给我了,你想要什么结婚礼物?”

“我想要一条举世无双的项链,”她含笑说,“就和我现在戴的这个金线圈一样长。”

“哦?”他看了看线圈,“对了,你干吗光戴着这么一条金线呢,不嫌它太单调吗?”

“单调?你不懂……”公主抬起头,盯着他的眼睛说,“我这条金线,轻如鸿毛,却比铁索还结实,谁也拽不断,不信你拽拽看。”她的眸子亮得令人胆寒,炎岩国王痴痴迷迷地伸出了手,用两个手指拈起了线圈。“啪”,一阵轻烟过后,国王不见了,金线上多了一颗璀璨的明珠,像水晶一样清澈,又闪烁着金碧辉煌的光芒。

“呵呵,亲爱的,”公主打量着这颗明珠,用指尖拨弄着它,开心地笑了。不过马上,她收敛了欢颜,摆出一副惊慌失措的样子跑回大厅,“不好了,爸爸!炎岩国王,炎岩国王……刚才我看见他朝我走过来,可是等了半天也不见他过来,我再回头去找,哪儿都找不见他了!”

国王马上派人把王宫搜了个遍,也没有找到。他有点不悦:“这个年轻人,跑哪儿去了,明天可就要举行婚礼了!”

风华公主有个侍女,名字叫紫罗兰。她是个相貌平平的女孩儿,有一对温和的琥珀色眼睛。平日里,不知何故,她总是有点害怕自己的女主人。炎岩国王失踪的这天晚上,公主临睡前,紫罗兰照例为她卸妆、解开发辫。她小心地替公主梳着头,无意中扫了镜子一眼,天哪,她看见,公主的唇边浮现着一丝多么诡异的微笑啊!还好,公主只顾着把玩金线圈上的珠子,没注意到紫罗兰在看她。“但是那颗珠子不也有点奇怪么?”紫罗兰想,“昨天,线圈上好像还什么都没有啊……”

终于,她忍不住试探着问:“殿下戴的这颗珠子真漂亮,是炎岩国王送给您的礼物吧?”

“没错,”她的女主人卖弄地捻着它,“是他送给我的最好的东西——可惜一颗还嫌不够啊,我还想要第二颗、第三颗……多多益善!”

紫罗兰在心里叹了口气,她觉得这话听起来不大对劲。

第二天一大早,王宫里人人忙着为婚礼做准备。风华公主穿上了淡粉色珍珠攒花的白绸裙,头戴香橙花冠和精致的面纱,身边簇拥着盛装的侍女。她们都仰慕地望着她,夸赞她是最美的新娘。一行人正要下楼去,一名侍从急匆匆地赶来,请公主即刻去见她的父王。

“孩子!”国王一看见她进屋,就懊恼地喊,“你的未婚夫还是下落不明!我担心他是不是出事了——不过你也别太着急,我已经派人出城去找了,说不定天黑之前就能有消息。婚礼看样子必须延期了,你先委屈一下吧。”

“哦,天哪,”公主用洁白的小手捂住脸,“老天爷,求您把我的未婚夫平安送回我的身边吧,让我穿着这身白色的婚纱成为他的新娘,别让我换上黑色的丧服,为他吊唁!”说完,她还挤出了几滴眼泪,可是暗地里,她的肚子都要笑疼了。

宾客纷纷散去,公主换下了婚纱。众人都在焦急地等待着新郎回来,可是等啊等啊,他也没有回来。最后,大家基本上都不再抱什么希望了,“可怜的人,他肯定是遇害了。”但他到底是怎么遇害的,谁也不知道。

风华公主真的换上了黑色的丧服,表面上说是要为不幸的未婚夫服丧,其实每天一有空儿,她就坐在镜子前,摆弄线圈上的珠子,欣赏着、陶醉着,笑出了眼泪。紫罗兰从远处默默地注视着她,身上一阵阵发抖。

一个月过后,传来了最新消息:又有一位王子要来向公主求婚了。这位王子住在很远很远的北方,他的名字叫霜剑。先行来到的使者亮出了王子的画像,哇,好帅啊!头发是晨光般的金色,眼睛是明亮的蓝色。风华公主好像很动心的样子,说:“那就快请他来吧,越快越好哦。”她换掉了丧服,宫里又是一片喜气洋洋,人们差不多把炎岩国王忘光了。

霜剑王子终于来了,率领着众多体面的随从,向公主献上数不清的礼物。王宫里又办起了盛大的接风晚宴,公主在宴会上还是那样仪态万方,王子迷她迷得不得了。不过这一回,公主没有独自去花园里散心,而是一直老老实实地坐在她的金丝椅上。

第二天一大早,太阳还没有出来,人们都还在沉睡,风华公主就一骨碌爬了起来。她穿上一身白色的家常衣裙,梳一个披肩发,蹑手蹑脚地开门下了楼,来到花园里。她径直走到霜剑王子房间的窗下,清清嗓子,哼起了一支小调,声音甜美得像只百灵鸟。王子被歌声唤醒了,起身来到窗边,一看是风华公主,不禁怦然心动。她多美啊,曙光洒在她的秀发上,染出一片金色;洒在她的面颊上,散成一抹玫瑰般的红晕。他急忙换好衣服,冲出去见她。

“天仙一样的公主啊,”他来到她身边,热情洋溢地说,“想不到在这儿碰上你,为什么你这么早一个人在这儿唱歌呢?”

“因为我喜欢黎明的时候出来,饱览天空的色彩——绯红、天蓝、纯金,”她的眼睛优美地半眯着,“尘世间,这样的缤纷难得一见啊——不过,我这颗珠子是个例外,你在它上面能找出最美的颜色。”

“这是什么珠子?”王子很好奇,“我还真没见过这么漂亮的东西,是哪儿出产的?”

公主的眼神忽然灼热了,好像能把王子融化,“它呀,是从很远很远的南方来的,只是命中注定,它再也回不了自己的老家了。你可以把线圈拈起来,仔细看看它。”

王子毫无防备地伸出了手,他刚把食指和拇指搭在金线上,就听见“啪”的一声,他也变成了一颗珠子,比第一颗珠子更加光彩夺目。

“呵呵,现在你们两个可以做个伴儿了,我的粉丝们,”公主笑得有些吓人,“宝贝项链,你越来越漂亮了,我爱你胜过世间的一切!”说完,她溜回自己的房间,蒙上头呼呼大睡,一直睡到紫罗兰来恭请她起床,为婚礼梳妆打扮。

紫罗兰伺候公主穿婚纱时,惊奇地发现,女主人的金线圈上又多了一颗珠子。梳妆完毕不久,国王怒气冲冲地走进来,“太不像话了,太不像话了!新郎官又不见了!女儿,我觉得一定有人在暗算我们,成心不想让你结成婚!”

公主听了,失声痛哭,她央求父王再好好地派人去找一找,可是她心里想:“哼哼,任你们找遍天涯海角,也休想把他找到。”徒劳的搜索过后,宫内人心惶惶,公主又换上了黑丧服,假装悲痛。紫罗兰忧心地望着她,暗自叹息。

又是一个月过去了,服丧期满,公主再次觐见国王。“父王,”她说,“我的命好苦,连着两个新郎都莫名其妙地没了,您要为我做主,再替我订一门亲事啊,女儿不愿一世无夫!”

国王很支持这个建议,把使节派往世界各地,为公主招亲。许多国王、王子都慕名而来,可是他们都如出一辙地在婚礼前失踪了。人们议论纷纷:“太可怕了,好像公主中了什么邪,谁来跟她结婚,谁就要突然消失。”老国王几乎不敢再替女儿张罗婚事,可是架不住公主泪眼婆娑地哀求,再加上她的美貌总能吸引来新的求婚者,所以一年之间,王宫里一场接一场地筹办着那些根本不可能举行的婚礼。只有紫罗兰注意到,白天黑夜,公主的脖子上总戴着那个金线圈,而上面的珠子也在一颗接一颗地增加,但是好奇怪,不管串得多么满,圈上好像总留着一个空儿,等着下一颗珠子的加入。

一转眼过去了两三年,风华公主出落得越来越水灵,谁都想不到,这样动人的外表之下,躲藏的那副心眼有多坏。

在一个遥远的国家里,有一位年轻的王子,他的名字叫凡澄。他有一位忠诚的侍从,也是他最好的朋友,名叫流泉。

有一天,凡澄偶然看到了风华公主的一幅肖像,登时就狂热地爱上了她。他喃喃自语地说:“竟有如此的佳人啊,凡澄,你还等什么呢,这就动身去把她娶进家门吧!”

“您别开玩笑了,”流泉很着急,“这位公主可是个大大的红颜祸水,谁沾上她谁倒霉,那么多人为了娶她,连魂儿都不知道飘哪儿去了!”

“那我不管,”凡澄执迷地说,“我娶她娶定了!”

于是他出发来到了风华公主的国家,流泉随他同行,心情异常沉重。

国王热情接待了魂不守舍的王子,并祝愿他和风华公主能够永结同心,白头到老。公主听到这个消息以后,心想:“哼,到老?他能撑到婚礼开始,就算他厉害!”

天气闷热,她在花园里纳凉,侍女来禀报凡澄王子求见。“爱来就来吧,”她倚在大理石的池沿上,喂着金鱼,懒洋洋地回答,“我反正不会特意去迎接他,这些求婚的人呐,来了又去,去了又来,我都见惯了。”于是侍女回去通报,说公主在喷泉边等他。

凡澄走近时,风华公主连站都懒得往起站。不过他不在乎她的简慢,能亲眼见到她的美貌,就已经足够了。她穿着薄薄的轻纱衣裙,苗条而妙曼的身姿显露无遗,雪白的臂膊一小段浸在水里,感受着清凉,戏弄着游鱼。她碧蓝的眼睛里盛着笑意,然而有谁能从中辨认出那隐隐的恶意?她的脖子自然也没闲着,还挂着那串美得不可思议的项链。

“凡澄王子,你好吗?”她把手从水里抬起来,伸给他,要他扶她起来,“你来跟我求婚,不怕自己也像以往那些人一样,离奇地失踪?”他托住她的手,痴痴地不知该说什么好。

流泉就在离他们不远的地方候着,他从压低的帽沿底下担心地瞟着王子,咳了两声。

“你的朋友好像不太舒服?”风华公主扫了流泉一眼,“不如请他下去歇歇。”

王子乐于从命,赶快请他去别处歇会儿。流泉很不情愿地走了。

他想着心事,闷头走啊走,不知不觉来到了一棵苹果树下。郁郁葱葱的枝头挂着嫣红的苹果,有位少女正在采摘。要不是她叫住他,他肯定会像梦游一样走过去的。

“你是不是新来那个王子的侍从?”她问。

流泉等了一会儿才反应过来,“哦,是,干吗?”

她很小心地说:“现在他在哪儿?我是说那位王子。”

“正跟公主一起,在喷泉边上。”

她叹了口气,“唉,那你可能再也见不到他了。”

“什么!”他惊得跳了起来,“你这是什么意思——抱歉,你是什么人?”

“我是公主的侍女,”她说,“我叫紫罗兰。你可能知道,以前有十个人来向公主求过婚,可是他们都不见了。我猜他们可能是被她……哎,你的王子没准儿也会和他们一样下场……”

“什么下场?被她怎么了!”流泉急得眼里冒火。

“被她……变成珠子了,”紫罗兰非常紧张,声音非常小,“我的公主好像会一些奇怪的法术,她一开始只戴一根金线,后来每失踪一个求婚的人,她的金线上就多一颗精美的珠子,所以我觉得,这里面可能有问题——”

“我的王子!天哪!”流泉转身要跑回去找他,这时他们看见远远的,在小路的那一头,风华公主一个人走过去了,身边没有王子的身影。流泉不顾一切地要向她冲过去,被紫罗兰拦住了。

“让我过去,过去!”他相当激动。

“嘘,嘘,”紫罗兰捡起一个苹果堵住了他的嘴,“你疯啦,想找她理论?她很可能是个女巫,你只是个普通人!”

“呜,呜,”他把苹果咬掉了一大块,才终于能说话了。他一边义愤地嚼着那块苹果,一边说:“女巫也不能伤害我最好的朋友!姑娘,你既然知道她干坏事,干吗不早揭穿她!”

“我不敢,”紫罗兰难过地说,“再说我也没有证据。”他们听到钟塔上的大钟敲响了九下,“我该回去了,”她说着,弯腰提起装苹果的篮子,转身走了。

“等,等等——”他追上去,“紫罗兰,你能不能帮忙把公主那条项链弄出来?”

她摇摇头,“太难啦,她白天黑夜都戴着它,从来不摘下来。”

流泉想了想,“那带我去看看它,怎么样?说不定咱们能看出什么名堂,然后就能想办法把被害的人救出来。”

她的眼里闪过了一丝希望,“那好吧,嗯,今天晚上等公主睡着了,我带你到她的房间去看看。”

入夜,万籁俱寂,他们两个在宫殿的门厅碰头。“来吧来吧,”紫罗兰说,“公主已经睡熟了,待会儿你可以数一数,她的项链上是不是正好有十一颗珠子。”

“稍等一下,紫罗兰,”流泉说,他的脸有点发红,“这一去,要么成功,要么失败;万一失败了,我可能也会被她变成珠子什么的,不过要是成功了,让她从此以后再也没法害人了,那,到时候你,你,能不能……”

“我能不能什么?”紫罗兰问。

“你——”流泉似乎是下了好大决心,终于把话憋回去了。他挥挥手,请她给他带路。

他们悄悄来到公主的房门口,紫罗兰提着一盏小灯笼,淡淡的灯光刚够他们看到公主在华丽的床上安睡。她的被单和枕头散发出熏衣草香,其上漫卷着她波浪似的金发,看,那恬静的面容、微笑的樱唇,看,那一对迷人的酒窝,啊,这分明是一个纯洁的天使,哪里会是紫罗兰描述过的那个恶魔?流泉几乎要忘了自己是来干什么的了,只想这么一直呆呆地望着、望着……

紫罗兰揪了一下他的耳朵,“别只顾着看她,”她小声说,“还是好好看看那条项链吧,那上面的珠子都是像你这样年轻的呆鹅变的。”

他们走近一些,到了公主的床边,逐粒清点了那些珠子一遍,确实是十一颗。但是他们看不出项链怎么解开。紫罗兰把灯笼递给流泉,伸手捏住首尾两颗珠子之间那段金线,想探探有没有接口。可是“嗖”的一下,她就不见了。

“紫罗兰?”流泉懵了,压低了嗓子问,没有人回答。

风华公主在睡梦中发出一阵尖声尖气的笑,流泉打了个哆嗦。他发现项链上多出了一颗珠子,总共有十二颗了。第十二颗珠子圆圆的,清清亮亮,泛着嫩红色的光彩,像紫罗兰身上那条连衣裙的颜色,又像她早上摘的那些苹果。

公主睡得还是那么甜美,但他再也不愿意看她一眼了。他无声无息地退出房间,回到自己的卧室,一夜没有合眼,想着怎么救出自己的王子和紫罗兰。

第二天一早,公主起床梳妆,惊奇地发现金线圈上又多了一颗珠子,“这是哪儿来的?”她想,“难道昨晚趁我睡着的时候,有人来碰过我的项链?”她盯着它琢磨了好半天,最后一撇嘴冷冷地一笑,“管它是谁,反正谁胆敢碰我的项链,谁就是这个下场——变成珠子挂在上面!”

凡澄王子的失踪已经引不起多大轰动了,国王照例派人搜索了一遍,找不到也就算了。紫罗兰的失踪更是没人关注,她只是个侍女,谁知道她是不是偷懒跑到哪儿玩儿去了。

黄昏时分下起了暴雨,电闪雷鸣,乌云翻滚,好像房子都要散架了。王宫里人人惊恐,只有风华公主心情舒畅,她就喜欢这种狂野的天气。

她穿着黑丝绒长袍,坐在高高的塔楼上一个小房间里赏雨。雨地里,一匹快马冲进城门,直奔王宫而来。不一会儿,侍女前来通报:又有一位公子来向公主求婚,但是他不肯说出自己的名字。

“哦?让他进来,”公主正有点闲得发闷呢,“管他是王子还是公子,只要能坚持到婚礼开场,就算他是种菜的、卖货的也无所谓。”

侍女把他领进了房间,他身上裹着一件厚厚的披风,不过一进屋,他就把它甩开了,里面显露出来的,果然是一位衣着考究的翩翩公子。公主完全没认出这就是流泉,这也挺好理解,本来她也没怎么正眼看过他。

“欢迎啊,神秘的公子,”她用亲密的口吻说,“冒着这么猛烈的大雨来找我,你也想好了要跟我求婚么?你听没听过别人说我什么?”

“我听说,”他缓缓地回答,“你是世上最美的女子。”

“那你看呢,我是吗?”她眨动着眼睛问。

他看了看她,心想:“不错,要论模样,你是最漂亮,不过再漂亮也唬不了我喽!”他嘴上说的是:“公主,你确实很美,但我见过一个姑娘,比你还漂亮。你这头金发,你的雪肤花貌,跟她一比,简直就什么都不是了。”

“你说什么!”风华公主不相信自己的耳朵,她气得直喘,满腔怒火,“你敢再说一遍!比我还漂亮!你以为你是谁呀,跑到我这儿来扯淡!”

“我说的是真的,”他满不在乎地说,“信不信由你。”

“那她是谁?她在哪儿?”风华公主已经完全不能自已了,嚷嚷起来,“你把她叫来让我看看,有本事你现在就把她叫来让我看看!”

“要见她也可以,只是不能白见,你得给我点儿什么,”他说。

“你要什么?”公主急切地问。

“你脖子上那串项链,”他指了一下。

公主后退了一步,“不行,这个不能给你,别的你要什么都可以,”她叫侍女搬来珠宝匣,里面全是价值连城的珠宝:红璧、翡翠、珍珠、钻石……可是流泉一件也不要,他就要那串项链。

公主恼火透了,“何不趁此机会把他干掉?”她眼珠一转,说:“那好,要是你非要这项链不可,那你就自己来取吧。”

但是流泉不上她的圈套,他说:“我不是金匠,也不是侍女,不管摘链子、戴链子的事。”不管她怎么劝诱,他就是不伸手。

公主只好先安排他去别的房间休息,等到夜深了,她又骑上巨鸟,去找巫婆讨主意。一路上霹雳不断,她只管穿梭其间,到了荒山上的茅屋前,她看见巫婆正在门口捕捉闪电,从里面提炼能量。

“来啦,丫头,”巫婆放下手头的活儿来接待她,“项链串得怎么样了,还不错吧?”

“奶奶,”公主跳下鸟背,撒娇地说,“别拿人家寻开心,我最近烦死了,先是珠子莫名其妙地多了一颗,跟着又来了个什么公子,搅我的局,非说有人比我还漂亮!”

“我看看,”老巫婆凑近看了看第十二颗珠子,“这不是王子变的,这是年轻的姑娘——”

“姑娘?哼,那无非是我那几个侍女里的一个了——对,这两天一直没见紫罗兰,肯定是那个小贱人!敢来偷我的项链,有她的好看!”

“别生气,别生气,小乖乖,你呀,就是脾气太大,”巫婆说,“随便来一个毛头小子,说你不够漂亮,就把你折腾成这样?小心呐,他是成心激你呢。”

公主的气儿还是没消,“反正,他那些胡说八道,我就是不爱听!”

“那你就快点儿把他变成珠子,让他永远闭嘴,再也没法胡说八道。”然后,她们开始商量下一步该怎么办。

第二天清晨,流泉很早就起来了,他到树林里摘了一些山楂、橡子什么的,用藤条串成一条项链似的东西,揣在怀里,又回到了王宫。

太阳映红了东方,风华公主也起身了,她精心打扮了一番,把辫子编得光又亮,打算趁着这个早晨,就把那个神秘公子搞定。吃过早饭,她来到花园,雨后的空气分外清爽。她掏出一个小金球,在草地上玩起来,又吩咐侍女说:“去把昨天那位公子请来,让他和我一起玩儿。”

流泉来了,公主把侍女都打发走,草地上只剩下他们两个。她先开了腔:“公子,现在你觉得我漂亮吗?昨天晚上天太黑了,你肯定是没看清我长什么样,现在大太阳照着,你再好好看看我。”她说着,笑得那样好看,眼波那样妩媚,流泉真有点要乱了方寸了。还好,他及时想起了紫罗兰,于是他说:

“公主,我也没说你不漂亮,我只是说有人比你更漂亮,你犯得着这么上火吗?”

公主一听,又火冒三丈了,但是她想起巫婆的告诫,便强压住怒气说:“好,就算你见过更漂亮的姑娘,你见过比我这个更漂亮的项链吗?”

“这个倒是没有,”流泉回答,“不过我这儿也有一条项链,还是它更合我的胃口。”说着,他掏出了那串野果。

“那是什么链子?让我看看!”公主伸手来抓,流泉故意把它拿得远远的,让她够不着。

“这串项链有魔力吗?”公主忍不住问,“是不是谁戴上它,谁就会变漂亮?你说那个女孩比我美,是不是因为她戴了这条项链?”

“没错,”他说,“拿你的链子来跟我换,等你戴上了我这条项链,你自然就是世界上最美的人。”

公主爱美心切,一时忘了别的,伸手就把脖子上的项链往下拽,“拿去拿去,给你,成交!”她的食指和拇指同时搭在了金线上,“噗”的一声,她就不见了,项链掉到草地上,上面添上了第十三颗珠子!

“哈,狡猾的公主,你也有今天,”流泉的眉头舒展了许多,他拔出宝剑,把项链挑起来,径直去见国王——国王正在和大臣们共商国是。“各位大人,”流泉一本正经地说,“快派人去找找公主殿下吧,我刚才看见她在花园里玩球,可是一眨眼的功夫她就不见了。”

国王赶紧派人去找,但是哪儿也找不到。

“要不然,看看我能否帮上什么忙,”流泉让项链滑到地上,从腰间抽出匕首,照着金线就是一刀,只听“轰”的一声巨响,金线给砍断了。他拽下第一颗珠子,“啪”,人们眼前出现了久已失踪的炎岩国王,又拽下第二颗,霜剑王子也回来了,第三颗、第四颗……一直到第十一颗,他又见到了他的凡澄王子!所有获救的年轻人都开始齐声控诉风华公主的罪行。

“现在该你了,我的紫罗兰,”流泉的嘴角漾出了微笑,他轻轻摘下了那粒嫩红色的珠子。下一秒钟他见到了她温和的眼睛,他丢掉手里的匕首,拉起了她的手。紫罗兰的脸儿一下红得像她嫣红的连衣裙。

国王和众大臣呆若木鸡,半晌,国王用颤抖的声音说:“对不住各位了,应该怎样惩处小女,才能弥补她所犯下的过错呢?”

“无须另行惩处了,”流泉指着剩下的那颗珠子说,“她已经挂在了这根金线上,就让她在上面待着去吧。”

得救的人们都回到了各自的国家,找到了合适的新娘;流泉和紫罗兰也结成了伴侣,从此以后一直过着幸福的生活。

#2 慕容胖胖 2009-07-19

请给出原文

#3 冷绯兰 2009-07-19

原文和《素馨》一样,见于The Victorian Fairy Tale Book,此书编者为Michael Patrick Hearn,出版社是Pantheon Books. New York

#4 coffeecat 2009-07-19

嗯,有点阴森的故事,不过翻译得蛮好看的。
很流畅的。
就是这里不好: 然而,这位公主的内心其实十分邪恶,
然而换成不过,不知道怎么样?

#5 囡囡妈 2009-07-19

我找到的原文,格式没修改。

Once there lived a King, whose wife was dead, but who had a most beautiful daughter – so beautiful that everyone thought she must be good as well, instead of which the Princess was really very wicked, and practised witchcraft and black magic which she had learned from an old witch who lived in a hut on the side of a lonely mountain. This old witch was wicked and hideous, and no one but the King’s daughter knew that she lived there; but at night, when everyone else was asleep, the Princess, whose name was Fiorimonde, used to visit her by stealth to learn sorcery. It was only the witch’s arts which had made Fiorimonde so beautiful that there was no one like her in the world, and in return the Princess helped her with all her tricks, and never told anyone she was there.

The time came when the King began to think he should like his daughter to marry, so he summoned his council and said, “We have no son to reign after our death, so we had best seek for a suitable prince to marry to our royal daughter and then, when we are too old, he shall be king in our stead.” And all the council said he was very wise, and it would be well for the Princess to marry. So heralds were sent to all neighbouring kings and princes to say that the King would choose a husband for the Princess, who should be king after him. But when Fiorimonde heard this she wept with rage, for she knew quite well that if she had a husband he would find out how she went to visit the old witch, and would stop her practising magic, and then she would lose her beauty. When night came, and everyone in the palace was fast asleep, the Princes went to her bedroom window and softly opened it. Then she took from her pocket a handful of peas and held them out of the window and chirruped low, and there flew down from the roof a small brown bird and sat
upon her wrist and began to eat the peas. No sooner had it swallowed them than it began to grow and grow and grow till it was so big that the Princess could not hold it, but let it stand on the window-sill, and still it grew and grew and grew till it was as large as an ostrich. Then the Princess climbed out of the window and seated herself on the bird’s back and at once it flew straight away over the tops of the trees till it came to the mountain where the old witch dwelt, and stopped in front of the door of her hut.

The princess jumped off, and muttered some words through the key-hole, when a croaking voice
from within called, “Why do you come tonight? Have I not told you I wished to be left alone for thirteen nights; why do you disturb me?”
“But I beg of you to let me in,” said the Princess, “for I am in trouble and want your help.”
“Come in then,” said the voice, and the door flew open, and the Princess trod into the hut, in the middle of which, wrapped in a grey cloak which almost hid her, sat the witch. Princess Fiorimonde sat down near her, and told her her story. How the King wished her to marry, and had sent word to the neighbouring princes, that they might make offers for her.

“This is truly bad hearing,” croaked the witch, “but we shall beat them yet; and you must deal with each Prince as he comes. Would you like them to become dogs, to come at your call, or birds, to fly in the air, and sing of your beauty, or will you make them all into beads, the beads, of such a necklace as never a woman wore before, so that they may rest upon your neck, and you may take them with you always?”

“The necklace! The necklace!” cried the Princess, clapping her hands with joy. “That will be best of all, to sling them upon a string and wear them around my throat. Little will the courtiers know whence come my new jewels.”

“But this is dangerous play,” quoth the witch, “for, unless you are very careful, you yourself may become a bead and hang upon the string with the others, and there you will remain till someone cuts the string, and draws you off.”

“Nay, never fear,” said the princess, “I will be careful, only tell me what to do, and I will have great princes and kings to adorn me, and all their greatness shall not help them.”
Then the witch dipped her hand into a black bag which stood on the ground beside her, and drew out a long gold thread. The ends were joined together, but no one could see the joins, and however much you pulled, it would not break. It would easily go over Fiorimonde’s head, and the witch slipped it on her neck saying,

“Now mind, while this hangs here you are safe enough, but if once you join your fingers around the string you too will meet the fate of your lovers, and hang upon it yourself. As for the kings and princes who would marry you, all you have to do is to make them close their fingers around the chain, and at once they will be strung upon it as bright hard beads, and there they shall remain, till it is cut and they drop off.”
“This is really delightful,” cried the Princess, “and I am already quite impatient for the first to come that I may try.”
“And now,” said the witch, “since you are here, and there is yet time, we will have a dance and I will summon the guests.” So saying, she took from a corner a drum and a pair of drum-sticks, and going to the door, began to beat upon it. It made a terrible rattling. In a moment came flying through the air all sorts of forms. There were little dark elves with long tails, and goblins who chattered and laughed, and other witches who rode on broom-sticks. There was one wicked fairy in the form of a large cat, with bright green eyes, and another came sliding in like a long shining viper.

Then, when all had arrived, the witch stopped drumming, and, going to the middle of the hut, stamped on the floor, and a trap-door opened in the ground. The old witch stepped through it, and all her strange guests followed, and here they all danced and made merry in a terrible way, but at first sound of cock-crow all the guests disappeared with a whiff, and the Princess hastened up the dark passage again, and out of the hut to where her big bird still waited for her, and mounting its back she flew home in a trice. Then, when she had stepped in at her bedroom window, she poured into a cup, from a small black bottle, a few drops of magic water, and gave it to the bird to drink, and as it sipped it grew smaller, and smaller, till at last it had quite regained its natural size, and hopped on to the roof as before and the Princess shut her window, and got into bed, and fell asleep, and no one knew of her strange journey, or where she had been.

Next day Fiorimonde declared to her father the King, that she was quite willing to wed any prince he should fix upon as a husband for her, at which he was much pleased, and soon after informed her, that a young king was coming from over the sea to be her husband. He was king of a large rich country, and would take back his bride with him to his home. He was called King Pierrot. Great preparations were made for his arrival, and the Princess was decked in her finest array to greet him, and when he came all the courtiers said, “This is truly a proper husband for our beautiful Princess,” for he was strong and handsome, with black hair, and eyes like sloes. King Pierrot was delighted with Fiorimonde’s beauty, and was happy as the day is long; and all things went merrily till the evening before the marriage. A great feast was held, at which the Princess looked lovelier than ever dressed in a red gown, the colour of the inside of a rose, but she wore no jewels nor ornaments of any kind, save one shining gold string round her milk-white
throat.

When the feast was done, the Princess stepped from her golden chair at her father’s side, and walked softly into the garden, and stood under an elm-tree looking at the shining moon. In a few moments King Pierrot followed her, and stood beside her, looking at her and wondering at her beauty.
“Tomorrow, then, my sweet Princess, you will be my Queen, and share all I possess. What gift would you wish me to give you on our wedding day?”
“I would have a necklace wrought of the finest gold and jewels to be found, and just the length of this gold cord which I wear around my throat,” answered Princess Fiorimonde.
“Why do you wear that cord?” asked King Pierrot; “it has no jewel nor ornament about it.”
“Nay, but there is no cord like mine in all the world,” cried Fiorimonde, and her eyes sparkled wickedly as she spoke, “it is as light as a feather, but stronger than an iron chain. Take it in both hands and try to break it, that you may see how strong it is”; and King Pierrot took the cord in both hands to pull it hard; but no sooner were his fingers closed around it than he vanished like a puff of smoke, and on the cord appeared a bright, beautiful bead -- so bright and beautiful as was never bead before -- clear as crystal, but shining with all colours -- green, blue, and gold.

Princess Fiorimonde gazed down at it and laughed aloud.

“Aha, my proud lover! Are you there?” she cried with wicked glee; “my necklace bids fair to beat all others in the world,” and she caressed the bead with the tips of her soft, white fingers, but was careful that they did not close round the string. Then she returned into the banqueting hall, and spoke to the King.

“Pray, sire,” said she, “send someone at once to find King Pierrot, for as he was talking to me a minute ago, he suddenly left me, and I am afraid lest I may have given him offence, or perhaps he is ill.”

The King desired that the servants should seek for King Pierrot allover the grounds, and seek him they did, but nowhere was he to be found, and the old King looked offended.

“Doubtless he will be ready tomorrow in time for the wedding,” quoth he, “but we are not best pleased that he should treat us in this way.”
Princess Fiorimonde had a little maid called Yolande. She was a bright-faced girl with merry brown eyes, but she was not beautiful like Fiorimonde, and she did not love her mistress, for she was afraid of her, and suspected her of her wicked ways. When she undressed her that night she noticed the gold cord, and the one bright bead upon it, and as she combed the Princess’s hair she looked over her shoulder into the looking-glass, and saw how she laughed, and how fondly she looked at the cord, and caressed the bead, again and again with her fingers.

“That is a wonderful bead on your Highness’s cord,” said Yolande, looking at its reflection in the mirror; “surely it must be a bridal gift from King Pierrot.”
“And so it is, little Yolande,” cried Fiorimonde, laughing merrily; “and the best gift he could give me. But I think one bead alone looks ugly and ungainly; soon I hope I shall have another, and another, and another, all as beautiful as the first.”

Then Yolande shook her head, and said to herself, “this bodes no good.”
Next morning all was prepared for the marriage, and the Princess was dressed in white satin and pearls with a long white lace veil over her, and a bridal wreath on her head, and she stood waiting among her grandly dressed ladies, who all said that such a beautiful bride had never been seen in the world before. But just as they were preparing to go down to the fine company
in the hall, a messenger came in great haste, summoning the Princess at once to her father the King, as he was much perplexed.

“My daughter,” cried he, as Fiorimonde in all her bridal array entered the room where he sat alone, “what can we do? King Pierrot is nowhere to be found; I fear lest he may have been seized by robbers and basely murdered for his rich clothes, or carried away to some mountain and left there to starve. My soldiers are gone far and wide to seek him – and we shall hear of him ere day is done -- but where there is no bridegroom there can be no bridal.”

“Then let it be put off, my father,” cried the Princess, “and tomorrow we shall know if it is for a wedding, or a funeral, we must dress”; and she pretended to weep, but even then could hardly keep from laughing.
So the wedding guests went away, and the Princess laid aside her bridal dress, and all waited anxiously for news of King Pierrot; and no news came. So at last everyone gave him up for dead, and mourned for him, and wondered how he had met his fate.
Princess Fiorimonde put on a black gown, and begged to be allowed to live in seclusion for one month in which to grieve for King Pierrot; but when she was again alone in her bedroom she sat before her looking-glass and laughed till tears ran down her cheeks; and Yolande watched her,

and trembled, when she heard her laughter. She noticed, too, that beneath her black gown, the Princess still wore her gold cord, and did not move it night or day.

The month had barely passed away when the King came to his daughter and announced that another suitor had presented himself, whom he should much like to be her husband. The Princess agreed quite obediently to all her father said; and it was arranged that the marriage should take place. This new prince was called Prince Hildebrandt. He came from a country far north, of which one day he would be king. He was tall, and fair, and strong, with flaxen hair and bright blue eyes. When Princess Fiorimonde saw his portrait she was much pleased, and said, “By all means let him come, and the sooner the better.” So she put off her black clothes, and again
great preparations were made for a wedding and King Pierrot was quite forgotten.

Prince Hildebrandt came, and with him many fine gentlemen, and they brought beautiful gifts for the bride. The evening of his arrival all went well, and again there was a grand feast, and Fiorimonde looked so beautiful that Prince Hildebrandt was delighted; and this time she did not leave her father’s side, but sat by him all the evening.

Early next morning at sunrise, when everyone was still sleeping, the Princess rose, and dressed herself in a plain white gown, and brushed all her hair over her shoulders, and crept quietly downstairs into the palace gardens; then she walked on till she came beneath the window of Prince Hildebrandt’s room, and here she paused and began to sing a little song as sweet and joyous as a lark’s. When Prince Hildebrandt heard it he got up and went to the window and looked out to see who sang, and when he saw Fiorimonde standing in the red sunrise-light, which made her hair look gold and her face rosy, he made haste to dress himself and go down to meet
her.
“How, my Princess,” cried he, as he stepped into the garden beside her. “This is indeed great happiness to meet you here so early. Tell me why do you come out at sunrise to sing by yourself?”
“I come that I may see the colours of the sky - red, blue, and gold,” answered the Princess.
“Look, there are no such colours to be seen anywhere, unless, indeed, it be in this bead which I wear here on my golden cord.
“What is that bead, and where did it come from?” asked Hildebrandt.
“It came from over the sea, where it shall never return again,” answered the Princess, and again her eyes began to sparkle with eagerness, and she could scarcely conceal her mirth. “Lift the cord off my neck and look at it near, and tell me if you ever saw one like it.”

Hildebrandt put out his hands and took hold of the cord, but no sooner were his fingers closed around it than he vanished, and a new bright bead was slung next to the first one on Fiorimonde’s chain, and this one was even more beautiful than the other.
The Princess gave a long low laugh, quite terrible to hear.
“Oh, my sweet necklace,” cried she, “how beautiful you are growing! I think I love you more than anything in the world besides.” Then she went softly back to bed, without anyone hearing her, and fell sound asleep, and slept till Yolande came to tell her it was time for her to get up and dress for the wedding.
The Princess was dressed in gorgeous clothes, and only Yolande noticed that beneath her satin gown, she wore the golden cord, but now there were two beads upon it instead of one. Scarcely was she ready when the King burst into her room in a towering rage.
“My daughter,” cried he, “there is a plot against us. Lay aside your bridal attire and think no more of Prince Hildebrandt, for the too has disappeared, and is nowhere to be found.”
At this the Princess wept, and entreated that Hildebrandt should be sought for far and near, but she laughed to herself, and said, “Search where you will, yet you shall not find him”; and so again a great search was made, and when no trace of the Prince was found, all the palace was in an uproar.

The Princess again put off her bride’s dress and clad herself in black, and sat alone, and pretended to weep, but Yolande, who watched her, shook her head, and said, “More will come and go before the wicked Princess has done her worst.”
A month passed, in which Fiorimonde pretended to mourn for Hildebrandt, then she went to the King and said,
“Sire, I pray that you will not let people say that when any bridegroom comes to marry me, as soon as he has seen me he flees rather than be my husband. I beg that suitors may be summoned from far and near that I may not be left alone unwed.”

The King agreed, and envoys were sent all the world over to bid any who would come and be the husband of Princess Fiorimonde. And come they did, kings and princes from south and north, east and west – King Adrian, Prince Sigbert, Prince Algar, and many more – but though all went well till the wedding morning, when it was time to go to church, no bride- groom was to be found.

The old King was sadly frightened, and would fain have given up all hope of finding a husband for the Princess, but now she implored him, with tears in her eyes, not to let her be disgraced in
this way. And so suitor after suitor continued to come, and now it was known, far and wide, that
whoever come to ask for the hand of Princess Fiorimonde van- iced, and was seen no more of
men. The countries were afraid and whispered under their breath, “It is not all right, it cannot
be”; but only Yolande noticed how the beads came upon the golden thread, till it was well-nigh
covered, yet there always was room for one bead more.
So the years passed, and every year Princess Fiorimonde grew lovelier and lovelier, so that no
one who saw her could guess how wicked she was. In a far off country lived a young prince
whose name was Florestan. He had a dear friend named Gervaise, whom he loved better than

anyone in the world. Gervaise was tall, and broad, and stout of limb, and he loved Prince
Florestan so well, that he would gladly have died to serve him.
It chanced that Prince Florestan saw a portrait of Princess Fiorimonde, and at once swore he
would go to her father’s court, and beg that he might have her for his wife, and Gervaise in vain
tried to dissuade him.
“There is an evil fate about the Princess Fiorimonde,” quoth he; “many have gone to marry her,
but where are they now?”
“I don’t know or care,” answered Florestan, “but this is sure, that I will wed her and return
here, and bring my bride with me.”
So he set out for Fiorimonde’s home, and Gervaise went with him with a heavy heart. When they
reached the court, the old King received them and welcomed them warmly, and he said to his
courtiers, “Here is a fine young prince to whom we would gladly see our daughter wed. Let us
hope that this time all will be well.” But now Fiorimonde had grown so bold, that she scarcely
tried to conceal her mirth.
“I will gladly marry him tomorrow, if he comes to the church,” she said; “but if he is not there,
what can I do?” and she laughed long and merrily, till those who heard her shuddered.
When the Princess’s ladies come to tell her that Prince Florestan was arrived, she was in the
garden, lying on the marble edge of fountain, feeding the goldfish who swam in the water.
“Bid him come to me,” she said, “for I will not got any more in state to meet any suitors, neither
will I put on grand attire for them. Let him come and find me as I am, since all find it so easy to
come and go.” So her ladies told the prince that Fiorimonde waited for him near the fountain.
She did not rise when he came to where she lay, but his heart bounded with joy, for he had
never in his life beheld such a beautiful woman. She wore a thin soft white dress, which clung to
her lithe figure. Her beautiful arms and hands were bare, and she dabbled with them in the
water, and played with the fish. Her great blue eyes were sparkling with mirth, and were so
beautiful, that no one noticed the wicked look hid in them; and on her neck lay the marvellous
many-coloured necklace, which was itself a wonder to behold.
“You have my best greetings, Prince Florestan,” she said. “And you, too, would be my suitor. Have
you thought well of what you would do, since so many princes who have seen me have fled for
ever, rather than marry me?” And as she spoke she raised her white hand from the water, and
held it out to the Prince, who stooped and kissed it, and scarcely knew how to answer her for
bewilderment at her great loveliness.
Gervaise followed his master at a short distance, but he was ill at ease, and trembled for fear
of what should come.
“Come, bid your friend leave us,” said Fiorimonde, looking at Gervaise, “and sit beside me, and
tell me of your home, and why you wish to marry me, and all pleasant things.”
Florestan begged that Gervaise would leave them for a little, and he walked slowly away, in a
very mournful mood. He went on down the walks, not heeding where he was going, till he met

Yolande, who stood beneath a tree laden with rosy apples, picking the fruit, and throwing it into
a basket at her feet. He would have passed her in silence, but she stopped him, and said
“Have you come with the new Prince? Do you love your master?”
“Ay, better than anyone else on the earth,” answered Gervaise. “Why do you ask?” “And where
is he now?” said Yolande, not heeding Gervaise’s question. “He sits by the fountain with the
beautiful Princess,” said Gervaise.
“Then, I hope you have said goodbye to him well, for be assured you shall never see him again,”
said Yolande nodding her head.
“Why not, and who are you to talk like this?” asked Gervaise.
“My name is Yolande,” answered she, “and I am Princess Fiorimonde’s maid. Do you not know that
Prince Florenstan is the eleventh lover who has come to marry her, and one by one they have
disappeared, and only I know where they are gone.”
“And where they gone?” cried Gervaise, “and why do you not tell the world, and prevent good
men being lost like this?”
“Because I fear my mistress,” said Yolande, speaking low and drawing near to him; “she is a
sorceress, and she wears the brave kings and princes who come to woo her, strung upon a cord
round her neck. Each one forms the bead of a necklace which she wears, both day and night. I
have watched that necklace growing; first it was only an empty gold thread; then came King
Pierrot, and when he disappeared the first bead appeared upon it. Then came Hildebrandt, and
two beads were on the string instead of one; then followed Adrian, Sigbert, and Algar, and
Cenred, and Pharamond, and Baldwyn, and Leofric, and Raoul, and all are gone, and ten beads
hang upon the string, and tonight there will be eleven, and the eleventh will be your Prince
Florestan.”
“If this be so,” cried Gervaise, “I will never rest till I have plunged my sword into Fiorimonde’s
heart”; but Yolande shook her head.
“She is a sorceress,” she said, “and it might be hard to kill her; besides, that might not break
the spell, and bring back the princes to life. I wish I could show you the necklace, and you might
count the beads, and see if I do not speak the truth, but it is always about her neck, both night
and day, so it is impossible.”
“Take me to her room tonight when she is asleep and let me see it there,” said Gervaise.
“Very well, we will try,” said Yolande; “but you must be very still, and make no noise, for if she
wakes, remember it will be worse for us both.”
When night came and all in the palace were fast asleep, Gervaise and Yolande met in the great
hall, and Yolande told him that the Princess slumbered soundly.
“So now let us go,” said she, “and I will show you the necklace on which Fiorimonde wears her
lovers strung like beads, though how she transforms them I know not.”

“Stay one instant, Yolande,” said Gervaise, holding her back as she would have tripped upstairs.
“Perhaps, try how I may, I shall be beaten, and either die or become a bead like those who have
come before me. But if I succeed, and rid the land of your wicked Princess, what will you
promise me for a reward?”
“What would you have?” asked Yolande.
“I would have you say you will be my wife, and come back with me to my own land,” said Gervaise.
“That I will promise gladly,” said Yolande, kissing him, “but we must not speak or think of this till
we have cut the cord from Fiorimonde’s neck, and all her lovers are set free.”
So they went softly up to the Princess’s room, Yolande holding a small lantern, which gave only a
dim light. There, in her grand bed, lay Princess Fiorimonde. They could just see her by the
lantern’s light, and she looked so beautiful that Gervaise began to think Yolande spoke falsely,
when she said she was so wicked.
Her face was calm and sweet as a baby’s; her hair fell in ruddy waves on the pillow; her rosy lips
smiled, and the little dimples showed in her cheeks; her white soft hands were folded amidst
the scented lace and linen of which the bed was made. Gervaise almost forgot to look at the
glittering beads hung round her throat, in wondering at her loveliess, but Yolande pulled him by
the arm.
“Do not look at her,” she whispered softly, “since her beauty has cost dear already; look rather
at what remains of those who thought her as fair as you do now; see here,” and she pointed with
her finger to each bead in turn.
“This was Pierrot, and this Hildebrandt, and these are Adrian, and Sigbert, and Algar, and
Cenred, and that is Pharamond, and that Raoul, and last of all here is your own master Prince
Florestan. Seek him now where you will and you will not find him, and you shall never see him
again till the cord is cut and the charm broken.”
“Of what is the cord made?” whispered Gervaise.
“It is of the finest gold,” she answered. “Nay, do not you touch her lest she wake. I will show it
to you.” and Yolande put down the lantern and softly put out her hands to slip the beads aside,
but as she did so her fingers closed around the golden string, and directly she was gone.
Another bead was added to the necklace, and Gervaise was alone with the sleeping Princess. He
gazed about him in sore amazement and fear. He dared not call lest Fiorimonde should wake.
“Yolande,” he whispered as loud as he dared, “Yolande where are you?” but no Yolande answered.
Then he bent down over the Princess and gazed at the necklace. Another bead was strung upon
it next to the one to which Yolande had pointed as Prince Florestan. Again he counted them.
“Eleven before, now there are twelve. Oh hateful Princess! I know now where go the brave kings
and princes who came to woo you, and where, too, is my Yolande,” and as he looked at the last
bead, tears filled his eyes. It was brighter and clearer than the others, and of a warm red hue,
like the red dress Yolande had worn. The Princess turned and laughed in her sleep, and at the
sound of her laughter Gervaise was filled with horror and loathing. He crept shuddering from

the room, and all night long sat up alone, plotting how he might defeat Fiorimonde, and set
Florestan and Yolanda free.
Next morning when Fiorimonde dressed she looked at her necklace and counted its beads, but
she was much perplexed, for a new bead was added to the string.
“Who can have come and grasped my chain unknown to me?” she said to herself, and she sat and
pondered for a long time. At last she broke into weird laughter.
“At any rate, whoever it was, is fitly punished, “quoth she. “My brave necklace, you can take care
of yourself, and if anyone tries to steal you, they will get their reward, and add to my glory. In
truth I may sleep in peace, and fear nothing.”
The day passed away and no one missed Yolande. Towards sunset the rain began to pour in
torrents, and there was such a terrible thunderstorm that everyone was frightened. The
thunder roared, the lighting gleamed flash after flash, every moment it grew fiercer and
fiercer. The sky was so dark that, save for the lightning’s light, nothing could be seen, but
Princess Fiorimonde loved the thunder and lightning.
She sat in a room high up in one of the towers, clad in a black velvet dress, and she watched the
lightning from the window, and laughed at each peal of thunder. In the midst of the storm a
stranger, wrapped in a cloak, rode to the palace door, and the ladies ran to tell the Princess that
a new prince had come to be her suitor. “And he will not tell his name,” said they, “but says he
hears that all are bidden to ask for the hand of Princess Fiorimonde, and he too would try his
good fortune.”
“Let him come at once,” cried the Princess. “Be he prince or knave what care I? If princes all fly
from me it may be better to marry a peasant.”
So they led the newcomer up to the room where Fiorimonde sat. He was wrapped in a thick
cloak, but he flung it aside as he came in and showed how rich was his silken clothing
underneath; and so well was he disguised, that Fiorimonde never saw that it was Gervaise, but
looked at him and thought she had never seen him before.
You are most welcome, stranger prince, who has come through such lightning and thunder to find
me,” said she. “Is it true, then, that you wish to be my suitor? What have you heard of me?”
“It is quite true, Princess,” said Gervaise. “And I have heard that you are the most beautiful
woman in the world.”
“And is that true also?” asked the Princess. “Look at me now, and see.”
Gervaise looked at her and in his heart he said, “It is quite true, oh wicked Princess! There
never was woman as beautiful as you, and never before did I hate a woman as I hate you now”:
but aloud he said,
“No, Princess, that is not true; you are very beautiful, but I have seen a woman who is fairer
than you for all that your skin looks ivory against your velvet dress, and your hair is like gold.”

“A woman who is fairer than I?” cried Fiorimonde, and her breast began to heave and her eyes
to sparkle with rage, for never before had she heard such a thing said. “Who are you who dares
come and tell me of women more beautiful than I am?”
“I am a suitor who asks to be your husband, Princess,” answered Gervaise, “but still I say I have
seen a woman who was fairer than you.”
“Who is she -- where is she?” cried Fiorimonde, who could scarcely contain her anger. “Bring her
here at once that I may see if you speak the truth.”
What will you give me to bring her to you?” said Gervaise. “Give me that necklace you wear on
your neck, and then I will summon her in an instant”; but Fiorimonde shook her head.
“You have asked,” said she, “for the only thing from which I cannot part,” and then she bade her
maids bring her her jewel-casket, and she drew out diamonds, and rubies, and pearls, and
offered them, all or any, to Gervaise. The lightning shone on them and made them shine and
flash, but he shook his head.
“No, none of these will do,” quoth he. “You can see her for the necklace, but for nothing else.”
“Take it off for yourself then,” cried Fiorimonde, who now was so angry that she only wished to
be rid of Gervaise in any way.
“No, indeed,” said Gervaise, “I am no tire-woman, and should not know how to clasp and unclasp
it”; and in spite of all Fiorimonde could say or do, he would not touch either her or the magic
chain.
At night the storm grew even fiercer, but it did not trouble the Princess. She waited till all
were asleep, and then she opened her bedroom window and chirruped softly to the little brown
bird, who flew down from the roof at her call. Then she gave him a handful of seeds as before,
and he grew and grew and grew till he was as large as an ostrich, and she sat upon his back and
flew out through the air, laughing at the lightning thunder which flashed and roared around her.
Away they flew till they came to the old witch’s cave, and here they found the witch sitting at
her open door catch- ing the lightning to make charms with.
“Welcome, my dear,” croaked she, as Fiorimonde stepped from the bird; “here is a night we both
love well. And how goes the necklace? – right merrily I see. Twelve beads already – but what is
that twelfth?” and she looked at it closely.
Nay, that is one thing I want you to tell me,” said Fiorimonde, drying the rain from her golden
hair. “Last night when I slept there were eleven and this morning there are twelve; and I know
not from whence comes the twelfth.”
“It is no suitor,” said the witch, “but from some young maid, that that bead is made. But why
should you mind? It looks well with the others.”
“Some young maid,” said the Princess. “Then, it must be Cicely or Marybel, or Yolande, who would
have robbed me of my necklace as I slept. But what care I? The silly wench is punished now, and
so may all others be, who would do the same.”

“And when will you get the thirteenth bead, and where will he come from?” asked the witch.
He waits at the palace now,” said Fiorimonde, chuckling. “And this is why I have to speak to you”;
and then she told the witch of the stranger who had come in the storm, and of how he would not
touch her necklace, nor take the cord in his hand, and how he said also that he knew a woman
fairer than she.
“Beware, Princess, beware,” cried the witch in a warning voice, as she listened. “Why should you
heed tales of other women fairer than you? Have I not made you the most beautiful woman in
the world, and can any others do more than I? Give no ear to what this stranger says or you
shall rue it.” But still the Princess murmured, and said she did not love to hear any- one speak of
others as beautiful as she.
“Be warned in time,” cried the witch, “or you will have cause to repent it. Are you so silly or so
vain as to be troubled because a Prince says idly what you know is not true? I tell you do not
listen to him, but let him be slung to your chain as soon as may be, and then he will speak no
more.” And then they talked together of how Fiorimonde could make Gervaise grasp the fatal
string.
Next morning when the sun rose, Gervaise started off into the woods, and there he plucked
acorns and haws, and hips, and strung them on to a string to form a rude necklace. This he hid in
his bosom, and then went back to the palace without telling anyone.
When the Princess rose, she dressed herself as beautifully as she could, and braided her golden
locks with great care, for this morning she meant her new suitor to meet his fate. After
breakfast, she stepped into the garden, where the sun shone brightly, and all looked fresh after
the storm. Here from the grass she picked up a golden ball, and began to play with it.
“Go to our new guest,” cried she to her ladies, “and ask him to come here and play at ball with
me.” So they went, and soon they returned bringing Gervaise with them.
“Good morrow, prince,” cried she. “Pray, come and try your skill at this game with me; and you,”
she said to her ladies, “do not wait to watch our play, but each go your way, and do what pleases
you best.” So they all went away, and left her alone with Gervaise.
“Well, prince,” cried she as they began to play, “what do you think of me by morning light?
Yesterday when you came it was so dark, with thunder and clouds, that you could scarcely see
my face, but now that there is bright sunshine, pray look well at me, and see if you do not think
me as beautiful as any woman on earth,” and she smiled at Gervaise, and looked
so lovely as she spoke, that he scarce knew how to answer her; but he remembered Yolande, and
said,
“Doubtless you are very beautiful; then why should you mind my telling you that I have seen a
woman lovelier than you?”
At this the Princess again began to be angry, but she thought of the witch’s words and said,
“Then, if you think there is a woman fairer than I, look at my beads, and now, that you see their
colours in the sun, say if you ever saw such jewels before.”

“It is true I have never seen beads like yours, but I have a necklace here, which pleases me
better”; and from his pocket he drew the haws and acorns, which he had strung together.
“What is that necklace, and where did you get it? Show it to me!” cried Fiorimonde, trembling
with anger and curiosity, for she thought, “Perhaps it has power to make the wearer beautiful;
perhaps it was worn by the woman whom he thought more beautiful than I, and that is why she
looked so fair.”
Come, I will make a fair exchange,” said Gervaise, “Give me your necklace and you shall have
mine, and when it is round your throat I will truthfully say that you are the fairest woman in the
world; but first I must have your necklace.”
“Take it, then,” cried the Princess, who, in her rage and eagerness, forgot all else, and she
seized the string of beads to lift it from her neck, but no sooner had she taken it in her hands
than they fell with a rattle to the earth, and Fiorimonde herself was nowhere to be seen.
Gervaise bent down over the necklace as it lay upon the grass, and, with a smile, counted
thirteen beads; and he knew that the thirteenth was the wicked Princess, who had herself met
the evil fate she had prepared for so many others.
“Oh, clever Princess!” cried he, laughing aloud, “you are not so very clever, I think, to be so
easily outwitted.” Then he picked up the necklace on the point of the sword and carried it, slung
thereon, into the council chamber, where sat the King surrounded by statesmen and countries
busy with state affairs.
“Pray, King,” said Gervaise, “send someone to seek for Princess Fiorimonde. A moment ago she
played with me at ball in the garden, and now she is nowhere to be seen.

The King desired that servants should seek her Royal Highness, but they came back saying she
was not to be found.

Then let me see if I cannot bring her to you; but first let those who have been longer lost than
she, come and tell their own tale.” And, so saying, Gervaise, let the necklace slip from his sword
on to the floor, and taking from his breast a sharp dagger, proceeded to cut the golden thread
on which the beads were strung and as he clave it in two there came a mighty noise like a slap of
thunder.
“Now,” cried he, “look, and see King Pierrot who was lost,” and as he spoke he drew from the
cord a bead, and King Pierrot, in his royal clothes, with his sword at his side, stood before them.
“Treachery!” he cried, but ere he could say more Gervaise had drawn off another bead, and
Prince Hildebrandt appeared, and after him came Adrian, and Sigbert, and Algar, and Cenred,
and Pharamond, and Baldwyn, and Leofric, and Raoul, and last of the princes, Gervaise’s own dear
master Florenstan, and they all denounced Princess Fiorimonde and her wickedness.
“And now,” cried Gervaise, “here is she who has helped to save you all,” and he drew off the
twelfth bead, and there stood Yolande in her red dress, and when he saw her, Gervaise flung
away his dagger and took her in his arms, and they wept for joy.
The King and all courtiers sat pale and trembling, unable so speak for fear and shame. At length
the King said with a deep groan,

“We owe you deep amends, O noble kings and princes! What punishment do you wish us to
prepare for our most guilty daughter?” but here Gervaise stopped him and said,
“Give her no other punishment than what she has chosen for herself. See, here she is the
thirteenth bead upon the string; let no one dare to draw it off, but let this string be hung up
where all people can see it and see the one bead, and know the wicked Princess is punished for
her sorcery, so it will be a warning to others who would do like her.”
So they lifted the golden thread with great care and hung it up outside the town-hall, and there
the one bead glittered and gleamed in the sunlight, and all who saw it knew that it was the
wicked Princess Fiorimonde who had justly met her fate.
Then all the kings and princes thanked Gervaise and Yolande, and loaded them with presents, and
each went to his own land.
And Gervaise married Yolande, and they went back with Prince Fiorestan to their home, and all
lived happily to the end of their lives.

#6 冷绯兰 2009-07-20

好的,改成“不过”吧,猫猫 表情占位:s:134

#7 冷绯兰 2009-07-20

再次对囡囡妈的强悍表示折服,辛苦找来这么长的原文,太感谢了! 表情占位:s:135
那么还是做一点注释:
侍女的名字约兰达(Yolande)因为是紫罗兰的意思,所以就译成了紫罗兰,
侍从的名字Gervaise有激流的意思,译成了流泉
王子和国王们的名字,也是意译,如北欧王子Hildebrandt含有剑的意思,他又是北方来的,就译成了霜剑。
还有一段情节改得含蓄了些。
等等等。

#8 慕容胖胖 2009-07-20

在我看来,翻译首先是要准确,包括内容和叙事方式上的准确。既便是意译,也应当保证原文意思上的不遗漏、不偏差。你的译文,至少遗漏的地方就太多。就拿第一段来说:

从前有一位鳏居的国王,他有一个容华绝代的女儿——她长得那么美,人人都觉得她是世上最可爱的女孩。然而,这位公主的内心其实十分邪恶,她秘密地拜一个老巫婆为师,学了很多妖法。那个老巫婆又丑又坏,住在一座荒无人烟的大山里。每到夜深了,风华公主(她的名字就叫“风华”)就偷偷地前去拜访她。公主的美貌完全是靠着魔力来维持的,一旦魔力消失,她就再也不漂亮了——当然,这样重大的机密,她对谁也不会透露,没有一个人知道她和老巫婆之间的瓜葛。

Once there lived a King, whose wife was dead, but who had a most beautiful daughter – so beautiful that everyone thought she must be good as well, instead of which the Princess was really very wicked,and practised witchcraft and black magic which she had learned from an old witch who lived in a hut on the side of a lonely mountain. This old witch was wicked and hideous, and no one but the King’s daughter knew that she lived there; but at night, when everyone else was asleep, the Princess, whose name was Fiorimonde, used to visit her by stealth to learn sorcery. It was only the witch’s arts which had made Fiorimonde so beautiful that there was no one like her in the world, and in return the Princess helped her with all hertricks, and never told anyone she was there.

1。 she must be good as well,这句话的意思应该是说人们觉得她的内心和她的外表一样美,你的译文没有突出外表和内心的关系,而这种关系正是引出下一句的,instead of。“可爱”也可以是单纯指一个人外表。所以,这句话在我看来,你翻译的并不准确。

2,“practised witchcraft and black......this old withch was wicked and hideous”这句话你改变了原文的语序。

3,to learn sorcery,你翻译成“拜访她”,而原文即使直译也很简单明了,去学习巫术。“拜访”这个词,可以包含很多内容,读者可能会理解为她去学习巫术,也可能理解为,她和老巫婆保持紧密的联系,经常聊天沟通切磋巫术(因为,之前有一句“学了很多妖法”,学了这个词会给人感觉她已经学成了)。所以这一句,你翻译的也不准确。

4。所有的红字部分你都没有翻译。你译文的最后一句话,除了“公主的美貌完全是靠着魔力来维持的”是原文里的,其他都是你自己写的,我认为连意译都算不上。因为原文并没有这个意思。

原文第一段一共就三句话,第一句被你改了语序,第二句你翻了一半,第三句只翻了四分之一,所以,我同意囡妈说的,你这是中文改编版,不能算翻译。

#9 冷绯兰 2009-07-20

你并没有完整地读完原文啊,胖胖,我在翻译的时候,并没有拘泥于一字一句,第一段译文里也包括了第二段原文里的相关内容。你不觉得原文有些啰嗦么,让小朋友看那么冗长的直译他会打瞌睡哦。 表情占位:s:137

#10 冷绯兰 2009-07-20

胖胖和囡妈对翻译的理解其实是对直译的理解,我想这种看法很有普遍性。但是在文学的面前,并没有所谓的高低贵贱。如果一定要划分,很多优秀的译本都只好划入“中文改编”的范围了。
另外,我也很想问胖胖,是什么吸引你从法律翻译转向文学翻译的?

#11 coffeecat 2009-07-20

她不是做法律翻译,她是律师 表情占位:s:134

胖的挑刺,我仔细看了再来理论~

#12 冷绯兰 2009-07-20

我想版主和普通会员人格上也是平等的,大家互相提一些意见自然也很不错,但是有时候,刺难免会伤人,还是不要愈演愈烈才好啊。
我其实是个和平主义者,截至目前没有主动挑过刺,刺不是没有,但毕竟这是个公益活动,大家难得聚在一起交流一下童话的事,多看到一些玫瑰,不是比看刺要轻松些么 表情占位:s:137

#13 coffeecat 2009-07-20

胖的第一个挑刺,我觉得还是有理的,因为她人长得美,所以人们就以为她的内心,是同样的洁白美丽。这里的关系,我觉得还是明白说出比较好,

第二个的语序问题,我个人觉得无伤大雅。

红色部分的问题,我个人以为还是翻译出来比较好,以你的笔力,这几句并不会显得啰嗦冗长。
最后公主和巫婆的瓜葛,具体译出比较好,因为可以清晰明白地看到,公主是以帮巫婆做坏事为代价,换得举世无双的容貌的。

不过,我看了下后面的,我觉得胖胖和囡妈认为这是改编,也不是很准确哦,我看它后面的基本意思和内容,和原文出入并不是特别大的。

我个人以为,调整语序等,无伤大雅,和文章主旨有比较大的启示和点拨作用的句子,还是译出来比较好。

#14 coffeecat 2009-07-20

o sling them upon a string and wear them around my throat.
这一句,你的意译其实也好,不过,把它们穿到丝线上的意思没有点到。
个人以为这一句其实应当译出,因为整个故事,就是把王子们以至于她自己穿到丝线上~

#15 coffeecat 2009-07-20

however much you pulled, it would not break. It would easily go over Fiorimonde’s head,
这句未译出~

今儿没时间,后面的我就不细看了,我觉得整体还是比较符合原著的,有的地方有漏译,补上就差不多了。
表情占位:s:135

#16 慕容胖胖 2009-07-20

我并不觉得基本意思和内容和原文差不多就算是翻译,更不能算符合原著。

如果这样,我们完全可以读完一个外国童话之后,按照这个故事以自己的文笔来写一个同样意思的,省略掉自己认为该省略的,整合起自己认为该整合的。

coffeecat ,你说“我觉得,如果能够找到好的译者,首先要尊重原译,如果编辑确实觉得自己的水平高于原译,或者愿译有明显错误,才可以修改。如果需要大刀阔斧的修改,对不起,我觉得出版社首先就没有找对人,没有找到出色的译本。”

那么,我是不是可以说,翻译人员也应该首先尊重原作者,包括尊重原文的意思和叙述方式。除非原文的叙述方式翻成中文确实不流畅,按原文翻,反而会伤害它的意思和可读性,才可以完全用自己的表达方式来讲述。如果需要大刀阔斧的改动,对不起,我觉得首先你自己没挑好适合自己风格的故事。

我刚才说的是完全,因为实际上在翻译英文的时候,调整一下语序很正常,不然根本说不溜。但是,冷同学很多地方,尤其是素馨里面,给我的感觉,就像是她读完这个故事之后,合上书,自己按照这个内容写了一篇意思大体相近的故事。

#17 盈果 2009-07-20

非常美丽的故事,太爱听了,喜欢能看到更多更好的作品

#18 coffeecat 2009-07-20

素馨我还没有时间对照原文看 今儿头昏

来,胖,把这句话详细阐述下,猫同学我洗耳恭听 表情占位:s:135

#19 慕容胖胖 2009-07-20

引用:
引用第11楼冷绯兰于2009-07-20 20:20发表的 :
我想版主和普通会员人格上也是平等的,大家互相提一些意见自然也很不错,但是有时候,刺难免会伤人,还是不要愈演愈烈才好啊。
我其实是个和平主义者,截至目前没有主动挑过刺,刺不是没有,但毕竟这是个公益活动,大家难得聚在一起交流一下童话的事,多看到一些玫瑰,不是比看刺要轻松些么 表情占位:s:137

哎呀,真抱歉,我才看到你这段话。

看来我这样挑刺让你不高兴了。我要解释一下哈,关于“人格”,我可没有发表任何对您的人格有不尊重的地方。我只是,按您的说法,萝卜白菜各有所爱,刚好不太爱您这种风格的翻译。

当然了,可能我的意见提的有点太直,说话也没注意语气,这个,我向您道歉。我之前已经写的,就不改了,不然显得多虚伪,您多包涵,千万别生气,不然回头猫肯定得K我。

您的文笔是非常好,抛开翻译不说,素馨那个故事如果是您自个儿讲的,那是个多么散发着淡淡忧伤又动人美丽的故事啊。

#20 coffeecat 2009-07-20

这是哪里跑出来的回复?

#21 coffeecat 2009-07-20

引用:
引用第11楼冷绯兰于2009-07-20 20:20发表的  :
我想版主和普通会员人格上也是平等的,大家互相提一些意见自然也很不错,但是有时候,刺难免会伤人,还是不要愈演愈烈才好啊。
我其实是个和平主义者,截至目前没有主动挑过刺,刺不是没有,但毕竟这是个公益活动,大家难得聚在一起交流一下童话的事,多看到一些玫瑰,不是比看刺要轻松些么 表情占位:s:137

啊,原来在这里。刚好在我的话前面,我说怎么莫名其妙胖胖在这儿回复呢。

呃,我想来说一下我的意见。

首先呢,斑竹和普通会员这个,我想胖胖就算挑刺挑得有些过,但我相信她是怀着一颗认真的心去做的,我没觉得她把你放到了不平等的位置上啊。所以这个不必牵涉到讨论范围内,咱们就事论事比较好。

不要觉得被人挑了刺就不舒服,这最起码说明对方认真读了你的文字,你想,我们也不是拿薪水吃饭,专门干这个的,都是抽的空闲时间,胖她孩子才几个月,都肯认真看原文,对比译文。我想,至少她对于你的译文,是非常尊重的。倒是我,没有看到原文,就凭感觉说一下,我自己检讨,这是不认真谨慎的态度。对批评的声音,要有接受的心态,才能更上层楼,

刺的确会让人不舒服的,一开始都这样,但生活中的刺也是必须的。特别是翻译,因为我们要做的,是面向许许多多潜在的读者,面向许多小孩子和他们的家长的事情,我们不挑,拿到他们面前,他们也要挑的啊。我发起这个挑刺的活动,目的就是希望,这里的每篇文字,拿到孩子们面前的时候,尽量少得到来自他们的挑刺。读者的口味还是很刁的。

你的文笔的优美,用词的出色,也是大家有目共睹的,就是胖胖她也有说啊,她并不是否认你翻译得不优美啊。

我顺便做下自我检讨一下,我这个人看到好文笔就走不动,就什么都忘记了。但是,翻译的话,我仍旧是提倡多多听取他人的意见,多多做修改,尽量准确地表现原文。

你的翻译,我回头得空会再仔细对照英文看看的。有什么具体的意见,我回头再说。

另外,我特意把肖毛的一些翻译感想提前了来,你可以看看,感觉一下。我觉得他是非常认真也能够接受意见的人,非常的严谨。我想,最好的翻译,是要有肯修改,勤修改,严谨认真的精神的。我们幻想国,就是鼓励肖毛这样的认真精神的,不论是翻译的人还是阅读的人,都认真一点,最终受益者还是自己。

还有,你文笔这么好,没有考虑做做原创,写写故事,我想会很精彩很好看的。

#22 冷绯兰 2009-07-21

谢谢你,并不是因为你讲了夸赞的话,而是因为你实在很简捷,只看故事、谈论故事 表情占位:s:137

#23 冷绯兰 2009-07-21

斑竹们付出了很多,这是大家有目共睹的。熬到很晚看原文和我的稿子,我也很过意不去。想到我给大家带来这么多麻烦,我还是先归隐一段时间,以后有成熟的稿子再来请亲们指点吧 表情占位:s:134

#24 囡囡妈 2009-07-21

引用:
引用第22楼冷绯兰于2009-07-21 08:55发表的  :
斑竹们付出了很多,这是大家有目共睹的。熬到很晚看原文和我的稿子,我也很过意不去。想到我给大家带来这么多麻烦,我还是先归隐一段时间,以后有成熟的稿子再来请亲们指点吧 表情占位:s:134  小冷同学,你参加的是翻译大赛,不是讲故事比赛,当然大家要仔细看原文和翻译啦。。

其实大家的意见都挺中肯的,主要还是看你自己愿意不愿意接受。。幻想国这里欢迎你随时来玩。图片占位:http://rs.phpwind.net/E___5366ZHJBPWFG.gif图片占位:http://rs.phpwind.net/E___5365ZHJBPWFG.gif图片占位:http://rs.phpwind.net/E___5365ZHJBPWFG.gif

你文笔很不错,考虑考虑玩玩原创吧,去永无岛看看吧。。图片占位:http://rs.phpwind.net/E___5066ZHJBPWFG.gif

#25 雪婴 2009-07-21

首先想请大家看看一直自诩为翻译认真的某些同志的帖子:
译文
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原文
http://www.mythfolklore.net/andrewlang/174.htm

译文
http://dreamkidland.cn/leadbbs/read.php?tid-44699.html
原文
http://www.boop.org/jan/justso/cat.htm

译文
http://dreamkidland.cn/leadbbs/read.php?tid-44246.html
原文
http://www.boop.org/jan/justso/letter.htm

肖毛翻译的小拉斯,对比原文看看,就会发现意译多于直译,而且故意省略了那些关于上帝的桥段,他自己也说最后的诗歌完全是自己“编”的,因为根本无法做到直译。

数卷残编翻译的原来如此的故事,更是让人掉下巴,不但完全抛弃了原著语言风格,用上中国古文风格,而且后面的诗歌也可以说是他“编”的,别说什么语序了,原文根本不是那么回事嘛!

但是为什么他们的“复述”大家就不说什么不尊重原著,完全是自己“写”的,我以为,原因有三,一来,他们确实有很强的文学功底,让人除了瞠目结舌没什么再敢说三道四的胆儿;二来,他们没等别人说他们什么,自己先搞一堆注释,把自己“编”的理由说了个清清楚楚,有这样的注释在,你怎么好说他们是不负责的在编呢,你崇拜这种认真的编造精神还来不及;三来,有人就是喜欢他们的“风格”,就像有人就是不喜欢这位冷君的风格,这就是没办法的事情了,就像很多人就是喜欢叶君健的安徒生,不喜欢任溶溶的夏洛的网。但是,既然是做版主的,做到一碗水端平虽然很难,也不能搞得太过偏心眼,放着那么多有不符合原文的问题的文章不说,单单在这个帖子说那么多,会让人家怎么想?自己的文章也不是没有不按照语序翻译的情况,却把这个问题作为严重bug来挑别人的刺,人家又会怎么想?说理是要服众的,不能说得别人服气,就只不过是吵架,而吵架对提高别人的翻译水平是一点帮助也没有的。

#26 冷绯兰 2009-07-21

最后再补充一句,考虑到近期手头要交的稿子比较多,也许赶不及在7月30日之前改译完《素馨》和《风华公主的项链》,所以我暂时退出比赛,稿子还挂在网上,仅供爱好者非功利之阅读,本人保留一切版权 表情占位:s:137

#27 冷绯兰 2009-07-21

谢谢雪婴,千万不要为了我和各位斑竹起争执,大家都是好人。
能看到你的想法,我就已经很满足和快乐了 表情占位:s:137

#28 囡囡妈 2009-07-21

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引用第24楼雪婴于2009-07-21 09:34发表的  :
首先想请大家看看一直自诩为翻译认真的某些同志的帖子:
译文
../023/23915.html
原文
http://www.mythfolklore.net/andrewlang/174.htm
.......
雪婴,看了你后面的一段话,我先确定了你不是来吵架的,那么咱们就有话好好说。不要带着情绪。

看来你也是下了些功夫的,挑了肖毛的很久远的帖子出来。辛苦了!

冷绯兰的这篇翻译,比《素馨》那篇改动得要少,这点是肯定的。《素馨》那篇是大段的删改,我也说过了,那是“中文缩译版”,不是正经的翻译。当然,本人也不是什么专家,自己的意见而已。其他挑刺的同学也是,都是个人意见,愿意接受就听;不愿意接受就算。。。关于翻译的删改尺度问题,之前大家就有过讨论,你要愿意,也可以去说说自己的观点。不过呢,这个事情一向也是没有定论的,吵了不少年了,没停。。恩,现在也“吵”到幻想国了,蛮好啊,说明大家观点不同,不过,既然大家都在一个论坛里出没,那就求同存异吧。

也正因为观点不同,所以大家在阅读同一个译文的时候,意见也不一致,这是正常的。但不意味着,你和我意见不同,你就要闭嘴;我喜欢意译,你少来挑刺,这个态度就不对了。最起码,不够虚心。。你说是吧?

我本来以为你觉得胖胖同学给人家挑刺是不对的,于是找她的翻译来做对比呢。。赫赫。。

哦,对了,补充一句,俺对数卷的翻译是提过意见的,他的翻译因为要制造“古对古”的效果,所以有时候有失之偏颇之处,且有强说愁之感,,当然,这也都是个人意见。人家是否愿意听都在人家。。论坛是个发言相对自由的地方,有争执是好事,说明这里不是一言堂。。

哦,还要罗唆一句,您可千万别把“版主”这两个字看得太高,比如我吧,就是一特俗的俗人,家里看孩子的一大妈,来小书房呢,是觉得喜欢亲子阅读,来幻想国呢,是期望看到更多好的翻译给孩子们,别的,无它。您别想太多了,累得慌。。真的。。

#29 囡囡妈 2009-07-21

哦,对了,还一事忘了。。(对不起,当妈的人都罗唆些)。。

雪婴同学啊,看你对翻译也蛮有研究的,有没有兴趣也来当版主玩啊? 图片占位:http://rs.phpwind.net/E___5366ZHJBPWFG.gif  图片占位:http://rs.phpwind.net/E___5365ZHJBPWFG.gif

#30 雪婴 2009-07-21

很高兴得到二位版主的糖豆,不过我吃着糖豆还是要说几句听着不甜蜜的话,我觉得版主虽然不算什么大官,但是毕竟意味着一种责任,对会员负责,对版区负责,而翻译这种工作又是极其要求有责任心的严谨学术态度的,所以对翻译的评论向来最少,不是评论家少,而恰恰是这种有责任心的人少,结合这两点,幻想国的版主还真的是责任很重的。我也看了小书房招募版主助理的帖子,自我感觉,还达不到这些要求,所以我除了对这里的版主再次表示敬佩之外,也只能做到没事的时候来灌点水,不过天生好管闲事,看到不平事还是难免要说几句感慨的话,也先请大家原谅则个。最后只希望,这里的言论是真正自由的,版主和会员都能有话好好说,既然是谈学术问题,理性第一,感情上的喜欢不喜欢倒是次要,用无心语伤了有心人,就违背了大家求同存异的本意了。

#31 慕容胖胖 2009-07-21

冷绯兰,你放心,绝对不会起争执的。

我为什么来小书房?因为自己有了孩子,听说小书房推广亲子阅读,我觉得自己需要学习,所以来了。

我为什么在幻想国?因为带孩子无聊,想翻译个东东打发时间,顺便就参参赛。

我为什么当了幻想国的版主?(OMG...拜托以后大家无视我的版主头衔,请将我当成一个跑堂打杂的,万分感谢!)因为当时coffeecat拉我当版主,而我对自己个职位的理解就是加个精啊,提前个帖子啊,人家发了贴,咱勤回复别冷落人家啊……在我看来就是个有时间服务于幻想国的打杂。

综上所述,我绝对没有要跟任何人吵架的,或者针对某个人过不去的心思,也没这个必要。

再说

我为什么挑刺?因为猫说要在幻想国里提倡认真负责的翻译作风。再加上,我的文笔不好,也只能进行一点中英文对照的比较,提提意见。在文字方面,我很少能有什么好的建议。这里文笔好的童子很多,不需要我班门弄斧。

如果不是刚好冷绯兰翻译的风格是“自己怎么高兴怎么翻”的话,我对她的翻译一定是崇拜羡慕的很,既便这样,我一样很羡慕她的文笔。她在《素馨》的开头第一段就把那种天气潮湿的感觉都描述出来了,让读的人也觉得自己身上湿漉漉的。尤其是那句“唉,没治了”,情绪带动的非常好。

冷绯兰不同意我的观点没关系,正如之前的讨论,大家一致认为翻译这个事情的确是各花入各眼,各有千秋。我虽然挑刺儿,但是我也不会强迫别人(当然我也不能)去接受我的观点,我只在对方也是开放态度的时候,会多讨论两句。如果发现对方坚持自己的观点,那我觉得我就没必要再唠叨了,正如这次我发现冷绯兰同学在翻译风格方面是态度是明确的,立场是坚定的,所以我绝对不会再多唠叨自己的那一套。

我发现我自己还真罗嗦哎……BS一下自己先……

说回这次让冷绯兰觉得受委屈的事吧。

我先检讨一下,翻翻自己前面关于冷绯兰的那些意见,口气确实太硬邦邦了,不够柔和。这个这个,我要小小的怪一下幻想国的个别同学,因为以前给他们挑刺也是这样很简单的罗列译文和原文,然后说翻的不准确或者不恰当等等,导致现在我提意见变得很直白,一点也不委婉。不管人家接不接受,至少听着看着不舒服。虽然我本意不是吵架的,但是如果造成人家的误解,应该说责任首先在我。

另外就是,冷同学一上来就说,从今往后,不管是鼓励还是批评,都表示感谢。我一时脑子发晕,唰唰唰就真的提开建议了。连个先赞美再鼓励的过度都没有,更过分的是,我居然一而再再而三的,批评冷同学不按原文翻译。。。。这个这个。。。唉……迂腐啊!

但是,冷绯兰同学请放心,如前所述,当我知道对方有很明确的翻译思路时候,我一定不会再惹人烦的。

#32 囡囡妈 2009-07-21

引用:
引用第29楼雪婴于2009-07-21 10:22发表的  :
很高兴得到二位版主的糖豆,不过我吃着糖豆还是要说几句听着不甜蜜的话,我觉得版主虽然不算什么大官,但是毕竟意味着一种责任,对会员负责,对版区负责,而翻译这种工作又是极其要求有责任心的严谨学术态度的,所以对翻译的评论向来最少,不是评论家少,而恰恰是这种有责任心的人少,结合这两点,幻想国的版主还真的是责任很重的。我也看了小书房招募版主助理的帖子,自我感觉,还达不到这些要求,所以我除了对这里的版主再次表示敬佩之外,也只能做到没事的时候来灌点水,不过天生好管闲事,看到不平事还是难免要说几句感慨的话,也先请大家原谅则个。最后只希望,这里的言论是真正自由的,版主和会员都能有话好好说,既然是谈学术问题,理性第一,感情上的喜欢不喜欢倒是次要,用无心语伤了有心人,就违背了大家求同存异的本意了。 这不甜蜜的话,很中听啊。

版主都是义务的,能来坚持看帖做评论,就已经是相当大的工作量了。而且我个人真没觉得版主和会员有什么本质上的区别,可能就是多个版面管理的任务吧。。幻想国重开,也就是刚刚半年的时间吧,我们大家真的都挺努力的,大家也都相互理解和支持吧!

要不,你先试试?反正来这里做版主也都需要三个月的试用期的。。真的!

#33 慕容胖胖 2009-07-21

嘿嘿,昨天晚上我就看出来雪婴是来砸场子的,你不给我挑刺了啊,别啊,有些刺儿你挑的对着呢,我还打算等你都挑完一起改呢。

我猜你就是给冷君打抱不平的,果然猜中了,啦啦啦~。

现说雪婴第一个帖子说,我们没有批评其他同类型的文章。话说,这个我确实要检讨一下,残编的我基本没怎么去中英文对照的看,因为都是繁体,一看我头皮发麻。其实对于我没去对照看的童子,我心里都很内疚,觉得人家辛苦翻了,我看都不认真看就随便打分。说实话,我心里是一直认为,中英文对照的看一遍之后提建议才是对发帖子的同学负责的态度。雪婴这个批评的确是戳到我的痛处啊。不过,总的来说,我觉得雪婴如果去看看我挑别的同学的刺儿,我是一样有啥说啥的,不说远的,就说近的,茗风的两个帖子,我一样是这样中英文对照着挑刺儿啊。所以,雪婴批评我“也不能搞得太过偏心眼,放着那么多有不符合原文的问题的文章不说,单单在这个帖子说那么多”,我还是觉得有点委屈的。

雪婴关于版主的那段话,我觉得说的非常好。做版主的确不如做普通会员舒服,做普通会员,想说啥说啥,不高兴,大不了我不来你这玩了。版主如果也是这个态度,那可就太糟糕了。我们每一个做版主的,如果都能像雪婴说的那样去考虑问题,我觉得应该是一件很好的事情。

“最后只希望,这里的言论是真正自由的,版主和会员都能有话好好说,既然是谈学术问题,理性第一,感情上的喜欢不喜欢倒是次要,用无心语伤了有心人,就违背了大家求同存异的本意了。”

雪婴,我认为这里的言论的确是真正自由的(只要不是带侮辱性质的)

有话好好说---我以后会注意一下提建议的语气和方式

既然是谈学术问题,理性第一----我同意,理性第一,我提的意见就是基于我对翻译的理解啊

感情上的喜欢不喜欢倒是次要----我发誓我对冷君的帖子不存在感情上喜不喜欢问题,单纯因为她的翻译风格和我理解的翻译是不同的,我的翻译理念我自己也是由始至终一个标准,并没有因人而异。

用无心语伤了有心人,就违背了大家求同存异的本意了---这话是对的,所以如果我伤了谁,还请多担待一下。

#34 coffeecat 2009-07-21

哎咳,我来搅和一句啊。

我首先做自我检讨,我这人以前没当过斑竹,我对于斑竹的理解,和胖就是差不多的,就是个打杂的,“加个精啊,提前个帖子啊,人家发了贴,咱勤回复别冷落人家啊……在我看来就是个有时间服务于幻想国的打杂”,所以我说话回复,很多时候,还是忽略了斑竹的身份和责任,以及别人会怎么看待斑竹说的话这个问题。

但不管别人会怎么看待斑竹这个身份,我想说,幻想国的斑竹们,其实和普通会员没有什么区别,在我们这里,我们就是为这个幻想中的国度服务,无他。所以其实我到现在的理解,仍旧是停留在刚才所说的阶段上。

我是提倡大家有话就说,有刺就挑的,冷姑娘如果不喜欢,我们大家注意一点,我想就可以了。

另外,如果前面胖胖挑刺有点儿过了的话,我想还是我的错。因为我因为没有很多时间在网上,挑刺的时候,就是单纯地列出译文,有时候加上原文,然后说翻的不准确或者不恰当等,没有考虑到对方能不能接受。这个,我会首先从自己做起,尽量多委婉些。如果因为我倡导的这种不委婉的挑刺风,对胖胖产生误导,对楼主产生了伤害的话,我向你们道歉。

我其实很头痛不就事论事,而引申到其他上面去。但是我的态度不变,刺大家仍旧挑,出了问题我负责。

#35 流云之鹰 2009-07-21

神经敏感,爱上纲上线的人总是有的。做的没错就用不着检讨啥。
以后该咋说还咋说,该咋吵架就咋吵架,咱们又没啥亏心的,又没恶意攻击谁,有啥好怕的。爱嚼舌根子的就让她自己嚼去,林子大了什么鸟都有,神仙还不能让人人满意呢。
只要方针做事没错,就放心大胆地继续这么干下去。一个地方总有一个地方的特点,一个地方也总有不适合的人,我们要做的是拉拢留下适合这里的人。不适合的人就让他去别的地方吧,强扭的瓜也不甜

#36 冷绯兰 2009-07-21

各位做得过了。尤其是流云之鹰这段话,我没想到小书房里是这样的——你们可以把别人排挤走,但是人们会知道:这里是一个嫉贤妒能的地方。
一切归根结底,都出于嫉妒——自己不会意译,就说别人意译的不好,甚至干脆妄图抹煞别人的作品是翻译。
我不是律师,也不是大妈,我是翻译,不太清楚为什么要由律师和大妈来给翻译作品评分。
你们尽可以删帖,本冷姑娘就是不在乎,为所有被直译框架束缚的翻译精灵写下这段话,告诉人们:“世界上不光有意译,还有风韵译,翻译的最高境界是神似,而不是形似。”

#37 流云之鹰 2009-07-21

你尽可以用你的意译,版主也尽可以用他们的标准挑你的刺,跟你辩论。这种直来直去的模式应该发扬,而不是为了照顾谁的面子就不说:这是我那段话的意思。

你认为我的话是针对你的吗?你自认为自己忍受不了别人的批评,版主说几句他认为正确的话就是打击你吗?如果你也是持这种认为版主就该和稀泥的想法,那我说的也是你。如果你不认为版主就该照顾会员的面子,说话就该拐着歪,不要直说,那我就说的不是你。

#38 小书房 2009-07-21

有鉴于本贴中的讨论已经背离了学术讨论的范畴,暂时锁贴,各位都需要注意,在评论别人的时候,也应当有最起码的尊重,语言不是刀子,但一样会伤害人,不管是版主还是会员,都应该懂得一点公共场所的自律