万圣夜诗集BEST WITCHES（慢慢翻，慢慢发）

THE MAGIC HOUSE

We should have known when we tasted the eaves,
Breaking them off like toffee
And cramming them into our mouths.
And the dear little windows, the color of coffee,
And chocolate doorknobs,
And windowpanes striped with mint.
We should have guessed at the chimney smoke,
White marshmallow fluff.
Taken the hint
From the marzipan bricks
And the fenceposts made of bone rubble.
But it was only when we saw the witch
That we knew we were in deep, deep trouble.

《魔屋》

尝尝屋檐的滋味，
用手一掰像太妃，
塞进嘴里嚼嚼味。
咖啡小窗有点逗，
巧克力的门把手，
窗玻璃上薄荷流。
烟囱上面轻烟出，
白蜀葵儿来充数。
留点神看见没有，
杏仁软糖做砖头，
栅栏柱子碎骨头。
唯有见到老巫婆，
大的麻烦找上我。

以前牡丹发帖，翻过两首，你可以看看。。../053/53844.html

谢谢囡妈指点，我会好好学习牡丹的译作，然后进一步完善自己的译作。

THE MAGIC HOUSE

We should have known when we tasted the eaves,
Breaking them off like toffee
And cramming them into our mouths.
And the dear little windows, the color of coffee,
And chocolate doorknobs,
And windowpanes striped with mint.
We should have guessed at the chimney smoke,
White marshmallow fluff.
Taken the hint
From the marzipan bricks
And the fenceposts made of bone rubble.
But it was only when we saw the witch
That we knew we were in deep, deep trouble.

魔屋（一修）

屋檐翘，奶糖妙，
掰碎了，嘴里嚼，
有蹊跷，咋不晓？
咖啡色，小窗子，
巧克力，门把子，
薄荷粒，窗玻璃。
棉花糖絮轻烟载，
烟囱古怪咋不猜？
杏仁蛋白褐色砖，
累累白骨划地盘，
还不闪开好大胆？
唯有见到老巫婆，
才知麻烦找上我。

WITCH PIZZA

No anchovies,
Lots of cheese,
Amanita
Mushrooms, please.

Top with herbs
Both hot and chivey,
And some extra
Poison ivy.

巫婆饼
没有凤尾鱼，
多浇鲜奶酪；
伞菌蘑菇俏，
一个不能少。

洒点野生草，
香辣好味道；
再加一小勺，
断肠毒藤草。

KNOCK, KNOCK
I'm a specter, I'm a spirit,
I'm a revenant, a shade,
I'm a disembodied being
And the fiercest ever made.
       Go away,
       I see your feet.
       You're just Diane
       In a white bed sheet.
I'm a phantom, I'm a shadow,
I'm a vision, I'm a haunt,
I'm an insubstantial presence.
It's your blood I really want.

Go away,
       I see your feet.
       You're just Marie
       In a white bed sheet.
I'm a banshee, I'm an aura,
I'm a grave shape, I'm a ghost,
I'm an ectoplasmic sighting
And I'd like some tea and toast.
       Go away…oh, no,
       My gosh, it's true!
       I'm getting out of here….
BOO!
HOO!

《鬼敲门》
我是妖怪，我是幽灵，
我是鬼魂，我是阴影，
我存在，我无形
凶残无比是我本性。

快跑，快跑，
我看见你的脚。
你是黛安，
蒙着白床单。

我是幻影，我是阴影，
我是魅影，我是鬼影，
我虚幻，我无形。
你的血让我动了心。

快跑，快跑，
我看见你的脚。
你是玛丽，
蒙着白床单。

我是妖精，我是光影，
我是坟灵，我是幽灵，
我透明，我无形，
我要喝茶吃点心。

快跑，快跑，
太糟糕，它是真妖！
我撒腿就逃…

嘘！
呼！

你集中发到一贴里吧，别重复发帖了。。

KNOCK KNOCK这首诗，有点对话的性质，2、4、6节是被吓唬的小孩说的话。Go away, 这句理解有误，应该是小孩轰对方呢，被吓的小孩不怕，所以哄对方走开。

SPELLS
I need no spell to get me through
A tangled fence of briars.
I need no spell to help me pass
A wall of burning fires.

I need no spell to make a dress
Of silk from one of chintz.
I need no spell to turn a frog
Into a handsome prince.

But if you've got a spell around
That gets my homework right,
Or one that makes my mother think
I've gone to bed at night,

Or one that takes the garbage out,
Or one that feeds the cat,
I'd pay you my allowance
If you had a spell like that!

《魔咒》
我不要魔咒穿越
石南篱笆的纠缠。
我不要魔咒穿越
烈焰火墙的阻拦。

我不要魔咒逞强
变粗布为霓裳。
我不要魔咒放肆
变青蛙为王子。

若你有魔咒在手
让我做对功课，
或者让老妈住口
相信我晚上睡了，

或把垃圾清理，
喂饱我的猫咪，
我就付你银子，
这个魔咒给力！

或者让老妈住口 ——这句哪里冒出来的？

这个魔咒给力！ ——这句完全不对上下文啊，不通啊。

整体感觉，你再体会体会吧，本来是很有趣的小女生的那点小念头，再厉害的魔法，都没有能帮到她写作业啦干好家务的实惠。。

看到囡妈的点评很高兴，谢谢您的指正。

“或者让老妈住口”这句是我翻译时加上去的，原文确实没有。我加这句话一方面是为了押韵，一方面我想如果妈妈看到孩子晚上迟迟不睡觉，一定会反复催促的。“这个魔咒给力”也是为了押韵和增加幽默感。

我觉得翻译诗歌可以意译，不必太拘泥原文的字眼和语序。

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原文出处 - 上海金融学院外语系:[重点课程] 翻译理论与实践

“意译”也不等于“乱译”

② 意译和乱译（胡译）
只有在正确理解原文的基础上，运用相应的翻译方法以调整原文结构，用规范的汉语加以表达，这才真正做到“意译”。如果把“意译”理解为凭主观臆想来理解原文，可以不分析原文结构，只看词面意义，自己编造句子，势必造成“乱译”（胡译）。

谢谢你的关注，我的诗歌翻译并没有乱译。

HOW TO SPELL
（A Jump Rope Rhyme）
Cross your fingers, cross your eyes,
Touch your tongue to nose.
Turn three times with creature cries,
That’s how a good spell goes.

Mutter things that start with X,
Turn widdershins about.
Cross your heart and hold your breath,
For O-U-T spells OUT!

《开开口，说魔咒》
（一首跳绳歌）
手指叉叉，眼神勾勾，
伸伸舌头，碰碰鼻头。
鬼哭狼嚎，转上三周，
魔咒魔咒，开个好头。

咕咕哝哝，小声念咒，
转转身体，反转一周。
默默发誓，屏息等待，
出来出来，变个出来！

SILLY QUESTIONS
For the witch’s tv show
Here are things you have to know
If you want to win a prize.
Are you Halloweeny wise?
What is a witch with poison ivy called?
AN ITCHY WITCHY. (Yukka-yukka-yukka!)

For the witch’s tv show
Here are things you have to know
If you want to win a prize.
Are you Halloweeny wise?
Who does a ghoul fall in love with?
HIS GHOUL FRIEND. (Yukka-yukka-yukka!)

For the witch’s tv show
Here are things you have to know
If you want to win a prize.
Are you Halloweeny wise?
Where do vampires live?
IN THE VAMPIRE STATE BUILDING. (Yukka-yukka-yukka!)

For the witch’s tv show
Here are things you have to know
If you want to win a prize.
Are you Halloweeny wise?
Who are some of the werewolf’s cousins?
THE WHAT WOLVES AND THE WHEN WOLVES. (Yukka-yukka-yukka!)

All my questioning is through,
Now the rest is up to you.
You have passed the witch’s test.
Now you must make up the rest!

《傻傻的问题》
巫婆电视秀，
大奖谁拿走，
答题答题，好好加油。
你是万圣节智慧达人吗？
拿毒藤的巫婆是神马巫婆？
挠痒痒的巫婆。（哈哈—嘿嘿—嚯嚯！）

巫婆电视秀，
大奖谁拿走，
答题答题，好好加油。
你是万圣节智慧达人吗？
饿死鬼会爱上谁？
一起盗尸的饿死鬼。（哈哈—嘿嘿—嚯嚯！）

巫婆电视秀，
大奖谁拿走，
答题答题，好好加油。
你是万圣节智慧达人吗？
吸血鬼住在哪？
吸血鬼大厦。（哈哈—嘿嘿—嚯嚯！）

巫婆电视秀，
大奖谁拿走，
答题答题，好好加油。
你是万圣节智慧达人吗？
狼人有哪些堂亲表亲？
饿狼人和恶狼人。（哈哈—嘿嘿—嚯嚯！）

我的问题问完啦，
下面就看你的啦。
你通过巫婆测试啦，
下面就看你的啦！

THE FOSSILOT
You cannot find a Fossilot
Except in ancient stones,
Where imprints of its teeth and claws
Lie jumbled with its bones.

Some scientists cleaned up the bones,
Arranged, then tried to date them.
But when they had the jaw complete—
It turned around and ate them.

《化石》
化石实难觅，
古石堆里寻，
齿印爪印在，
白骨一起存。

专家研骨头，
年代排仔细。
下巴才拼齐，
它就吃掉你。

THE OLD MAN OF THE WOOD
I went into the willow-wood
To strip a branching bare,
And spied an old man by a stream
With leaves in place of hair.

His fingers were like thorny twigs,
His knuckles knobs of bone,
His legs were gray and heavy
As if carven out of stone.

His face was seamed with jagged lines
And crusted hard as bark,
His voice was whispery like the wind
That haunts the woods at dark.

He said but this one thing to me
That long I’ve pondered on:
“Your kind is like the yearwood,
Quickly harvested, then gone.”

《林间老翁》
我进一片柳林子，
剥光一根柳树枝，
看见老翁傍小溪，
头上满是树叶子。

他的手指像荆棘，
关节鼓得像瘤子，
两条腿儿重兮兮，
灰得就像大理石。

脸上皱纹杂又密，
又粗又硬像树皮，
声音低沉似风起，
伴着夜色叫人悸。

他只说了一句话，
让我久久难忘怀：
“你们像树一年生，
成熟太快消失快。”